s n o w f l a k e s ⁓ f l y i n g

Senryu

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Author's Note

Feel free to offer anything you think will help. ✍

Reviews

[Marie]

Wow! What an amazing picture you paint for your reader of snowflakes falling on a cold winter's day, Richard. Gorgeous imagery! Love the alliteration and simile and how you describe the snowflakes drifting into your heart where they were sure to melt in its warmth. Lovely work, Richard. Thank you so very much for sharing...

[Richard🖌]

Dear Marie ❄️

'tis so very true
such a joy sharing with You
what I love to do

Thank you, Sweet Poetess! ⁓ Richard 🌨

[Marie]

Most welcome always, dear poet...

[Kelly Scheppers]

It's hard to fathom that those miniscule flakes can amount to such accumulations. But it is mesmerizing nevertheless to watch them fall silently to the ground. I do hope you are well!

[Richard🖌]

Kelly M'Dearest 🍑

I have missed you so
matters not if rain or snow
thy sweet words still flow

I am always and ever-so grateful for You …
warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard🖌

[wu]

At the risk of sounding clche: This is 'beautiful' imagery.
At the risk of loosing a friend before you make one, first thought: wings don't fall.
second thought: how delightful it could have been if it were 'flying like lace crystal wings' instead.
third thought: Richard's given it more thought than I have, I'll go with the poet.
last thought: I wonder if this what he meant by 'meaningful reviews'.

[Richard🖌]

Greetings, Mr. Abrams 🍃

Thank you sincerely for selecting one of my humble poems to read and critique, for the encouraging compliment, and for sharing your wonderings and thoughts of my own intentions and meanings.
True, normally "wings don't fall," but imaginary lace crystal snowflake wings do. The thought of "snowflakes" flying and soaring up and about (to me) creates a different imagery than that of my mind's-eye … and, I'm thinking to interpret such metaphor literally would undo its intent of fantasy wonderment.
I think your review is in the upper register in meaning, in that it is open, honest, and well-intended toward inspiringly helping to better this piece and my penmanship.

What more could a hopeful bard wish from one of his astute readers than this?

Blessings, my fine new friend! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Richard🖌]

As wished, Syr Wu,
"falling" has been changed to "flying" and I like to so much better now.read moreAs wished, Syr Wu,
"falling" has been changed to "flying" and I like to so much better now.

Thank you sincerely for your input … you made it dance a happier little step. : )

[Writergurl]

Such a beautiful sweet write, sweet and lovely, such a beautiful Senyru,

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so gratefully, writergurl 🌾

May you be as blessed as your lovely words have made me feel! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Kim S.]

This is a very beautiful write here. soft and lovely

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Beckie,

You've spoken to my heart.

Hugs to you for that! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Wow, ever so lovely, enjoyed this beautiful write

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Kesch ❄️

Ever-so softly ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

hope you will check out some of my writes, i am just learning a Triolet form... Hope you have a great day.

[Richard🖌]

I'll make it a point to, Kesch.

The Triolet is a rather complex poetic form, one from you I look forward to enjoying.

Bless you for all your lovely reviews today.
Smiles to thee! ⁓ RJ

[poetgurl]

aww this is such a lovely read here,
beautiful art work

[Richard🖌]

Thank you so much for your nice compliments! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[AYVID N]

Beautifully written and presented, Richard. I pictured feelings as soft snowflakes drifting into a heart. A very soothing read..

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Divya 🌨

May your own heart-kissed snowflakes drift softly down upon your lovely upturned hand.

Keep thee warm 'n well! ⁓ Richard🖌

[AYVID N]

You are welcome :)

[Robert Trakofler]

simply perfect penning! maestro

[Richard🖌]

With a most humble bow 🙏

Namasté ⁓ Richard ❄️

[Unspoken poet]

Oh This is so Beautiful Richard!
So nicely penned and love the layout of this

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly, Kimmie Dear❄️

Ahhh, your words in praise and love send a hopeful bard's heart into song and dance.

Keep thyself well 'n lovely! ⁓ Richard🖌