The mountain goat's curse

fanciful allegorical romantically hinting play!

The hill had a curving walk, circling its narrow rim

the view dropped down straight and deadly

a hawk's fatal dive on unwitting prey

but she never really looked, the ground towards

up above in the clouds her mind played

and all the while i gaged the drop

to the bush where the coney lay

little guile was  necessary, to live above the clouds

the rays of sun would nurture full

the gusts of wind would howl

and the rainbows end curved off below 

and the nests of the eagles precipice though

naught but a chamois could play where

still she danced wearing ribbons all day there

built on the ledge of pine, was a cottage of crooked trim

the porch leaned oh so precariously out

and the wind howled around and again 

and blew from above down the valley below

the sound of her fanciful song ever so

lilting with a cry of the Celtic, merry

the coney were drawn above to peer

well before the hawk could strike 

and into the brush they would fear

but this heart, an old goat of the mountains

can't long be drawn true to a whim

of a girlish dream and her lover's scheme

and run round and round on the narrow rim

in the clouds 'bove an aerie lonely 

where the dreams of a love begin

and the eagles fly with the song of a maiden

and the birth of the northern wind

blow and howl and curse to the end

the goat of the mountains, bounded then

flew over the edge and into the chasm

fables lament it, a terrible end.

But bolder than thunder and braver than light

ran the blood in the veins of that dancer of heights

and swirled in the winds of the maidens song

the fur of his coat grew to feathers long

and the eagle he became as he danced 

strike! deadly ended the coney's chance

sweet wine of the rainbow romance  

rikkevi rue copyright 2013

Author's Note

this was just for fun and reader's enjoyment. All reviews welcome!

Reviews

[Justine]

Your title interested me and I wondered what the content might be, so I clicked on it. In this "fable" one love with their head in the clouds can't see the reality or urgency of a situation, with a lack of commitment. Taking a leap, transformation occurs. I like the way it is written, apart from the repetition of the word "there" final lines second stanza as I think they lack the impact of the rest of the write. The story unfolds as it teases the reader's imagination. Nice writing. Justine.

[Rikkevi Rue]

whimsical foolery it was, but I like to temper the broodings with sunshine occasionally. True the "theres" are redundant and imperfect. Originally I thought to change it but then decided a little imperfection was in order, but the first idea was "dare"...you're the first who caught it, my cleverly discerning girl. Maybe you could be my Editor! =))

[Joiedevivre]

a thoroughly enjoyable tale, but beneath the surface, like in all good tales, is a deeper layer full of archetypal symbolism. This is one to be pondered on and the subconscious is sure to do so at its own pace. Structurally, the poem flows marvellously with great rhythm, rhyme and alliteration throughout and wonderful rhythm. Great on every level.

[Rikkevi Rue]

yes. i think it is an example of suggestive nuance that just teases and really leaves all the work to the reader...in other words you only get as much out of it as your creative imagination puts into it. Good for someone like you!

[Poetic Justice]

OHHH I love it!! Wishing ever so slightly that I wrote it.. enchanting and magical, every word was visualized, I was holding my breath because truly this is the worst kind of nightmare place.. that edge.. nooo thank you...and just the thought of her close to the edge..nooooo...

enough of my fears! I love the way to weave the tale with such tasteful descriptions.. suffice to say... jealous..

[Rikkevi Rue]

Yes it is fun (and amusing) to write these slightly whimsical, fablish poems with mildly suggestive undercurrents...some take them literally (which is fine) and some take them as pure allegory, and still others read the most AMAZING things into them! I like a poem that the reader can contribute his or her OWN reality into...so i have been trying to perfect those type poems. NOT all readers like them, and many miss the subtler aspect to them. But being an old goat myself (Chinese horoscope haha!) I like the ones that rattle one's wits a little, though they are rather "fantasy" and not grounded much in the here and now. Thanks for your review and your support PJ!

[Great Aunt Astri]

A marvelouse mystical fable poem. I didn't completely understand the references but I got quite transported by the poem at another level. I look forward to reading some more.

[Rikkevi Rue]

yes, this one has several levels going on at once...perceptive of you to notice, was it the allegorical fable level? the subliminal suggestive level? or the fantasy romance level that appealed to you...? ;-)

[Great Aunt Astri]

I think it was the subliminal suggestive level. But I will read it again and see what comes to mind.

[Rikkevi Rue]

do let me know and you can always add to your review if you have more you want to say!

[Great Aunt Astri]

I sort of see the romantic side, but, do you know, I would love you to read this aloud. I may be taking it too literally.