Golden Words (promise)

Quatrains in a/b/c/b 6-count: For someone special who's been waiting on something new from my olde pen🖌 Rhyming Quatrains in a dancing 6-count, with an abcb rhyme scheme … hope you enjoy. : )

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Golden Words

O’ that I were handsome,

buff as I want to be,

I’d sweep you off your feet …

steal then your love for me.

I’d be there beside you,

listening to your woes,

offering soft solace …

embraced through highs ’n lows.

We'd share each ardent wish

to cross our minds each day,

swallow your breathless sighs,

letting you have your way.

Paint the sky above you

soft fuchsia of your lips,

kiss their willing wonders …

all others’ they’d eclipse.

Strum you a melody

more precious than a rose,

sing you songs of romance …

up-curl your happy toes.

We’d lay beneath the stars,

speak love words without sound,

feel stirrings in our hearts,

with fireflies all around.

When highest moonglow soars,

reflecting in our eyes,

we’d sweetly surrender …

make-love ’til first sunrise.

Those promises we'd make,

vows never to be broke …

Nature there to witness

each golden word we'd spoke.

Richard W. Jenkins

    © 17 Jan 2023

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Author's Note

Artwork from Pinterest: Guitar Lover's Embrace, digital watercolor by Nicki Marie Smith, ©2012.

All "well-meant" constructive critique you feel will improve my skills and/or better this poem are welcomed and appreciated. Thank you for reading. ✍🏼

Reviews

[Alla Antsis]

Richard, your poetry is light, airy, bubbly, with smells of the light perfume and lilies…. How does one have such a way of delivering??? Even when I am at ease with joy, contentment and surrender, I am not able to get there. You must have a distancing ways and loving protected heart. It is a very distinct and special talent… and I truly envy yours.

[Richard🖌]

How lovely, Alla 🌺

You truly are to treat me to the song of your sweet poetic voice.
That which you say of Me, mirrors my sentiments of You

Hugs 'n smiles of grateful thanks to thee, Dear Poetess ⁓ Richard🖌

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Hellos, Dear Richard,
I love the romance of the prose-poem.
It tingles me because it is provokative.
I most love the part of the surrender to her sigh with breath,
great write,
----1809 Black Plague December

[Richard🖌]

Hello there, Yourself🌿

I thank you most gratefully for selecting this quick-paced rhyming poem in dedication to the notion of an impendingly promising love affair.
That my words tingle you with provocation, and that you love any part of them, inspires my delighted pen to dance again.

Thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard🖌

[1809 Black Plague December]

Aww, inspiration. love that.
your most welcome, a pensiscule is so endearing,
to a writ, nothing so much happier, er, and fulfillment of an avid gastier (love realationsh)) of something forbidden,n, ----Mayanrd

[HuckFinnleyyy]

I thought this poem was wonderful and really beautiful. I absolutely loved that poem. Keep up the good work!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you sincerely, Finnley,

For sharing this lighthearted little composition, for finding such favor in it, and for your graciously inspiring words of encouragement.

My best to thee, Syr! ⁓ Richard

[Susan 🦋]

And here is it... the poetry that melts a heart and holds every breath, as it's read. Those golden words are simply captivating. No handsome buff needed. Beautiful souls always recognize each other. They are drawn by the beauty within... and there lies the magic of love. What more is there to say? Outstanding! Certainly, a treat to all of us romantics!

[Richard🖌]

Happy Sunny Saturday, Susan ☀️

How wonderful to receive such high appreciation and accolades from one of the sites premiere poetesses.
You never fail to let me know we've connected in a deeply meaningful manner … what better could a hopefully humbled bard wish for?
This particular piece is quite special to me, and I am pleased you've taken to it with such affectionate aplomb.

Thank you ever-so warmly, Susan ⁓ Richard 🌼

(PS: the delete is because the site cut my first comments in half)

[Susan 🦋]

No worries ( I’ve had trouble with too with the site) and you are welcome ☺️

[Susan 🦋]

… with site too 🙄

[Richard🖌]

I comprendé Susan fluently … LOL!

[Susan 🦋]

😂 so true.

[heavenscentgirl1]

THESE BEAUTIFUL GOLDEN WORDS ARE AWESOME AND MADE MY HEART. MELT AS I READ EACH LINE. KEEP WRITING THESE BEAUTIFUL LINE. Keep Writing YOUR BEAUTIFUL POETRY. RICHARD! MJ😇

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Mary Jo,

For always supporting me and enjoying these humble pieces I love to share.

Keep thee warm and well! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Relic]

What a surprise to see something new and unexpected by you, Richard. Your talent for romantic poetry is unbeatable, in my humble opinion.

Excellent writing. :)

[Richard🖌]

Happy morning from Texas, Dear Tim 🤠

Here's hoping all's fine in your neck-o-th'-woods, My Friend.
"New and unexpected." I like that, though, there are a couple of more recent pieces; albeit; ne'er a one romantic.
Your "humble opinion" matters a great deal to this olde bard; especially, when it shines with such gracious aplomb.

Thank you ever-so gratefully, Brother Tim, for your accolades and for taking time to share and comment on this flighty fantasy piece! ⁓ Richard🖌

[willweb]

That was really well written. A golden love poem filled with affection, desire and devotion. The rhyming is nice and the cadence gives this piece a songlike quality. Beautifull done.

[Richard🖌]

Good mornin', Fellow-Texan 🌤

It's such a pleasure, here on the Gulf Coast, to receive your gratifying words of expressed appreciation in tribute to my humble poetic efforts.

Thank you ever-so gratefully, Will, for reading me, and for your eloquent graciousness! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

This is beautiful and long awaited! It's like the first breath of spring, promising warmth and roses. It reminds me of a video that I saw once of a cluster of a half a billion Monarch butterflies in a grove. As the weather warmed, the forest came to life with the flutter and sounds of all the Monarch butterflies. As they flew from the trees, it was like a cascade of golden leaves, a shower of golden coins. I am glad that you dusted off your old pen finally to shower us with the treasure of your words. It's going to be a good year indeed!

[Richard🖌]

Top-o-th-mawnin' to ya, Linda Marie 🍃

I am simply thrilled you found such gratifying favor in these imaginative make-believe verses of flighty romance and promise. My imagination does tend to have a mind all its own. 😏
My education on the Monarchs was via an hour long PBS documentary, following their migration in early Fall from as far north as Southern Canada to the southern tropical forests of Mexico to breed, flying in hoards for thousands of miles. They pass through the middle of Texas from late September to around the middle of November, and a second wave across Houston in the Gulf Southeast for about three weeks until the second week in November; then, the new adults return throughout Spring and Summer … each trip takes 4-6 generations to make the trip each way. It's an awesome sight to see so many beautiful Monarchs resting overnight in yards, trees, shrubs, and fields taking-off again at first light.
Your juxtaposition of the Monarch's mass beginning flight to "a cascade of golden leaves, a shower of golden coins" is sheer perfection in imagery, but what else would one expect from You?

Thank you so very much, Linda Marie, for sharing this romantic little fantasy piece with me and for your encouraging praise.

My olde pen and I are warmly a'blush! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Lisasview]

Ahhh, Richard my dear, such a lovely poem.
Full of want and desire …
Words are so very important
even quietly unspoken.
I love the easiness of your rhymes…
The flow moves me along its side.
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dear Lady Lisa 🎶

How inspiring it is to an olde bard's hopes that you've enjoyed this little homage to romantic fantasy enough to shower it with such graciously generous accolades.

May your day be filled with wondrous songs and a basketful of sunshine smiles! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome... Hopes are what dreams are made of...
Lisa

[Robert Trakofler]

what a nice melody these lines make:) the structure of 6/6 makes a surprising tune with the interlacing stressors I never try this but I like it very much I oft do quatrains of 6/8/6/8 for this type of poem. the feeling that flows from these lines is perfectly crafted old friend

[Richard🖌]

Hello, My Dear Robert 🌾

I've missed you so, Ol' Friend …
so glad to hear your smiling voice,
your absence at an end.

Yes, isn't it like magic, the dancing rhythms metered lines can create when blended with lovely laid syntactic words in flowing poetic voice?
The 8/6/8/6 Ballade meter is one of the most enduring all-time popular of them all, and your 6/8/6/8 count is one I have yet to try, but is sure interesting enough to give a go, and I soon shall.

Thank you so very much for sharing this wee romantic poem with me, and your blessing's bright praise! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Richard🖌]

OOPS!
I meant 8/8/8/6 Ballad meter, not Ballade … sheesh, don't get olde, it ain't hardly worth it!