Karma

We find what we ARE... A senryu series

I sought fresh snow peas

at the farm market today

they were delicious

 

My words craved release

so I filled up my inkwell

and embraced the page

 

Holding bitterness

I tasted poison in all

now I am no more

 

 

Author's Note

I believe that if we carry joy, and seek joy, that is what we will find. Conversely, misery seeks misery. I have seen some writers here that seem bent on finding harm, and have left the site spewing venom. I have come seeking kindred spirits, and that is just what I have found.
*jumps down from her soapbox...*

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

I may not entirely agree with the author's note,
I do however like the piece and the sentiment of it. I agree most who seek misery shall surely find it without question. but I think also we live in a time and world when it is far to easy for misery to find a way to shadow anyone's door step. On the same page misery is a necessary evil in understanding and appreciating joy. Damn my duality as always. Great piece Rita, I still stand by not a fan of haiku and senryu poetry. I respect it, but find it most often lacking heft. Good write and good read thanks Rita.
Sincerely
Christopher
100/100

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Christopher. I fear that my author's note was misconstrued by some, but those were my feelings at the time. Haiku and senryu are starting to grow on me, and are a good challenge. :) You are right that sometimes misery finds us, but I try to keep that door closed...

[unsavable_soul]

Smart choice to keep it closed,
I feel you on the challenge part, lately reviewing and writing at all have been a challenge. On the note aspect, merely voicing an opinion on the thoughts. I of course had no intent to offend. Hope you're well and the writing keeps flowing.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Aethereal]

There's wisdom in this. We must think of life as being the floor beneath an apple tree. All around are fallen apples. Some apples are rotten, some are sour, but a few are beautiful and delicious. We find those apples that we expect to find. A rotten mentality finds rotten apples, a sour mentality finds sour apples, a sweet mentality finds sweet apples.

[Rita L. Sev]

Love this analogy! Thank you so much, Aethereal!

[Kristin Lee]

Interesting how seemingly unrelated thoughts can in the end string together. Thoughts after all make us or break us. Very creative.

It's sad that people would be hell bent on finding harm. There is enough harm in the world that finds us.

[Rita L. Sev]

So true. Thank you, Kristin!

[Chris]

Careful, soapboxes can be very slippery...

Karma... an apt title.

Breath carries no price -
but the pausing to catch it...
is another thing.

Chris

[Rita L. Sev]

You are so right about soap boxes, Chris! Thank you for the lovely senryu in your comment!

[Marie]

Excellent senyrus Rita. I deleted all the "friends" who left here and blocked them. They don't need writer's Cafe; it doesn't need them.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Marie. I agree.

[Stella Armour]

a lovely trio of senryu here Rita....i like to see these Japanese short forms.. :o)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Stella! I like the short forms, too - I need to try more of them. :)

[Will]

Preach, Rita, Preach! This is certainly one of your more powerful pieces, Rita. It breathes like a living being, and the way you've formatted it makes it even more creaturely. The sentiment is one i certainly agree with, and I love how you've executed this. Nicely done!

[Rita L. Sev]

A wholehearted thank you for your generous review, Will!

[Jack...]

Very cool Rita. You can climb up on that soapbox anytime you want to. This was beautiful and fun and friendy and tastefully done.

[Rita L. Sev]

Friendly and with a little class was my aim. Thank you, Jack!

[Dhaye]

Nice poem, Rita. Very relevant. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Dhaye!

[Brokensoul]

short but has layers of meaning. very poignant.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sonashree!