Philly

My poems tend to be more for fun rather than deep thought - this one is about my awesome city.

Philly

The Liberty Bell

A hoagie or two

So much to see

So much to do

The Art Museum

Historic shows

Soft pretzels,

Cheesesteaks,

Boat House Row

Cobblestones beneath your feet,

William Penn above

Come to Philadelphia - 

City of Brotherly Love!

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Rita L. Sev,
At first I thought this was about Washington DC (shows how much I know!) You have brought me a desire to visit your fine city. It is portrayed in such a happy lighthearted way. Happy reading for sure! Blessings, Kathy

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Rita! : )
Had to take a look-see at your first post; next, comparing what improvement and influence the site might have had on your latest … as a teacher of poetry, I enjoy taking this time and interest when reading a poet/poetess new to me.
Whenever one has enough pride in their city to pay homage to it in such a charming and enjoyable way, it is your readers and fans who reap the rewards … thank you for the everyday visuals of life there.
I very much enjoy your verses' jaunt and flow, skipping along in lively energy, rhyme, and beat … until L10, which is simply too long.
In an effort to help correct this, consider the following (or some-such):

Cobblestones 'neath feet,
William Penn above
Come to Philadelphia —
City of Brotherly Love!

Without proper punctuation, the lines tend to enjamb and rush. For presentation and eye/mind appeal, dividing the Quatrains into poetic verses will allow the reader to relax and breath, taking-in and appreciating the value each offers; also, I'm not a fan of unnecessarily capping every line.
Having said all that, I love this piece … you've made me want to visit "Philly" for all the sites and one of the famous "hoagies". : D

Thank you, Dear Poetess, for the pleasure and honor of allowing an honest review! ⁓ Richard

[Einstein Noodle]

on my way ..who can resist the tasteful delights of the famous Philly Hoagie? :)

E.

[Rita L. Sev]

Wow - this is an old one! Glad you liked this taste of the city of brotherly love and sisterly affection!

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ...................

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Fabulous, a dedication that merits applause, well done.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you so much, Thomas. This was one of my first posts here; I stil write a lot about Philly, come to think of it... :)

[Chris]

Cities have the soul of the people within their bounds... you bring light and smiles.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Chris! Philly has souls new and old roaming it's streets.

[Debbie_Philly]

LOVE IT !!! This is so Philly.... very well done and great flow !! :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Debbie! I had a feeling you might enjoy this simple piece. ;)

[Debbie_Philly]

:) I did I did ;)

[zainul]

Enjoyed the 'City of Brotherly Love!'
Very warm invitation.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks. Yes, Philly is a great city!

[zainul]

:)

[Androglossia]

Philadelphia must be an awesome place. I am from the Philippines and I had to google every spot you've mentioned on your poem:D And they are all gorgeous! You have brought me to your beautiful place with such economy of words and that is an awesome skill:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Maryanne - I truly appreciate this!

[Androglossia]

You're very welcome:)

[Will]

Great piece. Simple phrases to describe a boatload of things and concepts. Nice write as usual :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you :)

[Epipsychologist]

Philly is the best, for sure. It's like New York but with style and personality.

[Will]

As a New Yorker, I felt morally obligated to respond. We have just as much style and personality as Philly, probably more, and a ton more class. Simply put, my grandmother has had ice cream thrown at her at a baseball game in Philly rooting for a NY team; not a thing was thrown when at a Yankees-Red Sox game wearing a Red Sox hat. Just saying...

[Rita L. Sev]

Around here we say that Philly is "New York Lite". And I must apologize for the unfortunate ardor of our sports fans - that kind of behavior is not uncommon, and it is one of the most frustrating things about this city.

[Will]

Haha I understand, just reading that comment bubbled up the New York hustle in me I suppose. Still a great piece