Champagne Dreams

They don't last

Bubbles rose to the top

Her champagne dreams came true

The life she said she wanted

It looked as good as new

But if you look too closely

You’ll get a different view

Not the image she wants seen

With golden tongue she drew

Now I sit here, remembering

The shame she put me through;

Champagne dreams don’t last for long,

But seltzer dreams ~ they do. 

Author's Note

Had friends who chided my lack of ambition for things like money and a fancy house. Needless to say, we don't speak anymore...

Reviews

[Zahra]

Riches can be a means to accomplish other constructive purposes, but it shouldn't become the purpose of life. Such ambition only rusts minds and hearts. I also pity those who spend their whole lives running after everything that shines. Very nice, thought provoking piece.

[Rita L. Sev]

Running after everything that shines - very well put, and exactly how this person was. Thank you for your insight!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Money will never buy you happiness... I believe that same situation is what caused my divorce.

[Rita L. Sev]

Exactly. I have a colleague who was engaged years ago - broke it off when she pressured him to leave teaching for a higher paying job. Filling your heart and soul is much more satisfying than filling your wallet.

[SyberRose]

And I bet you are much happier then they are Rita...I was the happiest when I lived in the smallest house...just starting out...of course I was alot younger then too haa...Rose

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Rose! Yes, much happier in simplicity.

[Frieda P]

I've known quite a few of these champagne dreams, they're effervescent and bubbly then they go flat, like the allegory in this one, you're always short, sweet, and to the point!

[Rita L. Sev]

Well, I am indeed short - sometimes sweet - and try to get to a point! :) Thank you, Frieda!

[Kristin Lee]

This piece has a very sad dominant tone, but holds a triumphant and very true end. I like the over all message. Its written from the heart. Those are often the best works of art.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Kristin! Much appreciated!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

This is another poem of sentiment. Happiness is not obtained by having a mansion and lots of money.
Nice one, Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Dhaye! I find that the less I have, the happier I am.

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice rhyme. One thing though, the line "and hope she see's" breaks the meter. Good work Rita

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you! And you are absolutely right about the meter - I struggled with that line, but couldn't figure a way to shorten it. I'll keep thinking on it - suggestions welcome!

[Rita L. Sev]

Just made some changes - think they fixed the problem. Opinion?

[Will]

Simplicity is often the best option, Rita. No need to get all high and mighty and lose sight of what's truly important. I love the message here. It seems that the more I read on here, I see writers who use very subtle and often natural rhyme schemes nearly perfectly. You're certainly one of those writers. Nice work, Rita!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Will!

[Jack...]

And needless to say you are much better off. Great poem Rita. I can picture her with her nose in the air casting ego fed shadows and you with your beautiful smile lighting up the room.

[Rita L. Sev]

What a sweet thing to say, Jack! Thank you. She did have an air about her, and I ignored it for a while - but as you said, I am much better off.

[Lina Grey]

rather have good friends and a happy life than money and a fancy house. it doesn't matter how much room you have if you just sit in there alone, aye.
this is a great poem. like how the different drinks show the contrast in each person's lifestyle.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Lina. I have always been more partial to seltzer than champagne...

[Lina Grey]

i'm pretty partial to non-alcoholic fluids myself ;)