The Great Flood

Waiting for the Rainbow...

A drop in the bucket

          quickly filled the barrel

          the overflow

seeping across boundaries,

          dampening even the sinless edges

 

Bright-print umbrellas

          gave some protection

          until the deluge,

leaving no one safe from drowning

 

Two by two,

          came on safe to that ancient Ark

 

One by one they flee,

          for it is the Ark that now floods

Reviews

[Marie]

It seems we are safe no where, Rita. A personal life preserver is the best protection.

[Rita L. Sev]

That is the best idea, Marie. Thanks.

[Troy Henson]

A problem arises so we do our best to help. Do our best to hinder the unwanted...sometimes what we do is not enough.

Great write.

Regards
Troy

[Rita L. Sev]

Exactly. Thank you, Troy!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what irony of situation...now the ark floods...we can protect ourselves from the elements but we can't protect us from ourselves....can we?

nicely done, Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

No, we cannot. Thank you, Jacob.

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rita. A good write and rendering for the great flood. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct. Could this also be a metaphor for trouble that comes in our daily lives and instead of holding to course, the inhabitants flee. Just a thought. Imagery and descriptives are vivid. Nice twist in the last two lines. Well penned. Write on!

[Rita L. Sev]

You got it spot on, Shelley! Trouble that comes, where we think all is well - good eye for metaphor! Thank you!

[ShelleyA]

You're welcome Rita. It's always a pleasure to read your poetry.

[Angi]

One by one they flee, alright. These droplets are far reaching, aren't they? Sad, sad, sad. Angi~

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Angi...

[Clockwork]

I like how you put that new twist on the idea of the great flood story. You how us that in our age, in this situation, there is something that floods the great Ark, and leaves us vulnerable to the storms that enter our lives. The detail about the bright umbrellas makes me think the situation is more of a modern one, maybe something evolving social interactions. I think if that is the case, this piece takes the idea of the flood story, which described the displeasure of God for the behavior of his people, and sort of applies it in a new setting. Aside from that though, there is a deep seeking for that rainbow, that olive branch that says that everything is going to be OK. Well done with this one.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, C. You got it - social interactions. A safe haven may become a dangerous place, due to human frailty.

[Clockwork]

You're welcome. It is a great shame when that happens.