The bane on thy bliss

For those unsure of their privileges

But what of the stars that witnessed thy fate?

What of the roaring heavens that beseeched on thee

The supreme paradigm of existence?

What if the abyss of the earth is far too cruel?

What if the universe, even so for a moment,

Witnessed thy unwavering bliss?

How'd thee protect, from them all;

The Dyrad that favored thy cause,

The elf that granted thee the forbidden pearl;

In all it's authority,

And made thee the supreme judge?

Reviews

[apennylate]

I WAS chosen by the stardust, I suppose... If even for a moment my bliss folds... An unwavering tribute to the fact we are exactly what we are supposed to be... That is my take on privilege, and I THINK this was pretty much saying that, so... I could be wrong, but either way, no matter how it is taken... Fantastically penned, with a dip of fantasy attached...

[Rimpi Saikia]

Oh thanks for your beautiful comment!

[apennylate]

Most welcome

[Poetic Beauty]

Love this creative tale. Love the last two lines.

[Rimpi Saikia]

Thank you very much :)

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Lets go ask a seed how it grows into such a giant tree. Is it already kept inside? Breed it, and there you will witness such growth. But see, its because we arent looking deep enough, and arent waiting long enough. Time and observation. Stars eventually become beautiful Suns

[Rimpi Saikia]

Thanks for these beautiful lines!

[Pete]

i like this a lot. really enjoyed the deep thoughts about life and great imagery and wording. top write.

[Rimpi Saikia]

Thank you so much! Your words are much appreciated

[Pravir]

Very well written . . . i enjoyed it . . . and hats off to your use of such words which made the poem beautifull. . .

[Rimpi Saikia]

Thank you so much!

[Chris]

Discover brought me here... choice kept me ...here.

The "taste" of a another reality being explored and a voice weaving its background.

[Rimpi Saikia]

Wow! Such nice words! Thanks a lot!

[Chris]

hope to see more of you here.

[darkabyss]

I like the way you use the old English it's really good

[Rimpi Saikia]

Thank you :D

[darkabyss]

Your welcome 😉