Meeting and Departing ⛩️

TANKA, a dusted-off selection from the archives some might still enjoy.

Author's Note

Artwork from Google Images

"SADNESS IS"
"There are sweet relationships both know are not to be ⁓
yet, for one (or both) it can be arduous to let go.
May you always dance upon soft winds."

TANKA
(short song)
For courtship between men and women
Oldest of Japanese poetry (600 AD)
Predates Haiku by 1000 years
Syllable count: 5-7-5-7-7
Creator is unknown
Sans rhyme

Please, offer any honest critique that's believed will better this work.
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Reviews

[Marie]

The format of the Tanka appeals to me very much. I love how you divided up your Tanka into three lines plus two and how artistically you divided the two. It's like the beginning and the end of the relationship. A very warm, tender write with a sense of loss on completion of the relationship, for me. I love your chosen piece of Japanese Artwork and the happy picture you paint of the lovers who are drawn like magnets to each other and a sense of poignant release is felt when the relationship is terminated. So much imparted to the reader in five lines of sublime poetry. Lovely work, Richard! Thank you for sharing...

[Richard🖌]

Maidin mhaith, a chara Marie 🍀

To me, it's quite remarkably uncanny how you seem to effortlessly grasp and accurately interpret the essence of my poetic inferences … as though you'd been there in my mind helping lay thoughts and imaginings into words.
The artistic designs are something I created and dubbed "Letter Lace":
https://www.writerscafe.org/RichardJ/blogs/%2A%26%238275%3BLETTER-LACE%26%238275%3B%2A/151274/

It is a distinct joy sharing with you and receiving your always graciously inspired reviews.
Thank you ever-so gratefully, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard ⛩️

[Marie]

Dia is Mhuire dhuit, a Ristaird (Good morning, Richard. Literal treaslation is God and Mary be with you). Thank you for your kind words! I really love the "Leter Lace", it is very attractive in the layout of the poem. La brea duit (have a nice day!) and enjoy (bain taithneamh as)!

[Richard🖌]

Do fhile is humhal 🙏

[Marie]

Go raibh maith again, file daor...

[Lisasview]

How wonderful that I should find this fabulous Tanka amount your many posts... Love the image...the font and of course relate to the words.
Wonderful and I see a new message has popped up for lucky me... on now to read it!!!
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly, Lady Lisa 😌

Nothing inspires more completely than the gracious praise and expressed love of one's earnest work, by such a skilled artist as yourself.

A day to you as beautiful as you've made mine! ⁓ Richard ⛩

[Lisasview]

Your response ...so lovely and so poetic pulls at my heart strings...

[Richard🖌]

-⁓•✨🙃✨•⁓-

[Kim S.]

I enjoy a good Tanka, of course this one is amazing.
Love the emotions you presented in yours.
Love the set up of your Tanks.
This is very well written.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Kim, ever-so kindly ⛩

That you "love" anything about this earnest little Tanka, fills my poetic heart with gentle warmness.

Your praise 'n expressed enjoyment feel like soft caresses! ⁓ Richard🖌

[mou]

Tanka is one of my favorite forms of poetries. Richard, you've painted the emotions with some beautiful, soft, unalloyed words. It feels like a karmic pull. I too have felt it somewhere. Anyway, nowadays I'm trying not to read too much between some hollow lines of this world. Great write!
-mou.

[Richard🖌]

Namasté, Mou ⛩

I shall take a stroll through your portfolio to read and review your Tanka … it's great to find another Japanese stylist here at the Café.
That our mutual karma meets through poetry makes sharing my work with you a true pleasure … like a sort of welcome homecoming.

Thank you for your graciously encouraging compliments, too, Dear Poetess....
May the sky smile warmly down upon You! ⁓ Richard🖌

[mou]

'... like a sort of welcome homecoming...' oh thank you so much, Richard. It feels so warm in your kind and gracious welcome. I'd love to read more of your thoughts and kindness. Blessed be..
-mou

[Richard🖌]

My thoughts and kindness are yours, Mou 🙏

[poetgurl]

Love the print type you used for this wonderful write. Enjoyable read

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, PG 🌻

For loving anything about my humble poetic efforts.
You should try the Tanka … I know you'd create a poetic beauty. : )

I love it that you enjoyed this one! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Poetic Beauty]

The beginning and the end. The middle is where all the magic happens

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear PB 🍒

Your words … no more familiarly knowing truth was ever spoken.

May you enjoy many magical "middle" moments! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Poetic Beauty]

Smiles thank you. The middles are amazing if we take a moment to let go enjoy them

[Richard🖌]

Carpe diem, dear lady-poet!

[June bug]

LOVE TANKA FORM....
This is remarkable. Much enjoyed. I love the shape of the writing.
This is a wonderful write.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you again, Lady JB 🐞

Your graciously generous compliments inspire a bard's joyful pleasures, enriching his most fervent hopes with sincere gratitude.

With brightest blessings! ～ Richard🖌

[Susan 🦋]

How can some words be so beautifully sad? As in the meeting and departing... perhaps, more so in the knowing. Yet, those that touch our lives in such wonderful ways, truly never depart. It seems to be that we hold those moments close, they comfort us, and forever cherish what was gifted. Sometimes things don't turn out they way we want them to. Sometimes we have to settle for the little gifts. :) Aww what a Tanka! Beautifully written with every felt word... perfected illustrated. Heart-tugging little Sunday morning read. :-)

[Richard🖌]

Dear Susan🍀

It never ceases to amaze how clearly and completely you always grasp the core substance of whatever my battered old pen has created and laid upon the page.
Yet, it's not only how you perceive poetic truth, it's in the many ways you expand it to twice its size in essence and significance.
Your keen, intuitive mind is, indeed, a Godly wonder … not to mention your own masterful poetic skills.

I am so glad you've shared with me for almost a decade … thank you, Susan ⁓ Richard🍀