My Cross

Playing with forms again

Alone

in the

worry

that I cannot set right

all the struggles in the

hearts

of mine

Are my

actions

enough

to show

care, or

is this just

a   cross

  that I bear  

Reviews

[rhythm&blues]

Very nicely done, and a good read also.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, R&B

[Gene Denham]

Very impressive. One of the best visual layouts of a poem I've seen.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much! I appreciate it.

[Aethereal]

Now how did I miss this poem for so long for you know how much I enjoy doing forms too. Great work here. Your message and the symbol match. I wonder if I can do a cross that has meter, message and rhyme. If I should try it, it would need to be a large one.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Aethereal. This was more of a challenge than I thought it would be. I want to try some other forms, too. I'd love to see what you come up with!

[Zeverin Kpai]

This I can not imagine. The details or the lack of details is overbearing.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you for reading.

[Frieda P]

Wow Rita, simple yet highly effective...nice one! You must have had a serious breakfast this morning. ;-)

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Posted this the other day - this morning's musings are not quite so stylin' -LOL! Thanks, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

What no swimming in Frootlooperss? ;-) My pleasure always!

[Rita L. Sev]

Oh, I'm working on one of those... always with those Loops!

[Frieda P]

Haha hey frootloops are cute! ;-P

[Stella Armour]

well done Rita..the cross is very symbolic..

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Stella

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rita. A very creative write. Heartfelt and introspective. Thoughtful. Skillfully crafted concrete poetry. Flow is good as is the line to line transition. Nice enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling. I can relate to them. Well penned. Write on!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Shelley.

[ShelleyA]

You're welcome.

[kublakhan27]

Very creative and unique, the form you've gone with here is a perfect fit...it makes me think about how hard it really is to be kind-hearted in a world that tests one's goodwill on an all too regular basis...your sentiments are so simple and yet so deep...I really like this one :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much. I am playing with simple forms; harder than I thought!

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure, and I hear you on that haha I don't know if I've even tried this particular kind of form before :P

[SyberRose]

Wow nicely done...Im catching up on all your poems..this is a nice one Rita:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Rose!

[Marie]

Lovely form you've given this. For some it's worry, for some it's guilt...for some it's simply a memory...

[Rita L. Sev]

True. Thank you.