Revival

Happy first day of Summer!

Senses overwhelmed

by this day that’s never been;

Embrace it in this moment,

and pray to meet its twin

 

No gloom of cloud prevails

upon the azured skies,

the birdsong a cacophony;

avian allies

 

From Heaven’s vault, a lemon burst

of joy on face and fields

while lime flavors each blade of grass,

the kiss of Life revealed

 

Blinded by the rapture of

this estival arrival

miraculous, the healing touch ~

June’s spiritual revival

 

Author's Note

This is the perfect day for Summer's arrival.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i missed this one my friend! killer third verse says i! absolutely enjoy the taste of sun and grass ..brilliant young lady ..simply brilliant! and thank you for my new word "estival" ;)
school is well underway for you ... and you must be settled enough in the new digs .. tho i am sure a few things remain .. i have 2 boxes that have not been opened for 20 yrs or more ... ;) but i am content ... i must not need anything in them ... love and peace Rita!
E.

[Angi]

Summer, schlummer! I want it to snow, already! Ha! Beautiful poem, if you like that kind of weather. Hee hee Angi~

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Thanks, Angi! I don't like the heat, but that first day around here was really lovely. Now, of course, it's been hot, humid and stormy - a real Philly summer...

[Jennifer Gladen]

Love the imagery in the poem :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Mrs. G! It's been much hotter and rainier since then! :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Well done, an excellent tango with words.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks! :)

[Jack...]

Well Rita, I read this a few days late, but it is 99 degrees outside here right now, so I guess I got here just in time. Very nice my phriend

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Jack! It's been over 90 in Philly all week; that first day of summer was a cool, breezy tease! :)

[Baby Ricochet]

I live in Florida. The summer's about 98000 degrees. It's still a great poem. Even if the summer in Florida blows.

[Rita L. Sev]

Once the humidity in Philly cranks into high gear, it sucks around here too. We have just been lucky to have a few really beautiful days to kick off summer this year. Thanks, Mark!

[lMarling]

In the second stanza last line, there's one too many syllables - "avian allies", try reducing a syllable.

I think you use complicated words very well, without losing the simplicity of your poetry.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you; I truly appreciate it! I think I will eliminate the word "of" in that line - that will reduce the syllables and keep that bit of alliteration. Thanks again, LM!

[Zahra]

wonderful, eloquent piece welcoming summer beautifully.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Voice!

[Rogue]

Lovely wording in this... It sounds like a perfect summer day. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

It was indeed! Thank you, Rogue!

[Marie]

THis is a perfect poem for Summer's arrival.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you sincerely, Marie!