Lullaby

A rhyming nonet

Night winds whisper a sweet lullaby

ready to tuck me in to sleep

the night-light moon will guide me

as I lay counting sheep

the stars, a blanket

covering all

while I, to

slumber

fall

Author's Note

Playing with forms

Reviews

[Aethereal]

I just love reading nonets. It seems that you did it. Your first line inspired me to write another one of my rhyming nonets. It's on my page now. It's called Nature's Gift. Thanks for the inspiration!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Aethereal - I'll go check that out! This was a fun one to write - I'll try another soon.

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rita. I love the teddy bear, goes very well with your poem. A very good write and skillfully crafted Nonet. Perfect syllabic form. Beautiful imagery. Good flow and rhythm. Nice use of metaphor. Lovely depth of feeling. Peaceful. Good word choice; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Shelley. I am trying different forms, and a nonet may rhyme (but it is not required). Given the choice, I try for the rhyme - it's more of a challenge! (I liked the Teddy Bear, too!) :)

[ShelleyA]

I love writing in form and you did a great job with the Nonet.

[SyberRose]

Another nice one...marie likes blue ...i like pink haa

[Rita L. Sev]

And, as everyone knows, I love green! :) Thanks!

[SyberRose]

that is a pretty shade of green.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Mother nature is the ultimate parent. Very enjoyable read.

[Rita L. Sev]

Yes she is! Thank you, Dale.

[Marie]

This is a very nice form...though I would have liked the colour blue better...

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you! I almost went with blue... this seemed to be a "sleepy" green.

[Angel]

It has a sleepy feel to it *yawn*
almost as if you *yawn*
were falling *yawn*
asleep...

zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

[Rita L. Sev]

I hope you enjoyed your nap! Thanks, Angel!

[Angel]

*rubs eyes...glances up blearily* huh?


zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like how it flows and I like how you did the format...sometimes when breaking the lines to be shorter can throw off the meaning or rhythm but you did a great job to keep it going.

Good Job

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Peace Keeper! The form of a nonet is 9 syllables, then 8, then 7 and so one. I was a bit daunted trying to get this to rhyme and maintain a flow. I'm glad it seems to have worked!

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

xD Yeah I kinda figured. I never tried anything like this before but it seems interesting and yet hard at times lol You're welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nicely done, Rita...night winds like a parent, tucking us in...

like that.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Jacob! (Really, thank you. Now I am over 25...) ;)