Write this in the Sand

In 5.4 billion years the sun will exhaust its hydrogen.

This will be earths curtain call.

Even before the sun becomes a red giant, the earth will be hotter than Venus.

That is, if we make it that long.

After all we're a walking talking, mass extinction event.

This is what I think about while I'm breaking her heart.

While I'm listening to her tell me how she'd rather argue with me than agree with anyone else.

While I'm finding the words to tell her how I've already made my decision.

Finding the words to tell her I've found nothing, but plentiful pain, and pitiful pleasure in trying to own her.

She's asking me what happened to forever.

And I'm telling her that just like Prozac. Forever has a half-life.

I can tell from the look in her eyes, that she's never going to accept my resignation.

So I lock myself in the bathroom.

Loving someone means protecting them. Even if that means from yourself.

So I down a bottle of Drano. Chase it with a couple shots of furniture polish. And for dessert?

You guessed it, Lemon Clorox.

All compliments of my bathroom sink bar-cart.

By the time she's convinced the neighbor to kick the door down.

The life is already leaving my eyes.

"So much for forever". She says.

"Forever's a long time."

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar.

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

The concepts on your writings Riley are so strong at he risk of becoming overwhelming in that anything else gets obliterated by the structure itself. Though a narrative of sorts you don't seem to need developments of characters, you don't seem to rely on overpunctuation to denote a lyrical sonata. In fact in not many lines a dimension has just gone through at the speed of thought. From th factual statement of the longevity of our planet to the fragility of human relationships and the devastating effect that they could have upon our mental sanity. In the world of emotion that is like a googleplex of intensities yet amongst all the underlaying heavyness there also seems to be a fresh does of humour which makes me smile nervously as if I'm not sure I should be smiling at all.

As I have read a few of your wrtings I'm just getting warmed up here hoping for the next one to come I will smile sooner.

Thankyou

[RileyRedding]

That just might be the sweetest thing anyone on here has ever said to me.

[Rene Salinas]

Oh my! Stickly sweet? That would be the first time someone says that to me... The irony would not be a coincidence?

[Daniel Towers]

I'm a mystic in heart and mind and believe in a parallel internal/external reality where the life and death of an individual may coincide with the the life and death of a civilization, planet, star or even an entire universe. You seem to be tapping into the secrets of space and time. Bravo. And thank you.

[Jamie]

I agree with Rene! Loved it!

[Jarrod Tauzin]

Not what I was expecting, I like the connection. Well written

[jessy123]

I enjoyed reading this piece, sorry I'm just browsing through a few of your pieces. :) but anyways as I read this piece by the time i got to the end I loved how you wrapped it up, kind of a cynical humor flow to it, where you know it's a sad piece but you can't help but smile for some unknown reason. Great write!!!

[Tania]

WOW ! truly enjoyed this ! Awesome Job..
_Beyourself

[Einstein Noodle]

"This is what I think about while I'm breaking her heart."
when i was attending a boy scout meeting many years ago .. i followed three other boys out the door .. i discovered them all bent over and gasping for breath .. the infamous "Steele" brothers were waiting and hoping to catch the victim they wanted; but after three down the Steele brothers had disappeared when i crossed the doorway .. your lead in to that killer line is a punch to the gut just like those Steele boys threw .. and the tragic end with a twist of very wry humor ... makes for a very powerful read as far as i am concerned .. peace and joy!
E.

[Cryingkate]

If you can consistently locate the spring that feeds your well, You won't need a day job.

Congratulations.. I rarely read stories let alone enchantingly love them.

[dan]

Riley, One has to like your honest, unvarnished outlook expressed in your writing. Is it hard to hear, to fathom? Of course, honesty is often hard to face. Which is why human beings lie so much. It's much too easy, easier than exposing yourself to the truth and risking the pain THAT can bring up. "....the sink bar-cart?" Damn good. take care...dan

[Alexis Enigma]

Wow...

You are hands down the most interesting writer on here.

[Zanne]

I really enjoyed this, well done :)

[Cindy Marietta]

Wow, I absolutely loved this! The beginning was definitely my favorite how you encompassed the world ending with ending your relationship with the girl. Amazing idea and you did a beautiful job writing it. Especially loved the "bathroom sink bar cart". Great poem.

[Archia]

A very powerful piece, I thought the last couple of lines were really strong. This was such a unique concept, I can't think of another time where I've read something which involves someone doing something like this and that made it really interesting to read.