One Single Grain of Sand

One Single Grain of Sand

A Poem by Rita L. Sev
"

In the grand scheme of things, it can only mean squat.

"

One single grain of sand,

        pebble

                stone

                        rock

                                boulder

Our own significance,

in the eye of the beholder

 

A tiny drop of water,

        puddle

                creek

                        river

                                ocean

Humanity has given itself

the ultimate promotion

 

The smallest little seed,

        sprout

                bud

                        sapling

                                tree

There’s hope still for our growth

and all that’s yet to be

© 2013 Rita L. Sev


Author's Note

Rita L. Sev
I'm hoping our growth will humble us...

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The formatting works well here, guiding the reader directly into the tone of the poem. It's not an easy feat, I have a tough time doing so. But here it's natural, and that's when I know I've gotten close too, when after reciting it out loud the tone and the inflection of the voice fits the structure of the written poem. Some writers (and I envy them) tame their writing by using a consistent formula, an organized and proven format: couplets, 3 line stanza's etc. One writer down here, the Kimmer, has it down to a science she's a stickler for syllable count.. I myself require more freedom, but when something doesn't fall into place, sounds off, I'll do a ten count... But hell I'm digressing like crazy here I like what you've done, here, Rita. And the message put forth in this well written piece is full of insight/ and wisdom.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

Thank you, Diego. I struggle with finding the right format, and go to a standard AB/CB 4 line stanza.. read more
Angel

11 Years Ago

You guys with your forms and formats, your syllable counts and cadences...you make me NUTS!!!! All .. read more
that single grain of sand once nurtured could be the biggest thing ever..

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

So true. Thank you for reading, Stella!
You have a well developed structure, rhyme, and message in this poem. I’m always experimenting with different poetic structures. Perhaps I’ll try this one in the near future. I’ll try a verse that's now at the top of my head which you may keep as a gift:

I hear Nature's song
leaves
birds
bees
breeze
chipmunks in the maple trees.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

Thank you! Nice nature verse!
Aethereal

11 Years Ago

Thanks you for sharing your beautiful poems with me.
What a reminder! I am not just a speck on the horizon!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

No, you are much more! :) Thanks for reading, Angi!
This was great Rita. I really enjoyed the format of this poem and the message was perfect. I loved this, thank you for sharing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

Thanks, Jack. Playing with format, thought this would work with this piece. Appreciate your kind com.. read more
I love this Rita and loved the form too...Beautiful thoughts...Rose

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Rose! Glad you liked this.
It only takes one bit of faith to sprout a tree of hope.

As Garth Brooks sings "As long as one heart still holds on then hope is never really gone."

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

Well said! Thanks, Dale.
We all start so very small...

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

And yet think we are so "big"... thanks for reading, Marie.
i hope so too...cause we give ourselves way too much credit...we need to earn the promotion.

jacob

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

Absolutely. Thanks for reading, Jacob.

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Philadelphia, PA



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