Love's Dreams (lusty mist)

Quatrains in Iambic Pentameter w/an aabb, ccdd, etc; rhyme scheme. Also, presented more simply and in a different rhyme-scheme as "The best of Dreams".

Author's Note

ARTWORK by Andrew Gonzalez, "Summoning" … oil and gesso on board.

Constructive critique is always welcome! 😃

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Riding the edge of of a mature label. Which is part of why the poem is so good. You take us there in the room but don't quite let us see it all. Soft core poetry. The lust of your words tempered by their eloquence. If this is just a dream it must have been a doozie! And a little wet.

Studying punctuation.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Bill,

For another thoughtful review.
Yes, discrepancy in erotica is a fine-line art, to be sure, but to be truthful, I've read poems by 12-17 year olds that would curl many a grownup's toes … especially, their parents'.
Thank you most gratefully for the "eloquence" compliment.
Nicely worded review, mostly.

It's truly encouraging you're studying punctuation in a world where grammar, unfortunately, seems to be an art mourant! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

I went back through each and every one of your poems looking for a Bi~Trillet I could review ...but I could not find one.
Did you not post one?
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

I've fallen so far behind,

After my teaching retirement, being offline for so long, and not commenting on reviews, I'm making a quick thank you with a very grateful acknowledgment to everyone for their wonderful input and feedback.

lisa, I'm not sure if I have a Bi-Trillet posted on here, or not.

Big smiles 'n hugs to one and all! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

No worries... one can always find a way to catch up..

[W. Barrett Munn]

Richard,
I think end rhymes and rhyme schemes can get redundant and should on occasion be replaced with near rhyme or assonance, especially if not writing a structured form such as sonnet or villanelle.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Barrett,

Interesting thoughts you pose in ending or preventing redundancy, in the event that spot-on rhyming is considered as such.
In that the definition of redundant includes unnecessary, not required, inessential, unessential, needless, unneeded, uncalled for, surplus, and superfluous … concerning this particular poem, I could not agree with you less, and slant rhyme, in my discernment, displays a distinct laziness or limited imagination on the part of a poet, unless it's utilized in songwriting … but, that's just my point of view.

Thanks for stopping by for a read and sharing your input,
Richard

[W. Barrett Munn]

I like to think of rhyme as a tool to be used when needed. My opinion is that a really good-to-great poem never seems forced or contrived, but adhering to a rhyme scheme can create awkward syntax.
That said, I think you do a very fine job of handling rhyme and I wondered if you also gave written blank verse or syllabic poetry?

[Richard🖌]

Finally,
A poet I see eye-to-eye on forced and contrived rhymes. Of course, rhymes are always needed in rhyming poetry … without saying.
"Adhering to a rhyme scheme can create awkward syntax." And, many other untoward issues, if one is unskilled in their use.
To me, this particular poem is heavy with rhyme, because of its aabb rhyme-scheme, which is essentially Rhyming Couplets formed into Quatrains. Normally, when I compose in Quatrains the rhyme-scheme would be abab, abcb, abba, etc; but, to me, every rhyme-scheme is legitimate in poetry, deserving the opportunity to be skillfully presented.
My favorite Quatrain poetry is the Ballad form in 8/6/8/6 count, abcb, defe, etc; rhymes.
Barrett, Blank Verse is one of the first forms I learned (along with the Sonnet), and I love it, but have perhaps only a couple posted onsite, which I'll find for you, if you're interested.
Syllabic poetry I enjoy the discipline and constraint of, because it forces the writer to be creative in their syntax and diction in meeting proper line-breaks and enjambments.

Thanks for the lively and interesting chats.

[KAREN]

Beautiful and full of love and passion!

[Richard🖌]

Thanks, STT,
For your read, review, compliment, and comments.

[Lisasview]

Hi Richard,
Not only did I read your poem several times but I also decided to read the reviews.
I find it so interesting the differences in what reviewers felt from your words...but that is often the case.
I say potato..you say potatoe...
We read what we want to hear in the poems we read..
Although I disagree with some of the reviews..I do understand where they are coming from.
For me this poem represents a sensual meeting of hearts..a continuous bond.. Although more likely imagined through lovely dreams.. it seems so very real to him. These are his wishes which come true in his dreams.. "Removed, all inhibitions in our dreams... " I felt this line tells it all..
Loved this poem..speaks to my heart as many of your lovely poems do dear Richard,
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Lisa Dear🌿

Every now and again, someone special, with a good eye, a tender heart, and an understanding mind will come across one of my pieces and graciously bless an olde bard's humble, but earnest, efforts to write for those he hopes will find value, interest, and reward … then, possesses the wherewithal and skill to convey it adequately.
Your interpretation is exactly what I was going for, Lisa, and spoke straight to my heart, too.

Bless you with the happiest dreams of all … Cozy hugs 'n happy smiles galore! ⁓ Richard 😊

[Lisasview]

Glad that a year ago I was understanding your words..
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

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[Lisasview]

And, of course even better now... Miss writing but as soon as our guests go I will be back... To drive you crazy...wait that could mean more than one thing....
Lisa

[Unspoken poet]

Such a lusty write indeed, nicely flow with your words.
Enjoyed this, found it romantic as well.

[Richard🖌]

Ah, Kimmie 🥀

You always say the nicest things that let me know I'm enjoyed and appreciated … thank you ever-so warmly.

Yes, romance is middle name ; ) ⁓ Richard🖌

[Unspoken poet]

my middle name is Laundry, it seems like i am always doing laundry. Not a problem. Hope you have a great day and week ahead

[Richard🖌]

I wish the very same for You, dear lady-poet.

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Such a remarkable write here, so vividly stunning and so well written

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Kesch, for your beautiful words of praise and expressed enjoyment.

Happiest hugs to you! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Susan 🦋]

What an absolutely stunning write...and dream. Those starlit skies just add to the romance and yearnings! Such tender dreams playing within Lovers hearts... Agreed, one, should never let go. Captivating and enthralling words of the heart.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Susan, ever-so warmly 🔑

Within the tender essence of your words, the golden key to love seems to have found a perfect fit into your heart.

Such a beautiful review, Dear Poetess.
With happy new year hugs! ⁓ Richard🖌️

[R E Tree]

One moment while I gather up my thoughts...

By reading the description, I take it that this poem was written to be part of a contest. In any case, it is a sensational read.

I do think the image slightly contradicts the poem. The image shows a woman letting go of a man who is reaching out towards her. Shouldn’t they be holding each other tightly instead of creating distance. The poem seems to be based on closeness and intimacy. I just don’t think the image delivers that message to the reader.

Moving on...

I like the decorative detail and you have a good choice in font style. It gives the poem a fantasy feel to it. I like how each line creates a passionate flow to the poem. Twirled and creased really stand out for me.

Overall an excellent, powerful read!

[Richard🖌]

Warmest salutations, Dear Rosie🥂

I thank you most gratefully for another of your in-depth, gracious visits and reviews.
First, thank you sincerely for such a "sensational," "excellent," and "powerful" compliments on this rather warmly embracing poetic piece of evocatively succulent ardor, and for liking my decorative detail and font choice. Also, I very much appreciate your own choice in highlighted line … it's one of my mine, too.

The artwork is titled, "Summoning" and is meant to express two soul's auras (aural bands flowing around and through each other), the bonding of lovers in dream or prayer-like state, melding into one: she, with open, willing arms; he, reaching out to her to her to "come"! though, I can easily perceive the validity of your own interpretation. I'd considered other artwork choices before settling on this one, because what I saw in its meaningful depth and mind's-eye beauty.

Such an eloquent, succinctly honest review, Rosie.
With much appreciation and warmth to thee, Dear Poetess ⁓ Richard 🍃

[R E Tree]

Now it’s starting to make sense.

I can see why you like the artwork. I suppose it is captivating and it cries out for attention. The image itself is unavoidable.

And of course you are welcome, anytime Richard. 🖊📕

[barleygirl]

OH! COME! ON! RICHARD!!! Are you getting to be too much of a RELIC to torch a page properly anymore? I know you're more of a horndog than this measely lukewarm offering. You're not fooling anyone with this namby-pamby version of low-calorie sensuality. "Light the Site on Fire" will require erotica, my man. (I love that title of the challenge, however! You do get kudos for thinking that up!) This chilly morning I'm huddled in front of the woodfire trying to keep my writing up to adequately sizzling levels (((HUGS)))

[lightsong]

I told You Richard She will BEAT YOU UP🤣 and I agree miss Margie 🤣

[Richard🖌]

LOL! 😏

Well, I suppose it isn't exactly what I'd call an inferno … but, in my defense, I was trying to spare those with sensitive imaginations. With a challenge from You and Lady Ghounwah, I should have known better.
Be mindful how close you get to the fireplace … I've heard sugar melts! ; ) ; )
My apologies, Dear Poetess … perhaps, my next effort, "Parched Lips" will prove more satisfactory to your more lavishly lusty taste.

Thanks for liking my challenge title … muahhh*
Cozy hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃