Wait

written for BBG

You want new shoes

red bottoms but you wear vans

You want a new man

Someone stronger

I can change.

wait.

I'm not the one

You're indecisive and contradicting

I lose strength If I give in

This was a set up 

I get It

wait.

you ain't feel It no more

It was all good just a week ago

but no more

wait.

I didn't ask you to change

I didn't want It 

but nothing's changed 

You love me 

I love you

You don't like me

You're not Cleopatra

I don't like you 

I'm not David

wait.

Can't we just accept our truths

Reviews

[Érenn]

The words are the soul of the poem, and the way they flow when i read this makes me realize how smooth this one really is. It's an amazing poem and the emotions and sentiments clearly shine through it.

[barleygirl]

This poem makes me appreciate old age so much! I can barely follow all the starts & stops & twists & turns of this kind of love attraction! But I know, oh-so-well, how this feels (from back in my younger days). I like the contrasting imagery of red-bottomed-shoes vs vans. That's a clever way to say so much about class without all the extra words. The second stanza shows us a tug-of-war, both inside the narrator & also between the narrator & love interest. So much pushing & pulling thru-out, really. Tiresome. But it's how so many relationships can go, so your words are creating a true realistic feeling. Another good contrast is Cleopatra & David . . . again, saying so much while writing so few words. Why do people look for gods & goddesses within their beloved? We're all just ordinary people trying to get along & helping each other get along. That's the relief that this struggle is yearning for. Good word picture.

The obvious title would be: "Wait"

But something a little more complex: "Contradictions"

That's my feeble stab . . . now back to the boring comfortable love affairs of old age! *tee! hee!*

[The Diamond Effect]

Well when its written like this I can't help but comprehend and understand. I see exactly what you mean and what I shall do.

[richy]

cool glad i could give you some clarity