Kiss

Senryu challenge piece

Tantalizing kiss

that lasts until the stars fall

making time stand still

Author's Note

A fantasy kiss...

Reviews

[Sanober]

This is absolutely precious....one of the most tenderly romantic odes to a kiss ever! Just lovely....you are so good with this form of poetry!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much - I truly appreciate it!

[Rahul]

wow, what a fantasy kiss, hope you've got it...lol :P
i lk=iked this piece, your realness, your smoothness of word, your thoughts and your theme. nicely penned. It'd be great reading if you try to write more on it,,,but it's enough i think and elaborated everything about your tittle/ :P

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Rahul. It was meant to be a short piece - a senryu for a writing challenge. I'm glad you enjoyed!

[Holly Mason]

what a lovely kiss
thank you for sharing teach

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Holly!

[Djourrisse Appleby]

Electrifying???

[Rita L. Sev]

:) Thanks for reading!

[Djourrisse Appleby]

n_n

[redflutterby]

Sigh....the perfect kiss!! Love this one!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Red!

[Angi]

So meltingly romantic. Nothing like a really good kiss. Lovely, Rita!

[Rita L. Sev]

Everything starts with this... Thanks, Angi!

[Shaun Payton]

A forever impressioned kiss upon the soul.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you for your lovely comment, Shaun!

[Shaun Payton]

You are welcome Rita:)

[chicagogirlonce]

THIS IS SO NICE I COULD FEEL THE SWEET SURRENDER IN IT==THE WORDS FEEL SOFT -JUST LIKE A KIISS,THANK YOU FOR THEIR FEATHERY SOFTNESS--LOVE YOUR SHORTER POEMS-GETS THE POINT ACROSS MORE INTENSELY,I THINK,WHEN LESS IS MORE

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Girl! These short pieces are fun, a bit of a challenge - give them a try - they never rhyme! :)

[chicagogirlonce]

Def will!

[Stella Armour]

love the romance in this Rita... beautifully penned

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you!