Motionlessly I Weep

T-T so many tears I've encoutered my life is spiraling downward...

You promised to always be there

Now I see that you never did care

Dream just can't come true

And I thought that I loved you

Hey it may sound cliche

But I think about you everyday

Now I'm laying on the floor

And you're walking out the door

motionlessly I weep

As death continues to creep

My chances are very slim

I am circling the deadly rim

Blackness encounters

As the devil devoures

Whats left of my heart and soul

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

One is just being "eaten" by sadness, and lack of nurturing! Well described in this write.
Good flow of thoughts of sorrow. It isn't just rambling, but carries on the theme of not being loved, or accepted.
Well done!
Sheila

[ArieannexAntithetic]

I really liked this write.
"My chances are very slim
I am circling the deadly rim
Blackness encounters
As the devil devoures
Whats left of my heart and soul"
Very vivid.
Paints a clear picture.
Nice work!
-ArieannexAntithetic