Letter of intent

I wanna see her happy no matter if it's with me or not, but I do feel that I should have that spot, I wanna see her have an everlasting smile without it being fought, I wanna be the one thats always on her thoughts, if she gives me that chance i will give her all I got, when she has problems whatever it is I wanna be the one to untie the knots, ppl say in relationships you only get one shot, so i will treat her right because I love her not just a little it's alot.

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[shelbylugal]

This is such a beautiful poem but there is one think I'd suggest; break the paragraph into stanzas like this:
I wanna see her happy no matter if it's with me or not,
but I do feel that I should have that spot,
I wanna see her have an everlasting smile without it being fought,
I wanna be the one thats always on her thoughts,
if she gives me that chance i will give her all I got,
when she has problems whatever it is I wanna be the one to untie the knots,
ppl say in relationships you only get one shot,
so i will treat her right because I love her not just a little
it's alot.


and try not to abreviate words such as ppl.