Linked⁓* (sweet sorrow)

English [Shakespearean] Sonnet with a touch of misty Autumn melancholy 🍂

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He's linked to her, it’s this he must extol,

so deep her smile will haunt his spellbound heart.

 He knew the risks when laying bare his soul,

 but (in their dreams) they’d never be apart.

 

 He feels her touch, despite such distance vast …

 her psalms echo across morn's golden sky.

 It’s a sad pang that evermore will last;

he'll feel her there in every breath’s soft sigh.

 

 Alas, with love there are no guarantees;

and, yet, their bond's the only truth he knows …

a truth that’s such it well redeems and frees

 … there’s nothing more he'd opt to juxtapose.

 

 He reads her parting words, then's heard to cry.

 His heart’s still hers … of this, he’ll ne’er deny.

Richard W. Jenkins

© 19 Oct 2024

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Author's Note

ARTWORK
Last Kiss - Adam Martinakis 1972 - Polish Surrealist Digital Painter

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Reviews

[Lisasview]

Good morning from early morning in Spain,
Had dreams about your Sonnet and woke up to read it again a couple of times.
First, the perfect image that you chose says so much about your Sonnet before even reading your words. Not only the figures themselves, but the lines drawing them…For me the woven lines represent distance as they finally come together in a blissful kiss. Linked…
Then of course the reader is brought to your Sonnet.
Your words of true love and what can happen are so real….I felt a part of a private conversation you were having with yourself (in your head) if that makes any sense.
I know these feelings so well Richard,
Lisa, now ready for a cappuccino …

[Richard🖌]

Good late morning, Lisa, from Texas, USA 🤠

Oh, my! I do so dearly hope and pray,read moreGood late morning, Lisa, from Texas, USA 🤠

Oh, my! I do so dearly hope and pray,
the flooding missed coming your way.

So wonderfully creative your words express the essence of this classic poem in homage to a deep relationship's poignant cessation.

Ah, yes, Lisa, "the private dialogue in my head," felt so very deeply in the heart and soul … one never knows what might spill out through their ink and revealed upon a clear white page.

Mucho gracias, Señora … hope you enjoyed that cappuccino in Spain! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

this is a stellar sonnet, at once expressing gratitude for the love you have found and the desire for it to last. it is also a work filled with vulnerabilities ' He knew the risks when laying bare his soul,' and ' Alas, with love there are no guarantees;' but it is encased in optimism ' His heart’s still hers … of this, he’ll ne’er deny.'
i make it no secret that i'm single and my love affairs have never ended well. but i appreciate works like this, it reminds me of the time i got to spend with this person and that person; and how i would never trade those memories for the world.

[Patricia Wedel]

Of all the words I ever heard... "Parting is such Sweet Sorrow" is the Epitome of Love. In the quiet moments I hear the breathing of a Heart that will always echo in the Bossom of my Soul. softly, Pat

[Susan 🦋]

An English Sonnet by Richard!! Now that is a treat!! Absolutely flawless and beautifully illustrated. Your chosen theme of love and longing so eloquently expressed in the undeniable realization that what binds twin souls is eternally permanent. Yet being a sonnet, ya gotta have a Volta! But tears? Sigh, such is the ways of a sonnet. So perfectly executed, even with those heart-tugging words. Still, love endures. Always. There is beauty in that. Yay Richard! Such an enjoyable read I should have reviewed a while ago!! Thank you for sharing your amazing poetry. 😊

[Nelyn Salvaleon]

Hello dear Richard 🖌️
Seems you have found a great inspiration for this masterpiece of yours. The girl in this poem must be so lucky, for she has someone who loves her despite the distance between them. Lucky is the girl who has your heart dear Richard 🖌️ You really are amazing!

[Snow_]

I love this i love this.....I feel this so much....this boy is me...i thought to myself
But i never knew the risk....in laying bare my already broken heart

also
A FAN WISH:
Can i suggest for you to open up your feeling not someone feeling?
I think i lack the connection....between the author and the reader...
Its like you are not connecting to the reader in the poems i had read....as i remember

.... What if you also write in your viewpoint... writing your experience.....Your pen touching your hand....Not restricted by anything else...all ideas...into one

I know your poem is already perfect but i think maybe connecting more would look better for the average reader like me... not the critique

He knew the risks when he lay bare his soul
But in their dreams they never was apart

(this is in no way a way to change your poems....like my other critique this is not a way to change your poem...this are just mere examples)

Your poems are amazing they are sweet but i wish to hear your viewpoint your emotions... vividly not someone else

I also wish for you to connect emotions...make it heartfelt

her psalms "echoes" across morn's golden skies.
It’s a sad pang that evermore will last;
he'll feel her there in every breath’s soft sigh.


because "only" maybe know?? singular subject? i like it better too
It sounds touching....like all poems prob should do
I hope this is grammatical

Alas, with love there is no guarantee;
and, yet, their bond's the only truth he know

[Richard🖌]

Hellow, Syr Poet 🤓

The entirety of this Sonnet is, obviously, a poignant (sad) story about a lover who gave his all, but in the end was left alone with his memories.
One thing to bear in mind while reading poems composed by others, is their intent and individuality of writing technique when reviewing and offering suggestions … there are virtually endlessly different ways to express poetic voice, and in saying the same thing. This is what makes poetry such a broadly appreciated and written art form by millions for centuries, the world over.

Thank you, Syr Snow, for your read and thoughtful suggestions! ⁓🖌

[Snow_]

ohh i see thank you. I never thought of that.

[Snow_]

But i also said. That this poem is already perfect. I read some of your poems. I just wanted to say could you plss explore those kinds of ideas. love it when you express your ideas. I know sometimes my English is broken. I am sorry.

It was also what I had said. You just seem to not have understood it. Thank you for your patience.

[Tumi]

This sonnet is really beautiful! The way you describe the feelings of love and longing is powerful. I love the imagery, especially the line about her psalms echoing in the skies. it’s so dreamy! Overall, it’s super heartfelt and relatable! Great job!

[Richard🖌]

G'day, Tumi, to you there in Lagos 🍁

May a good life always be dancing your way,read moreG'day, Tumi, to you there in Lagos 🍁

May a good life always be dancing your way,
that you're never charged more than you can pay,
and when the wind blows, flows a most joyful song
that will charm your ear for a lifetime long.

Thank you sincerely for selecting this rather poignant piece to read and comment on with such gracious appreciation and praise … one day you'll compose fine sonnets of your own.

Many blessings, Syr! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Tumi]

Amen, your poems inspires me a lot

[Sk. Kamarul Islam]

A Lovely, can relate real life experiences.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Syr.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

AMAzing Richard loved it

The art fits the poem beautiful

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, Julie.
"Happy Autumn!" 🍂

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness Richard!!
Probably my favorite Sonnet of yours thus
far… love it…
I need to read it several more times.
I really feel this in my heart and relate to the words…
Fantastic!
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Gee, Lisa 😌

Those are, indeed, lovely sentiments to bless a hopeful olde bard with, just for sharing his earnest poetic efforts to please such skillfully blessed 'n gracious readers.

"Happy All Hallow's Eve, Poetess!"
Thank you ever-so gratefully! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Lisasview]

You are so very welcome!!
Lisa