Ryan

Ryan          Introduction

    People don't believe us when we say we were kidnapped. Some people were smart and stayed home that Friday night. No one knew what we had been through, what they had put us through. It's hard to think about the things that we've all been through. What my friends went through. How many friends and loved ones we've all lost. We don’t know how to explain to the parents that lost their children, or to the friends that lost their friends. Its strange how we can still feel things after everything we have seen.

Even if we tried to explain to them, they’d just call us crazy and say we’d be in a nut house. Either that or the government too us for experimenting. But it wasn’t the government. It wasn’t the government that started the virus. Not even close. We know what started the virus, we can’t explain it to people. They laugh at us, say out ‘theory’ is ridiculous. People think it was just a vaccine for the common cold that went wrong and spread. Few people think it was chemicals, but in a way it was I suppose.

Now we’re all grown up, it has been years since the incident. We’ve taken the roll of repopulating the world, rebuilding the world. Every so often, someone will ask us to tell our story. We’d always refuse, not wanting to relive it a second more than we have to. But everyone must tell their story eventually.

Reviews

[Devine Miss C]

I have to agree with Lucien - your sentences don't flow neatly from one to the next. All your ideas are there, you just need to lay them out a little more clearly.

[A. Amos]

I like the start and seem like good work...will come back to read further...

[Lucien Maier]

dances a bit random. I suggest laying out the thoughts you want to set forth in this chapter and write it till it satisfies those questions. also this is your fist chapter you need to make this grab the reader. This is your first impression