What I Do Not Love About You...

An unlove poem

A gentleman in the bakery

          with a racing form in the back pocket

          of his faded jeans

 

stopped me short

 

And simple recollections gathered

behind my dry-out-in-public eyes

 

~ Sunday morning diner breakfasts

~ silly songs you’d sing

~ dancing to Daddy’s Little Girl

 

Warmed on this cold autumn morning

          to the point of burn

 

I loved everything about you, but

 

…I do not love

          missing you…

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

Rita, my oh my, we should be tested by ESP experts. You wrote exactly what I have been think all day.

[Rita L. Sev]

Really? That is pretty cool, and eerie at the same time!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is such an intriguing piece Rita. I don't love missing you...

reminds me of the movie "ten things i hate about you"

she hated herself for liking him---

it is not fun to miss an ex...for whatever reason we have lost that person.

really like the set up early and how the story moves through the poem.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Jacob... as usual, when I write of missing a loved one - it's my Dad. Loss is never easy, no matter what form it takes...

[Sami Khalil]

I don't claim to get the meaning of this poem but I do like it...Thank you for sharing...:)..............

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sami. There is a contest to write an "unlove" poem. There is not much in my life that I don't love - except the fact that my father is gone. He sneaks into my more morose writes...

[Sami Khalil]

OK. I get it now...Thank you for the clarification. I like it more now...:).............

[icelandicblue]

Oh this is simply beautiful. I love the format and the ending was so powerfully poignant. This is really a fantastic poem.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Blue. I don't do these often, so I'm always glad when someone gets it...