Longings Flame

A nod to that which drives us

                                                                 

Seared from within by longings flame

clutching for life to a tiger's mane

wearied head hung, desperate game

 

tempered by the gains of learning

bursting from my chest in yearning

spurred to excel by the ache there burning

 

blinded eyes met squinting, sun

dreams afar yet searching, run

fulfillment seeking, never done

 

youth born vision, striving on

hope subdued yet back, each dawn

driven, vain achievers pawn

 

odds that favor, believers math

hidden view, the future path

humility’s insightful laugh

humility’s insightful laugh…

 

Rikkevi Rue

Copyright 2011 all rights reserved

Author's Note

say your say, my edification awaits

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you~my friend~are one of a handful of 21st century writers I know who not only handle classic rhythmic patterns flawlessly but know how to subtly insert personalized seedlets of unique expressive surreality that makes comprehensive emotional sense flawlessly~

[Rikkevi Rue]

compliments from a truly great poet are always intoxicating!

[Joiedevivre]

an ode to desire, the first principle of conscious life, a desire which propels us to heights, when it doesn't get stuck in the mire. You have captured that duality in subtle tones that speak mellifluous volumes!

[Poetic Justice]

totally agree with Selene..

Your poetry is like liquid gold.. fluid and precious.. you have a maturity in your verse which is so refreshing..

[Rikkevi Rue]

thank you. encouragement is great...can always use a little extra gasoline on the fire! ;-)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Great flow to this one. I think that you are quite adept at creating a good beat and tempo and carrying it throughout, which gives your work a bit of a classic feel with a modern edge. I like your style, and this piece is no exception.

youth born vision, striving on
hope subdued yet back, each dawn
driven, vain achievers pawn -- my favorite stanza...felt very real and sounded great read aloud.

[Rikkevi Rue]

Thank you for your review. That was an inspired write, you know, the kind when one's frustrations and energies coalesce...so to speak :-)

[Jay]

I see the heros' salt swept face leaning into a wind from the bow of a magnificent ship...

[Rikkevi Rue]

yes, perhaps...there is a stoic cast and a hint at the epic I guess, though in truth it was one of those reflective moments... Thank you for your kind words

[Robin]

the rhyme is subliminal - aim, earning , un , on , and the final stanza peers into the depths of the mirrorscape between poet and poetry

[Rikkevi Rue]

As always my friend you see with that most penetrating vision and hear with the keen inner ear and aegis of the aesthetically endowed!

[Tate Morgan]

The story of the learned mans desires in life to reach for the unattainable.It is never by the end but with the journey we are cured

[Rikkevi Rue]

Indeed, perhaps each milestone that is passed is never seen due to the constant focusing of a new one in the distance...

[Chris]

Who is to argue with "fun"? Aren't we allowed to play too?

Chris

[Rikkevi Rue]

hee hee hee! Let the games begin :-)

[sarah]

This is a wonderful write the emotion in this is very well written and expressed great write!

[.]

sublime in it's lyrical content..your smooth rhythmic meter and rhyme is a pleasure to read..this coupled with the fact that you still maintain an interesting and thoughtful read is really a pleasure..there's a depth to this ..loved it

[Rikkevi Rue]

Heady words from one who actually knows the dance! Thank you compadre!