Stellar Explorations

You know what they say about the unexamined life...

The universe within me

is largely unexplored

I’ve concocted constellations

that have somehow gone ignored

 

The time is ripe to launch a quest

to stars among my visions

where heart and soul and dreams combine;

the best of all collisions

 

Return to Earth, now satisfied,

my inner world complete,

fortunate to find the ground

firmly at my feet

Author's Note

Doing some inner star-gazing...

captcha: ungotten

Reviews

[Rocans]

Your opening line made me think of a very interesting theory that I read some time ago about the human mind/body being a hologram of the universe. Anyway, this one was well put-together. "fortunate to find the ground though... sometimes in my night-time imaginings I wish I could get lost within it all. Good write, though I wish you had continued for a couple more stanzas.

[Rita L. Sev]

Hmmm... seems that I may have to expand on this concept. I really like that theory - pretty cool idea! Thanks, Rocans!

[lMarling]

Wow, love the rhyming in the second stanza - it flows naturally. This is a great poem - I think you should make it into a longer piece - could be an excuse to articulate what it is you found on your inner quest as well.

[Rita L. Sev]

That's a thought. I don't usually go much longer than this, but a companion piece might have to be in the works. Thank you so much, LM!

[Tate Morgan]

Oh man this si the greatest poem And most stirring i can remember here in some time.So well thought out So well put. I commend you for this It is enlightening it is fresh . Bravo

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Tate - I truly appreciate your kind review!

[Aethereal]

I enjoyed your use of the universe metaphor to express the world within. I was inspired to make your first verse flow better by using 0/0/0/ six syllable meter in each line. Your may have this as a gift. It may be sung:

My universe within
is largely unexplored.
My constellations there
have not been underscored.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you very much, Aethereal.

[Baby Ricochet]

We are all made of star dust. The table of elements says so. Great poem.

[Rita L. Sev]

So did Carl Sagan... :) Thanks, Mark!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Every now and then we must soul search so we can analyze is we are the person we want to be... a delightfully spiritual poem.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Dale. Much appreciated

[ANTO]

beautifully crafted Rita
"where heart and soul and dreams combine;
the best of all collisions" - loved this!

I read once that (paraphrasing) "..the milky way and the universe could be the dirt under a very big entities fingernails.."

Just saw in your 'Authors Note' 'capchta: ungotten' (hah! that gives me an idea for a piece) lol

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Anto! I like that saying a lot!
The captchas are sometimes eerily related to a write - can't wait to see what you do with this one!

[ANTO]

No pressure then Rita...lol
X

[Rita L. Sev]

Lol! No, none at all! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that part of us that is completely unexplored, and alien in a sense...we need to believe...there is a special part of us that is out there.

nicely written.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Jacob. I do believe...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's like "the X Files" of introspection.

:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! "The Truth... is in here!" :)

[David Scott]

We need these explorations...
The key is getting back to Earth eventually.
A very nice little trip in thought.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you. I do like to keep my feet on the ground.