Crowning Glory

I’ve been a blonde,

I’ve dyed it red,

I’ve crimped and permed and curled

 

Now straight brown

with silver streaks

is the crown I show the world

 

If a woman’s hair is her glory,

then as far as I’m concerned

ignore my hair

and look at where

real glory has been earned

Author's Note

Just thinking about all the crazy thing I have done to my hair over the years... it's a wonder it didn't all fall out!

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

Lovely piece but I can't help wanting to add...look at my a*s. lol. Need more coffee.

[Rita L. Sev]

LOL! Something like:
My hair was my beauty
but now that's past
for a better viewread moreLOL! Something like:
My hair was my beauty
but now that's past
for a better view
check out my a*s... ?

Thanks, Pryde!

[Pryde Foltz]

Haha. Definitely

[ShelleyA]

I love the title Rita. It captured my attention right away. A good write that's clever and a fun read. I enjoy the humor. Playful. Good imagery, flow and tone. Line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and enjambment. Good rhyme and unique rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece (curled, world; hair, where; concerned, earned). Nice use of envelope rhyme in your final stanza. Good depth of feeling and an amusing piece. I can relate. Although I've never colored my hair, I had permed and gheri curled my hair until 30 years ago when I cut my hair short and went natural. I've been happier ever since. Good word choice. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Shelley - I'm glad you enjoyed this and can relate! Ah, the days of the gheri curl... :) I am blonde in my wedding pics - what was I thinking? LOL!

[ShelleyA]

I hear you Rita, and you're very welcome. Sometimes I wonder what I was thinking when I look at old pictures of me with a gheri curl. Take care and have a great day!

[SteveB]

Well done Rita. A homage to those of a certain age who have earned the grey. Great rhyme and meter as always. You have an ear and always use it well.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Steve! I had a feeling you would use the term "those of a certain age..." ;) Appreciate your review! Heard you read last night, by the way - enjoyed very much!

[SteveB]

Do you mean I am predictable?

Thanks for listening. How do you like my theme music and when are you calling in?

[Rita L. Sev]

Predictable - not at all! LOL

The theme music was great - chuckled when I realized - hey, that's Steve - and he has theme music! :)
I am rarely so awake at that time (remember, I'm a morning person...) I am going to make an effort to tune in - and I just may call in one of these weeks...

[SteveB]

Great. I am also pushing Angi to call. Did you hear Jack?

[Rita L. Sev]

Yes - he read Sarah's "Sunflowers" - very nice! Angi has some good pieces - she'd be great!

[SteveB]

Tell her! For some reason she doesn't trust a NY lawyer.

[Rita L. Sev]

:) .......

[Heather Burns]

I am guilty of the same. But now nature has had her way. a cute and light poem I enjoyed the read

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much - I am glad you enjoyed this!

[shallimarRose]

LOL I think you mean your eyes??

This was a bit of wit.... Age is just a number so is the color I use... Nice read.. xo Rose

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! ;) Thank you, Rose!

[Sharon Kim]

The title is perfect! My silver streaks agree with you. Lol!
I love the flow in the first two stanzas, I'm wondering if you changed the order slightly in the last part to:
If a woman's glory
is her hair
then as far as I'm concerned

ignore my hair
and look at where
real glory has been earned

for me, it would feel more consistent with the beginning of the poem - just a thought, not sure if it slightly changes your meaning... :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sharon! I wasn't sure about the flow in that last part; the first line was "If a woman's hair's her glory..." but that tripped the tongue. I like your solution, and it keeps the meaning intact - Thank you so much!

[SyberRose]

A fun read Rita...I also have had hair of all colors too...and i'll be glad when one day I just age
gracefully and stop being so vain haa...no make up or anything...men are lucky they just roll out of bed and get a shower and they are set for the day...Rose

[Rita L. Sev]

So true, Rose! When I think especially of what I put my hair through in the 80s... LOL! Thanks for reading!