Erosion

The mighty mountain 

built from moments 

and memories

standing on 

a solid foundation

rock-strong, weather beaten, scarred 

by the lessons 

of (human) nature...

erosion is a b***h.

Reviews

[Relic]

Life is the wind and water that erodes us. Good poem Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

Indeed, shapes us - like the sculptor's hands... Thank you, Relic.

[Relic]

You're welcome Rita.

[redflutterby]

I can relate to this one Rita. It can be applied not just to an individual but also to relationships in particular marriage. Many things erode strength but still we stand the effects for all the world to see. Wonderful write!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Red!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like this...no matter how strong we are emotionally...too much heartbreak is going

to eventually wear us down...those mountains can be taken down...the heart erodes.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Jacob.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

That it is, but what through all of the adversity of its environment, stands stronger than the mountain? Inspirational words here, Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

That is the hope, Travis - that the mountain still stands, even after the storms... Thank you.

[Frieda P]

Bitchin metaphor Rita, how do you do it, so few words that clobber you over the head and say pay attention, now!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Frieda - a bit of that chipping away going on - kind of wrote itself...

[Ai Lun]

This is a very interesting poem. I believe it's about the troubles in life that everyone must go through which in turn alters us. I am not mature enough yet to fully understand, but I believe that your poem is a great explanation of the woe that is brought on people by the circumstances of life. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Aaron. We bring on a lot ourselves, but then circumstances can wear us down further...

[00000000000000000000000..]

It sure is the mother of all b*****s! Great write:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Sometimes it feels that way... Thanks, Jon!

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Yep welcome Rita dear friend:)

[Cassie]

yes yes yes.....erosion is a b***h, i like the lessons of human nature...

[Rita L. Sev]

We learn new ones each day... Thanks, Cassie!

[Sami Khalil]

A powerful write. I like the metaphor alot. You are comparing the towering human nature to the natural elements of a mountain. That is sooo clever by you. Then the effects of erosion on both. That is amazing...:)......

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..............

[Jack...]

Indeed it is Rita. My skin can attest to that. This was a very charming poem. You do have a way of bringing what is natural to us in a brand new light. Very, very nice my friend.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Jack! I appreciate your kindness.