Impossible

A tragic story of a false love... Inspired by Impossible by Shontelle

I was innocent;
 Stupid;
Naive.
I was so careless to forget something so important.
Something I should've known from the beginning.
Quickly I tread up the spiraling steps,
Further and further up I go,
Till only a door stood in my way,
But I shoved it open without a thought.
Wind hit me in a force,
Lights shown so bright from thing that stood before me
Stinging my eyes.
That was when my tears came with the thoughts,
 You left so easily. 
Gone in a flash.
 The memories,
 The things we shared,
 Photos in albums,
Laughter and love;
 All tainted.
The tears sear down my cheeks,
Leaving cracked trails in their wake.
 My feet crunch against the gravel,
 The city moving busily below,
Unknowing on what I am about to do,
All my scars are shown on my face,
 Never do I believe I could be whole once again. 
No one can save me, I'm sure of it,
 Nothing now binds me to the world I live in,
There's simply no reason.
And I'm too afraid to know that it's bound to happen again.
No. I won't let that happen.
 I will never let it happen to me again,
 I think  as my toes touch nothing but air,
 The bright lights shine in beams into my eyes as I stare down,
 Tears falling like crystals quickly to the far ground.
 Empty promises were made,
Embarrassments were not saved,
 Nothing could undo the strings that you wound tight around my heart,
 Even now.
  I still love you.
 But I don't deserve to be here,
 If you won't love me,
 Who will?
I will never be ready for this, 
But I will do the unthinkable,
Like what we were called: the impossible.
 I guess they were right.
What a fool I was to ever fallen in love.
And so I lift my hands,
 Brace myself,
 Lifting off of the ground with the last breath of life in me;
Surrendering my body to the sky;
And I soar.

Author's Note

Please comment!
I appreciate you reading my stuff, and if you were wondering on where this came from; Impossible from Shontel. I just don't know, I think I was inspired by the way she sounded like she was singing to the wide open air, in a place that could never hear her hurt. And so this was made. :) Hope you enjoyed!
Edit: this is the new version, so if you didn't like this one so much, I'm sorry but I thought it was a little left out of a few things that I could've done to make it more real. But it you did like this one great! Tell me though, was the first your favorite? Or was this one even a little better?

Reviews

[Kathryn]

Beautiful work, and really sad. I loved the fluid style - smetimes strict structures are reallylimiting - and the maning really captured me. The image you included really matches the one that as forming in my mind, so well one there, nd an all round beauty of a piece. Well done :)

[TC Dunn]

"Tears falling like crystals quickly to the far ground." oh my gosh... what wonderful imagery. That line is my absolute favorite. Well done here.

[Rhea752]

ummm... no criticism here this was a great piece of work and i love it keep writing

[Lydia]

Wonderful poem! Your words are so true and very wise. This is a very well written poem.

[Ama May Cooper]

I am lost for critism, i am lost for points of negative aims... this is beautiful , wonderful ...

[Monica]

This is truly beautiful. Well written and moving. The picture you chose to compliment your poem, which paints its own picture with vivid clarity, is perfect. You tell a beautiful story of broken love...

[realmwriter]

Insperational to say the least, A very exquisit poem! Thank you for the request to read it! I loved it...

[Legacy]

Ripple of Aqua,

Forgive for being corny here... to come late in the posting of a review for you, it seems rather IMPOSSIBLE to give you an original one.

Since my task is an impossible one, I will do my best to be original in the way I compliment you on this excellent poem.

A hopeless case of the broken heart, flying off the cliff at the edge of her wits, she is beautiful and innocent. The decisions she has made all for the love of him, as he becomes a no-longer in her life, the torment is too much and she flies as with angels to once again, regain her innocence.

I applaud your work here; the heart crushing story is dark but beautiful.

Thank you for sharing this work of art,

Legacy

PS: think you may consider this for the Love contest (Poetic Infusion Society)?

[T.W. Early]

Good style. a truly original piece!

[Sujash I. Purna]

Compelled me to read further when I read the first line...showed me the sights through someone else's spectacles...that's an adroit piece of work Kaitlin! You have as I've said before, a talismanic skill to modulate your voice to sing along some distant person's tune...you've done it in a perfect way here! Huge kudos from me :)

[Melissa Edmunds]

I loved this. I almost cried, I have felt like this before and it really touched my heart. Thank you. It is very powerful. You are amazing, I hope you have more for us.