My Monster

(This entree is just the intro to the story "My Monster" that I am currently working on)

       Maybe he wasnt what I thought he was, Perfect, dark skinned, light eyed god like being. No no no, i see now what he truley was and always will be. A monster. A monster that that made its way into my life with perfection and charm that snatched my heart to hold it and love it, but also just waiting for the right moment to crush it.

Author's Note

This is just an intro, ignore the grammar, this is just my first draft.

Reviews

[Bare trees]

I think this is a really good opening. It has tension that grabs the reader right away which is important to any short story. Grammar aside, nicely done.

[MoriartyMesa]

Speaking as a bit of tanned skin rascal, I found this to be the views on a Rascal, or modern contemporary would be the classic bad boy.

Had a New York Dolls feel to it, maybe Im thinking of The Donna's
But i liked it.

[RickyJean]

Hopefully I will have part one done and posted within the next couple of days!

[Katty]

I like it, its a good intro, cant wait for more, if its coming :)

[Kyle]

Good beginning....you have my attention.

[RickyJean]

Just relized that i wrote "that" twice right next to eachother. I hate when i do that.