Champagne Dreams

They don't last

Bubbles rose to the top

Her champagne dreams came true

The life she said she wanted

It looked as good as new

But if you look too closely

You’ll get a different view

Not the image she wants seen

With golden tongue she drew

Now I sit here, remembering

The shame she put me through;

Champagne dreams don’t last for long,

But seltzer dreams ~ they do. 

Author's Note

Had friends who chided my lack of ambition for things like money and a fancy house. Needless to say, we don't speak anymore...

Reviews

[Deuces]

I like this piece. As long as seltzer dreams are what is expected, life is easy. When Champagne Dreams are considered the norm, regular life becomes sour and that's unfortunate. I loved the message this sent. Simplicity is life and therefore enjoy it. The champagne... let it come and go naturally. Wonderfully penned.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Cyntax. I agree - seltzer dreams give just as much zest to life, and don't go to our heads.

[Sirius King]

there's a nice flow and message to the write

i really like this!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you - glad you enjoyed it!

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Oooh, I know so many people like this! And when karma rolls around, and her wealthy husband leaves her for his cute little assistant at work, or loses his job, the champagne bubble will burst. Excellent little poem. You have a gift for writing, my friend.

[Rita L. Sev]

You are so right, Damien! That's not too far off from what actually happened, too. All shine and no substance. Thank you so much!

[Robin]

Great poem Rita. I too have experienced the same chastisement because I live in the house I grew up in. I have learned to say "I love my little 2 by 4 (as my mom would say)
It's paid for, is yours?"

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! That is great, Robin! Thanks!

[redflutterby]

I've never aspired to a high maintenance life. Too many count their happiness and success in material terms! You can't take it with you and money doesn't care once you're gone. My joy comes from family, friends, writing and reading.
Fantastic poem!!

[Rita L. Sev]

The more you have, the more you have to worry about. I have always found that simple is better. Thank you, Red.

[Aethereal]

This was a delightful poem to read. It filled my mind with all kinds of inspirations. I was inspired to write this gift poem for you that covers the same topic, but in another way. You may keep this poem as your own, since you supplied most of the content for it: I interlaced perfect rhymes, only used each rhyme word once, carried the same two sounds to the end of the poem, and stuck to 7-5-7-5 meter:

Fizzled Dreams

Bubbles fizzled to the top,
her champagne dreams too,
a life she refused to swap
for less revenue.

In those days, she wouldn't stop
placing shame on you
for not being one to shop
like the well-to-do.

Suddenly a market drop
changed her point-of-view.
Now she's drinking soda pop,
and you're not taboo.

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! I like that last stanza of yours! Thanks.

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Rita! The last stanza should always tie everything together. This poem is yours to keep. Do what you want with it because it's based upon inspirations flowing through your mind, and not mine. Your poetry tells me more about you then anything else would. There's physical distance between people, and psychological distance. Poetry bridges the psychological distance.

[unsavable_soul]

Love it,
Very nice flow at the end of every second rhyme. You flow well yet keep your idea very coherent. This was a very nice work, with a powerful message in it's end. I love the champagne dreams which immediately took me to Robin Leech and lifestyles of. But hey Rita I want some caviar to feed the dog... haahaha haaaaa. This was a very fun read. thanks Rita for the read request.
Sincerely
Christopher
100/100

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you for the kind and thorough review, Christopher! Yeah, the champagne dreams do go to one's head...

[unsavable_soul]

My pleasure.
Chris

[Angi]

There are women all around me that aspire to be the Queen, Mrs. Jones. Don't they see how frivolous this is in the big scheme of things?!

[Rita L. Sev]

So true - frivolous is the perfect word for it. Thanks, Angi!

[quinfinn]

champagne dreams and caviar wishes....lifestyles of the wretched fakers....you did just fine, Rita...you are a genuine person. that is true wealth! excellent write~!

[Rita L. Sev]

Scratch the surface, all shine, no substance. I have no complaints; I do have true wealth! Thank you, Rex!