.... The TRAIN .... (sojourner's yearning)

Unmetered Sestets … I was asked, "Don't you write anything but classical poems?" Then, Cherrie said, "So, let's have a train poem, in your unique voice." For Cherrie; and, it's not classical. 😃

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. . . . T h e  T R A I N . . . .

The train of love,

the train of life,

take the train away from strife.

Buy your ticket

'n steal away  . . .

tarry not nor stop to play.

Pack your bags

all full and neat;

then, reserve a comfy seat.

There's upperclass;

then, lower, too . . .

I'm in the middle, it is true.

So, tell Conductor

when you board,

"Sorry, it is all I could afford."

Though, matters not

what lies ahead . . .

a pullman car with sleeper bed.

There'll be scenes galore

'cross mountains high,

wondrous visions passing by.

And, when I'm hungry

there's a dining car,

with drinks aplenty at the bar.

You see, this train

is not brand new;

its the kind to pull you through

when there's no hope,

no laughter left,

only happiness bereft.

So, go book The TRAIN

down that long railroad track.

Clickety-clack, I ain't coming back.

"A l l l   a b o a r d !!"

Richard W. Jenkins

©2020

Author's Note

Illustrations from Google Images

Be sure to read Cherrie's train poem, "Sleepy Whistle".
https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Cherrie_Palmer/2488602/

Please, feel free to offer constructive critique. ✍

Reviews

[Susan 🦋]

Ok where do I buy a ticket!!! LOVING this piece!..WOW... first, the poem. WONDERFUL!!! I need a train like this to pull me through or at least escape for a little bit!!! So nice! Secondly, the presentation is just a treat! It's fun and cheery and clever...Lastly, It made me smile. :-)))))))))))))))))))))) choo choo!

[Richard🖌]

Good morning there, Dear Susan ☕️

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Pack-up only your fancy glad rags,
toss all cares and troubles away;
but, check-in only your big bags,
each filled with a brand new day.
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Then, come step right up, Ma'am,
to the front of a long ticket line;
you will soon see, it isn't a sham.
Destination? Free peace of mind.
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You, with your effulgently inspiring compliments and sweet accolades, always inspire an olde hopeful bard, and are far better than any poem could be. It's so lovely of you, Dear Poetess, to bless such a cool Autumn morn with your generously kind, welcomed warmth.

I'm thrilled you like the presentation, too, Susan … isn't it fun to create?
Your smile is so catching … thank you ever-so happily 😃 ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Just Kim]

This is so amazing! I really love this write, so well written as well.

[Richard🖌]

Howdy from Texas, Kim 👋

What's happening in beautiful Indiana today?
You're so sweet to pick this little gem to read and review for me … you always say the most inspiring things.

That you "love" anything about it makes my heart sing … a big thank you HUG ! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Just Kim]

"Hugs" right back, Things are wonderful here in Indiana. Getting ready to set things up for tonight. I have a group of kids coming over for my every year event called "Kupcakes 4 Kids" We ice them and decorate them together.... The kids love it. Hope you day is going great.

[Richard🖌]

Kim,

My day is going VERY great now … you've just put a huge SMILE on my Halloween day.
Those kids love you to pieces, I'm so-sooo sure.

You have a very sweet caring heart.
MMmmm, iced cupcakes … yummeee! : P

[Just Kim]

it was so much fun, to see them smile and have fun. brought us some laughs and peace for a while.

[Richard🖌]

Wonderful, Kim, and so greatly needed.

Bless your lovely heart. : )

[Cherrie Palmer]

I am so glad I am the first to review. I love the rhythm that drives this poem, and your easy way to convey this journey. I am certain you have inspired many to try an old fashion way of travel. I for one am ready to buy a ticket.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Ya know, I think of all the great reviewers we have here in the cafe, and of course you are one of them. Your skills are endless from your ability to create and your ability to convey. I set in the back of the class and just admire your work :)

[Richard🖌]

Yes, indeed, Cherrie 🚂🚋🚃

How befitting it is you are the first to review this unique piece; because, without your prompt, it would not have been written.
In pacing the rhythm, I thought of train wheels' "clickety-clack" along the track.
It is nice to be recognized as a great reviewer, because I rarely give a token, pat-on-the-head, review … rather, with a truly in-depth effort to be openly honest and inspiring to the writer and for the privilege of sharing their hard earned effort.

Your two ending lines above make my hopeful efforts in working hard to please my readers feel so very worthwhile.
Thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully, Dear Cherrie, for all you do for me, and for all our friends here at the Café … big hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

"ALLLL ABOARD!!!"

[Richard🖌]

Talk about reviewing skills … I'd say yours here is side-by-side with the best. 👍
I certainly feel gratified, appreciated, and happily inspired. 🙃

[prema]

This is a good one . I enjoyed reading .
My poems are more like prose .I am a novice in writing poems .Still thanks for going through it

[Richard🖌]

Uh, thanks, Prema,
But this is Cherrie's review thread.
Please, make your own in the review box under the poem. : )