A Day at the Beach

senryu

A day at the beach

should've tied those strings tighter

bikini mishap

Author's Note

No, this did not happen to me. But it does happen to some... ;)

Reviews

[Stella Armour]

haha... memories...haha...

[Rita L. Sev]

LOL! :) Interesting comment, Stella!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and we needed a good laugh, here.

so thanks, Rita...

and i didn't look...well, maybe i looked a little.

[Rita L. Sev]

:) Thanks, Jacob. You will be rewarded for your honesty, I'm sure! (darn - I just realized that "wardrobe malfunction" would have fit too...)

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rita. This Senryu made me laugh. Perfect form of 17 syllables or less. Imagery and descriptives are vivid; you paint quite an amusing picture with your words that any reader can appreciated. Good depth of feeling; I like the surprise ending in line three. Good word choice; nice alliteration and assonance. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Shelley! I always feel bad for laughing when this happens to someone - but hey, they really should tie those strings tighter! :)

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Rita.

[Constance Payne]

This made me smile. OMGosh....I have been there done that....seeing and the mishap.
Excellent

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! I avoid bikinis for this reason! :) Thanks, Constance!