Haiku (freedom) ⛩

Haiku (traditional 5-7-5, no rhymes, about Nature/season, sans capitalization and punctuation)

Haiku (freedom)

staunchly without fail

each season guarding nature

gifts its own release

rwjenkins

©2022

Author's Note

Please, feel free to to offer constructive advice. ⛩

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

Dear Richard, I have no constructive advice to offer, only complimentary. Each season bestows its beauty upon us.How fortunate we are to grasp what we see, what we feel, and what we remember of each transition. Living in California has afforded me a glimpse of mountains in the spring, and breathless snow caps in the winter. I've seen the nesting of a mourning dove from early spring into fall, and the contrast of light and shade each season reveals. To capture that in poetic verse, is quite remarkable. Be it a Haiku or a sonnet. I love the traditional 5-7-5, no rhyme of the Haiku. It seems a most appropriate way to pay homage to Mother Nature. You are a joy to read, my friend. Truly.

[Richard🖌]

Dear Kelly 🌾

No one touches me in the ways you do, more deeply or graciously sincere.

Thank you for still enjoying my humble verse … hugs! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Betty Hermelee]

Each season gives a gift to the following season....perhaps it's a wilting flower, a drop of rain, a gentle breeze, a colorful bud..... the seasons melt into one another.....beautiful Haihu
Best, B

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dear Betty-San 🌸 ベティさん様

I'm so happy you chose this journey through seasonal freedom to interpret so perfectly in your own sweet poetic voice.

Thank you ever-so warmly, Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard ⛩

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Richard!
Best, B

[Throwing Romeo]

Peacock feathers plucked "





Skillfully scraped to the quick




Un smudged victory!

[Richard🖌]

Thanks,





I think.




read moreThanks,





I think.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful dance of words my friend. I did enjoy.
Coyote

[Richard🖌]

Hey, John!

Thanks for reading, enjoying, and for the compliment! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Richard.

[lightsong]

This is absolutely a most outstanding rewarding Haiku. the power of Nature, the yielding of seasons to this power to create magnificent awes of miracles and graces... wow! this one sets the imagination free... B.T.W, You always make me smile when I read your notes, I mean WHO will give a constructive advice to the Master of constructive advises?! lol

[Richard🖌]

Dang, the site keeps cutting-off my response … let me try again:

Oh-GOSH, Lady Ghounwah أنا أحبه دائمًا عندما تكون قريبًا 🌸

Thank you ever-so warmly for sharing this little Haiku verse in homage to Nature's seasons … your words flow through a bard's grateful senses as though written with mystical, star-kissed ink.
Your confidence in my skill inspires great pleasures, indeed … yet, I must confess that much of what I know came from those who've made suggestions, offered constructive critique, pointing out my weaknesses and errors.
Still, accolades, like yours, are the elixir most poetesses and poets give their best efforts to hopes of receiving … and, coming from You, the masterfully skilled artist you are, means all that much more.

With warmest heart smiles! ⁓ ريتشارد🖌

[lightsong]

NOW IT'S MY TURN WITH THIS SITE, LET ME TRY AGAIN,

That one of the things which I always admired about You, your Pride along your humility.

100 for your Arabic talent, 10 for this STUPID site!

[Richard🖌]

LOL, Ghounwah!
It CAN become quite frustrating at times, eh? This is why I've learned to write reviews and responses offline … in this way, I can always copy/paste them as many times as required to get 'er done. 😏

العناق والابتسامات

[lightsong]

H aha ahaa! YOU are not the only smart one here😏 I always copy them just IN CASE 😎

read moreH aha ahaa! YOU are not the only smart one here😏 I always copy them just IN CASE 😎

Hugs"Smiles*

[lightsong]

DAMMMMNNNNN AGAINNNN!!!!

H aha ahaa! YOU are not the only smart one here😏 I always copy them just IN CASE 😎

Hugs' SMiles**

[Cherrie Palmer]

Richard I really enjoyed your new poem. I discovered it as I was talking my lunch .
-And -
without using 'the' as it should be.
What a simple flow of thought. Very elegant.

[Richard🖌]

Smile*

Cherrie, you mean you even do poetry while you're a lunch break?
It makes me so very happy to know you've enjoyed this tiny Haiku, and that you consider it elegant is like a nice bright cherry on top. ; )

You're right, of course, Cherrie, but few know that Haiku should be free of determiners such as" a, an, the, this, these, that, those, many, much, lots, most, some, any, my, yours, his, hers, their, and every, etc.
And, conjunctions such as: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so, etc.
We could immerse ourselves in all the intricacies of Haiku and Senryu for the rest of the day … they are quite complex poetic forms; far more-so than most might think.

You got me on a roll, but you usually do inspire something in me.
Thank you, Cherrie ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Cherrie Palmer]

Sometimes I'm trapped by the sound a phase makes. When that occurs I have a hard time cutting out such no-no words such as 'the'.
But eventually I do.
When I read something so well balanced as you write ✍️ I have ato try it again.

[Richard🖌]

Cherrie,
I can certainly relate to what you're saying.

I, too, have the same issue, but this is why a correctly composed Haiku or Senryu is more of a challenging form than first meets the eye.
It can take a bit of creative thinking to get it right … but, if one does not know the intricacies of Japanese forms, they never will.
I can go back through my own Haiku/Senryu pieces and pick them apart with this's and thats where I failed to follow the required details.

Thank you most humbly and gratefully for your very nice compliment, CP ⁓ RJ

[duff]

Skillfully done and I really like your choice in wording. An enjoyable read.

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, Duff,

For reading, your compliments, and letting me know you enjoyed this little Nature piece.

Springtime joy to you! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Lisasview]

Hi Richard,
I really enjoyed this..
Yes, each season, as each new day and each moment can release hidden gifts..
One just need to be open.
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Lisa 🌸

Your enjoyment is my reward.
True what you say, an open mind and heart will be able to harmonize and appreciate Nature (and, human nature) all the more.

Springtime pleasures galore! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome dear Richard...
Lisa

[keith]

my appreciation for haiku is the binding elements of nature observed
very thoughtful ... staunchly eh?

[Richard🖌]

Thanks Keith,

For the read and review.
staunchly | adverb | in a very loyal and committed manner.

Happy Spring to ya! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[keith]

it's a good word

[Richard🖌]

I like it, too. : )

[.]

Somebody here once introduced me to haikus... I've been coming across more like these since then. Sorry, I have no suggestions since I'm not good enough at that but you're amazing at writing, I've read your other poems before. Just here to say that I enjoyed this. :)

[Richard🖌]

Greetings, Céramique 🌿

With hat in hand, I gratefully thank you for your gracious praise of my humble writings, and for letting me know you've enjoyed this wee Japanese Haiku of homage to The Seasons.

A lovely Springtime to you! ⁓ Richard 🍃