Shooting Stars⁓✨

Simple Octet in 11-counts per line, abab rhymes … with a wisp of poignant gentleness.

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 Shooting Stars✨

Shooting stars dive deep into cool ocean waves,

’til each flame’s quenched, to sizzling embers’ chagrin;

as tho' spent dream've drowned in cold, wat'ry graves,

bright starlight extinguished by what’s died within.

O’ lift our hearts once more to raptures above …

there, where we’ve ever yearned to fly soaring free.

Two leaves drifting in gent’ly warm, golden love;

we’ll land as one-embraced ~ in sheer ecstasy.

Richard W. Jenkins

   © 30 Dec, 2023

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Author's Note

Artwork from Pinterest royalty free images.
Octet: Any eight line poetic verse.

Please, feel free to critique with anything you feel will better this work. ✍🏼

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Good morning dearest Richard,
Another wonderful poem of yours to read early this morning here in beautiful France where the country side is deep with varing colours of green.
Your poem full of metaphors beckons me to get back to writing.
In particular this line...
"Two leaves drifting in gent’ly warm, golden love;" The thoughts that run through my mind as I read and reread this line of yours, that says so much, are full of hope that those who have lost love realize that love can be rekindled...the possibilities of starting anew is so refreshing.
Lisas

[Richard🖌]

Well, M'Lovely Lisa Dear🥂

Good afternoon to you, Lady Faire, over there in exciting Spainland, while visiting France in an artist's beautifully colour-filled trance.
You seem to possess an uncanny knack for grasping and appreciating the core essence of my ever-hopeful poetry … and, how grateful I truly am that, that single highlighted line once more beckons your gorgeous pen to fill your fingers and our hearts with your endearing words.

Yes, Lisa … may poetic love ever be rekindled! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Sami Khalil]

The poet dives deep into the sheer essence of love in a marvelous poetic form; your words are brightening the night sky as shooting stars. This has an Autumn feel to it.
Readers sure feel ecstatic reading these types of poetry.

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Dear Sami 🍂

And, writers feel ecstatic reading these type of reviews.🙃read moreAhhh, Dear Sami 🍂

And, writers feel ecstatic reading these type of reviews.🙃
It's so very nice to receive a review where the reader actually "feels" my poem's essence … it's as though it came from your own heart.
I suppose the drifting golden leaves offer a sort-of Autumn ambiance … good eye!
Your graciously expressed, appreciative praise sings ever-so welcome upon a grateful poet's hopeful ear! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You are welcome sir Richard.

[Susan 🦋]

With a wisp of poignant gentleness, I am drifting away with those two leaves. Landing who knows where ;) Loving my Sunday afternoon reads!

[Richard🖌]

Well then, good Sunday morn, Sweet Sue🌤
It is sooo truly wonderful to see You, too.
The sky is cloudy, Olde Sol peeking out;
we're blissfully sharing again, no doubt.

It's the only way, for two splendid poets,
who're enjoying poetry … happy know-its
skipping along, singing a song, side-by-side.
Ohhh-MY! it's been a mutually exciting ride!

I, too, love that you're reading (and, reviewing ME) on a Sunday afternoon.
Big, warm HUGS! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Richard🖌]

Don't think, I missed that ; )

[poetgurl]

This is simply amazing, I enjoyed this and your image goes well with the write

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, PG,

For your for your praise and expressed enjoyment.

Gratefully yours! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Marie]

The accompanying graphic complements this superbly inked poem sublimely. The visual detail within the poem is stunning! The final two lines of the poem took my breath away, so eloquently expressed, in this beautiful bouquet of words.
Thank you for sharing, dear poet...

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Marie ✨

For another such gorgeously rendered review as this of yours, I'd share a hundred more.

With a sighhh of warmest thanks! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Marie]

Hi Richard,
MOST welcome!
I look forward to reading some more of your poetic works of art, later.
Thank you again for sharing - Marie

[Richard🖌]

I love to share!

[Marie]

Bless you...

[Poetic Beauty]

This is the second time I have read this. It’s beautiful and timeless. Adding to my favorites

[Richard🖌]

Goodness, Dear Lady PB 🌺🐝

Knowing such an accomplished poetess appreciates one of my earnest efforts enough to take a second bite, sets a sweetly warming blush, and to receive such accolades … ohhh-MY!

Color me vibrantly caressed! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Poetic Beauty]

You are most welcome. You are a very talent poet

[Richard🖌]

Graciously bowing, Dear Lady-Poet⁓*

[Andra Davis]

A sweet landing in love. Isn't that everyone dreams of and wants? We begin in the stars and tumble together as leaves. Finally united as one. The perfect ending.

[Richard🖌]

G'Day, Andra Dear 🌼

How lovely a pleasure your delightfully expressed thoughts have made sharing my humble poetic efforts.

True, too, I'd warmly cherish believing all lovers dream of and want a sweetly-coupled landing. ⁓ Richard🖌

[Andra Davis]

Gee I am into such good poetry as yours. About to read more. Thanks :)

[Dave]

An ode to lost love? To have had the brilliance of light afforded by the shooting star. To hope that somehow
that golden love will be revived and once again make love whole. Thank you for this brilliance.
Take care - Dave

[Richard🖌]

Greeting, Dear Dave!

Nice to hear from you.
As usual, the keen essence of your insightful review rivals that of my humble poetry.

Blessings of grateful thanks to you, M'Friend! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Dave]

Richard - it is so good to hear from you.
Take care - Dave

[Betty Hermelee]

A beautiful, poignant love poem, with vivid images and a fine structure...and form "we'll land together
embraced..sheer ecstasy"
Warmly, B

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dear Betty 🥀

You always share something meaningful in review that let's me know you've enjoyed my hopeful efforts … and, that we've connected in some special way.

I, too, favor the lines you've highlighted.
Thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard🖌

[June bug]

This is one wonderful write, Love the Octet form. Always been intrigued by it.
I've tried to write in that form before but it is hard.
Love your write, I enjoyed that last verse.

[Richard🖌]

Good morning, Dear JB 🌤

It is a distinct honor to receive the gracious warmth of your inspiringly lovely words in review to this rather sad, but uplifting verse.
Yes, the Octet can be quite the challenge, but I know you can do it.

Thank you for loving and enjoying my humble efforts! ⁓ Richard 🌾