Rainfall

It's raining, raining, raining my unshed tears,
The Thunder is rumbling, rumbling, rumbling my supressed groans,
...And once in a while lightning flashes, illuminating the darkness, preaching hope.

Reviews

[Maddy Stillman]

I love when an author can get the point across in only a few words or lines. I always feel like I'm scrabbling to portray a clear meaning without excessive language and explanation. I wish I could create such an impact with so little words. I like your use of repetition and word choice. Great work!

[Passengerr]

Wow! Thank you Maddy Stillman.

[Pratik Mishra]

Loved it. :) keep it up!...........

[Pushkar Prabhat]

awesome...........
very creative and profound....
i loved it!!!!
:)

[Passengerr]

Thanks for the review Pushkar..:-)

[AaronFreitas]

Very good write Richie... I love way the last line creates an awesome image. Nice wording my friend :)

[Passengerr]

Thank u Aaron, thank you very much!

[fattycbreezy52]

Wowwwww. .I like this one!
Rainfall synchronized with the process of life.
Every pain brings with a moment of hope.
It just wants us to open our eyes.
nice work:)

[Passengerr]

Haha, thanks breezy.. Glad u like it..:-)

[sereenaoutloud]

The repetition works really great in this write. It starts of sad but then the last line that little flash of sunlight!
This is true to life, all it take is a that little ray of hope to help us keeping going !!
Brilliant Richie.!

[~]

May the light of those flashes keep your hope burning once it ignites Richie!

[Passengerr]

Thank you moon. I hope so.. Keep smiling.

[Brinleigh Bailey]

The metaphor you used as your emotions to a storm was very clever. The sadness was clear in the story, your emotions were expressed very well. I enjoyed it very much.