An Edit

just playing around

MMMMM 

MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM

MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM

hope that there Is another life where we will meet. It may not be a fantasy MMMM

MMMMMMMMMMMMMM but know that even In a cave, MMMMMMMMMMMMMMM

MMMMMMMMM love MMMMMMMM would make it the only place to be MMMMMM

My determination to satisfy your needs exceeds any expectations MMMMMMMMM

of what the after life might be. MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM just

you and me.

Reviews

[Carolynn]

Wow what a beautiful edit :) really uniquely done!

[Ruth]

I really like this...writing comes with the edits so why not show so on screen too...really cool :)

[barleygirl]

This is clever & hilarious, with a grain of seriousness. First of all, all that scratching out reminds me of how, when young, handwritten notes were the norm . . . but if we wrote something wrong, we'd scratch it out until the paper ripped, practically, becuz we didn't want the other person to be able to see what we almost wrote. Also, the other person would be staring at the scratching-out more than at the legible words, in an effort to figure out what had been omitted from the message. Even tho you youngsters of the digital age can't possibly know these delicious & aborted note-writing rituals of my youth, this hilarious poem brought everything to mind once again. Thanks for breaking up the seriousness on this website.

[Stefano Segnan]

You probably already know what I am going to say in regards to the format. As to the message, while it is good, try to make it more memorable. There are a thousand other people saying this in a similar way...

[andrew mitchell]

This is a clever format, thanks for sharing. Very clever again, love the unique style which you displayed well:)

[Elise Anton]

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[Elise Anton]

MMMMMM I don't know, honestly. Love the words in-between, but I wonder if they 'lose' their beauty? Is this experimenting or just fooling around? What were you thinking about when you wrote this? Very curious to know the motivation, really!

[richy]

experimenting It's supposed to be a full poem with all the "bullshit" scribbled out. picture it in a notebook. I know maybe black will make it clearer

[Elise Anton]

Aha! Maybe... my mind is thinking... instead of the MMMMs crossed out, maybe you add some trite, overused words/prases and cross those out, letting the true words shine? Or maybe I had too much red cordial at my nephew's 2nd birthday party...

[richy]

lol it's the drinks and i would try that but I cant read the words anymore they really look like this in my notebook.

[Elise Anton]

Yeah let's blame the cordial. What do YOU think of it as an experiment?

[richy]

Yeah. I just want to write something that's never been done.

[Elise Anton]

Well you've done that! I like your daring, so more experimenting please :)

[M. L. F.]

MMMM... I'd like to jump into this one. I understand the unique format, the concept that you are trying to make the important feelings pop out of the ramblings we writers write and cross half of away upon re-write. But I agree with Elise on this one richy... maybe to cross out the real words in between, rather than the MMM's, makes them stand out even more. Cool idea though. Innovation is a great thing. The sentiment is very sweet, lucky girl..

[richy]

Yeah I'll try one with actual words crossed out this is just literally what it looks like in my notebook.

[Elise Anton]

Yes please :)

[M. L. F.]

:) Do it...