Write this in the Sand

Write this in the Sand

A Story by RileyRedding

In 5.4 billion years the sun will exhaust its hydrogen.

This will be earths curtain call.

Even before the sun becomes a red giant, the earth will be hotter than Venus.

That is, if we make it that long.

After all we're a walking talking, mass extinction event.

This is what I think about while I'm breaking her heart.

While I'm listening to her tell me how she'd rather argue with me than agree with anyone else.

While I'm finding the words to tell her how I've already made my decision.

Finding the words to tell her I've found nothing, but plentiful pain, and pitiful pleasure in trying to own her.

She's asking me what happened to forever.

And I'm telling her that just like Prozac. Forever has a half-life.

I can tell from the look in her eyes, that she's never going to accept my resignation.

So I lock myself in the bathroom.

Loving someone means protecting them. Even if that means from yourself.

So I down a bottle of Drano. Chase it with a couple shots of furniture polish. And for dessert?

You guessed it, Lemon Clorox.

All compliments of my bathroom sink bar-cart.

By the time she's convinced the neighbor to kick the door down.

The life is already leaving my eyes.

"So much for forever". She says.

"Forever's a long time."










© 2015 RileyRedding


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The concepts on your writings Riley are so strong at he risk of becoming overwhelming in that anything else gets obliterated by the structure itself. Though a narrative of sorts you don't seem to need developments of characters, you don't seem to rely on overpunctuation to denote a lyrical sonata. In fact in not many lines a dimension has just gone through at the speed of thought. From th factual statement of the longevity of our planet to the fragility of human relationships and the devastating effect that they could have upon our mental sanity. In the world of emotion that is like a googleplex of intensities yet amongst all the underlaying heavyness there also seems to be a fresh does of humour which makes me smile nervously as if I'm not sure I should be smiling at all.

As I have read a few of your wrtings I'm just getting warmed up here hoping for the next one to come I will smile sooner.

Thankyou

Posted 9 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Rene Salinas

9 Years Ago

Oh my! Stickly sweet? That would be the first time someone says that to me... The irony would not be.. read more
Daniel Towers

9 Years Ago

I'm a mystic in heart and mind and believe in a parallel internal/external reality where the life an.. read more
Jamie

9 Years Ago

I agree with Rene! Loved it!



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Damn, you rendered me speechless on this one. Had to add it to my favorites. The reason for that is because I haven't seen another story like this one. I like how you're so brave with your writing. Despite its randomness and weirdness, you still put it in your stories. I admire that. And might I add, this is very creative. It couldn't have been said better.

I mean, "sink bar-cart?" Who thinks of that?! :D

*Applauding*

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sometimes the wrong two people find each other for whatever reason, and they make excuses for existing, and then make excuses for leaving.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RileyRedding

9 Years Ago

Can I steal this line for a book I'm writing?
Matching Socks

9 Years Ago

Be my guest.
Matching Socks

9 Years Ago

:-)...................
The concepts on your writings Riley are so strong at he risk of becoming overwhelming in that anything else gets obliterated by the structure itself. Though a narrative of sorts you don't seem to need developments of characters, you don't seem to rely on overpunctuation to denote a lyrical sonata. In fact in not many lines a dimension has just gone through at the speed of thought. From th factual statement of the longevity of our planet to the fragility of human relationships and the devastating effect that they could have upon our mental sanity. In the world of emotion that is like a googleplex of intensities yet amongst all the underlaying heavyness there also seems to be a fresh does of humour which makes me smile nervously as if I'm not sure I should be smiling at all.

As I have read a few of your wrtings I'm just getting warmed up here hoping for the next one to come I will smile sooner.

Thankyou

Posted 9 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Rene Salinas

9 Years Ago

Oh my! Stickly sweet? That would be the first time someone says that to me... The irony would not be.. read more
Daniel Towers

9 Years Ago

I'm a mystic in heart and mind and believe in a parallel internal/external reality where the life an.. read more
Jamie

9 Years Ago

I agree with Rene! Loved it!

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Portland, OR



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Hello, My name is Riley Redding. I'm a twenty-three year old hailing from the Great Pacific Northwest. I'm the author of several works of transgressive fiction. I write in a minimalistic style of sati.. more..

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