If Only

Wine is bottled poetry. - Robert Louis Stevenson

Poured a single glass,

daydreamed it was a pair

 

One for me,

in reality

 

One for the

phantom visage

you now wear

 

If only

you were here

for one small sip

of time

 

The glass would be all yours;

The shadow would be mine

 

 

Author's Note

Took this the other night, just thought it was cool the way the glass was casting the shadow on the wall. Tossed it around a bit in my mind...

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Your shadow spun a tale of an open heart....succinct and to the point, the 'for one small sip of time'...what we wouldn't give sometimes. Love this one Rita.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Always my pleasure Rita.

[unsavable_soul]

Well toss no more,
This is so elegant and striking. A glass of wine between two people says a lot in the right moment about their relationship. Also what comes from the next moment after the wine, conversations, kisses, and more even. The way you grab the attention to the single glass is near foreboding and haunting.

"The shadow is mine"

Exquisite in it's double meaning to being alone and the shadow of the glass creating a thought of two. This is ever so beautiful and unique.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you for your very kind review. I truly appreciate your words!

[Augustus]

This poem is basically one extended metaphor, and I think it is an absolutely brilliant one! No wasted words, no drawn out imagery. It is extremely concise but has stunning clarity. It is almost as if you have taken only the essence of the poem and presented it to us, making us believe, that it is all that is required.
"The glass would be all yours
The shadow will be mine"
Wow! I could go on writing about this, but I do not wish to mar the elegance of your write with a tedious and verbose appraisal. 100/100

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Augustus! I am humbled by your review. The image, and the fact that I miss someone, were the seeds. I really appreciate your kind words!

[fireblossom]

A classic poem. So simple of word but deep in content. You are observing and telling while at the same time you open your heart for us. Very well done.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Fireblossom.

[Damien Thibodeaux]

I feel the sense of melancholy reflection. You take a simple glass of wine and come up with some very deep words. You continue to amaze with your talent.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much. Melancholy is just what I was feeling, wishing for one more glass of red with my Dad.

[Antoinette Tarsitano-Mo..]

If that was a beer, it would describe my Grandpop and me!!

[Rita L. Sev]

Yep, you got it - thinking about my dad.

[Marie]

Nice concept...You have a way with words...

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Marie!

[quinfinn]

gorgeous imagery, both in your photo and in your verse. this was delicious and quite intoxicating!

[Rita L. Sev]

;) Thanks, Quin! Wish I had a better camera!

[quinfinn]

welcome!

[Ryan]

this is sweet, passionate. excellent job. i like where you got your inspiration from, and how you made it work.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Ryan! That image just caught my eye when I put the glass down.

[Ryan]

I can imagine! :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Saw Tate's review on the main home page and figured if he was giving out so much praise, this was a poem I needed to be reading... and wow was he ever right! The play between shadow and glass and shadow and body is stunning.. I could feel the wanton desire, need and passion at work in this piece. Excellent for something tossed around in your head... wow!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Lori! Truly appreciate your reading, and your kind review!