Vacuum

So, where DOES time go?

I’m convinced my vacuum cleaner

has gotten too much power;

it’s not just picking up the dirt,

it’s sucking up the hours.

 

They must be trapped inside ~

I’ll search each crevice in it

until I find all that lost time,

and reclaim every minute.

 

Wouldn’t it be wonderful,

a grand cosmic maneuver,

to answer “Where does time go?”

with “It’s just inside the Hoover.”

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Blame it on the vacuum cleaner! I love it! Such a fun write, Rita. Your rhyme, as always, is flawless. Lydi**

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Lydi! :)

[shallimarRose]

ha... too cute... thanks for the rr Rita.. xo

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Rose! :)

[Marie]

THat's quite an idea...somewhere a huge vacuum sucking up all our time...if only it could be emptied...

[Rita L. Sev]

And redistributed to people who will do great things with the time...

[Baby Ricochet]

HA! Too Funny. Good one Rita

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you :)

[kublakhan27]

A playful metaphor but substantial as well...I think this one could go both ways thematically...lots of wit and thoughtful imagery...great work my friend :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, K - It is a question everyone asks. And since we really cannot hold onto Time, we need to value it like gold...

[Ed Hart]

i know this is grown up and friendly humor, but i can't help thinking it belongs in a children's poetry anthology

[Rita L. Sev]

Children see the passage of time, too - I'll be sharing with my students... Thanks, Ed!

[Jack...]

This one really sucks Rita...I mean that in a nice way. :) Very cute and very well done. This is a Rita all the way.

[Rita L. Sev]

Gee, thanks, Jack! Lol!

[Angel]

ROFLOL!!! This is wonderful! Now I'm gonna have to check my own vacuum cleaner... I know my little grand daughter can't possibly be fourteen already! Why, wasn't only last week she was taking her first steps? I won't ask "where did the time go" any more...you've solved the mystery!

[Rita L. Sev]

Exactly! Lol! Thanks, Angel!

[Sami Khalil]

A thought provoking poem with a lot of truth . A very good comparison ...Bravo

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Rocans]

Perhaps black holes are the vacuum cleaners of the earth...quite a peculiar but brilliant poem. This has your poetic voice written all over it. I enjoyed it a lot, I wish it were longer though

[Rita L. Sev]

Good theory. Thanks, Rocans!