Without You⁓* (love psalm)

Synergy (an original form by Susan Capozzi: see Author's Note)

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Sweep Springtime breezes’ velvet thrill,

soft sunlight gleams, pure waters spill …

flow trickling, cool, clear crystal streams

through verdant leas ’til mirror-still.

Pure waters spill, soft sunlight gleams,

as Nature wakens lovers’ dreams.

Wave treetops high to clouds above,

swift swallows dip, gray sleeping dove,

swans glide together, smoothly slip.

Such visions beg a gentle shove;

gray sleeping dove, swift swallows dip …

at last, resolve has lost its grip.

Some say they’ve heard, “It’s destiny.”

All others claim, “’Tis magic’s spree!”

One thing’s for sure, whate'er its name,

we were designed for living free …

“’Tis magic’s spree!” all others claim.

Without you ~ love would have no flame.

Richard W. Jenkins

© 10 May 2020

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Author's Note

SYNERGY
(two elements combined, greater than their sum)
An original form created by Susan A. Capozzi
© April 2020
Two sestet verses minimum (6 lines) in iambic tetrameter (8 iambic syllables).
Lines 2 and 5 break at the forth syllable, swap, and repeat with each other,
creating the rhyme scheme a,B-A,b,a,A-B,b as follows:.
xxxxxxxa
xxxBxxxA
xxxxxxxb
xxxxxxxa
xxxAxxxB
xxxxxxxb

Painting: Lovers in The Meadow, oil on canvas … artist unknown.

Please, feel free to offer any honest critique you believe will improve my skills. : )

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

I love your poetry!! I wish I could be so creative with words!! It seems like one of the swallows lost its grip and fell to it's demise (I think); however it's written so beautifully that it comes across as a sometimes event in the course of life....like destiny, or magic, which ensures love us love.... great write Richard!
Fondly, Betty

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so gratefully, Dear Betty 🥀

For such a kind and generous poetess, as you are, to love anything about my humble poetic efforts sends such a bright warmth into my very core … bless you for gifting this wondrous feeling.
As far as you being as creative with words as I am, in your own ways you are. We all have our own sets of skills and various levels of expressing our thoughts, feelings, and emotions, none more valid than another's, and they should never be compared.
Our differences are that which allows us to admire and enjoy our differences, and if your poetry were anything like mine, we would all be missing the wondrously amazing value and beauty that is You … just my humble thoughts, M'Lady. 🍂

Betty, I am so very grateful for your praise, shared feelings, and expressed love of my poetry … your reviews are most inspiring.
With my happiest hug! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Betty Hermelee]

Awww Richard, thank you so much for those lovely thoughts; you’re correct in that all poets have different styles; I’m just happy that you so appreciate mine (as a novice; take care my friend,
Fondly, Betty

[Poetic Beauty]

Without you love would have no flame

This line say so much. That the heat and warmth would disappear. That if this person wasn’t a part of your life there would be no passion flowing forth or warmth within the romantic part of the heart.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, PB, ever-so warmly 🤗

Such a beautifully deep (introspection?) of interpreted meaning you've laid upon that final line … love how your mind works.

Hugs 'n brightest blessings! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. You alway have strong imagery in your poetry and deep emotion.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear PB✨
It's only imagination, fantasizing, deep feelings, and in how one goes about expressing them in the correct harmonious poetic form for the topic.

You're so very lovely to share that with me ⁓ RJ 🍃

[Poetic Beauty]

Most of my poetry is written about something real whether it be a dream or a storm. I can tell you which poem is about what person even my old one. I have a few that are done for fun and creativity but most are spoken from my inner muse that is wanting an emotion or image to be conveyed

[Richard🖌]

In your poetry, from your inner muse,
What you've shared above is not only easily discernible, it's wonderfully experienced and felt ever-so deeply and truly … undoubtably, why I enjoy you so thoroughly. 😊
In my world,
Everything is real … whether fact, fiction, imagination, fantasy, love, life, literally everything … I guess this is why my simple poetry seems so very real to so many.
I was once asked, "Do you ever get writer's block?"
I replied, "Impossible, because everything is my muse." 🙃

[Poetic Beauty]

I do get writers block from time to time or more like I’m apathetic to putting pen to paper. If I simply put my pen on paper words and thoughts spill forth it just making the time to do it

[Richard🖌]

I could never imagine You with writer's block, PB … your mind, heart, and soul are just too filled with life and wonderment.🔆

[Cherrie Palmer]

The ease in which you carry a formatted poem is more than skill, it is like watching a hummingbird weaving a nest, delicate, creative and exact.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly, Lady Cherrie 🔆

Few can make me sigh, the way you do, with your generously gifted, happily received, wondrously laid analogies of my intricately detailed, humble poetic efforts.

You make it feel sooo thrilling to share! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Vertigo Cat1111]

This is amazing! The description of the season of spring, and the weather, makes you feel like your really, truly, and actually there. It's an absolutely beautiful poem with a hint of romance making it even better than it already was in my opinion.

[Richard🖌]

Hm? The site cut my review off midway … here it is again:
Dang! It did it again … last try before I quit. 🤪

Thank you sincerely,

Your earnest words of understanding, expressed appreciation, and praise are what assures a bard his efforts to write for and please his readers have not been wasted.

You've sent me a happy breeze, filled with inspiring smiles! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Vertigo Cat1111]

I'm so happy I could do that! And it was really my pleasure! And it's the worst when the site does that, haha!

[Richard🖌]

Yes,
It's a nuisance glitch the site has always had … fortunately, it rarely happens, but when it does it's a real annoyance -- I guess you know, eh?

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Yes, haha! It can really be the worst when it does happen, but it doesn't very often.

[Richard🖌]

Thank goodness!🙄

[poetgurl]

I think most love have a flame, but it's how it's burnt that matters the most.
You can hold either end of a candle but which way would burn you more?
Thought provoking writing here. Nicely written

[Richard🖌]

Good morning, Dear Lady-Poet 🌸

You speak with a wise and knowing voice, that seems to "feel" the flame of love aglow within you.
Such sweet words embrace a hopeful bard in the arms of warming smiles, assuring him his efforts to share and please are held in high regard.

Thank you ever-so sincerely, Dear Ang-x, for blessing my pages with your glow! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[poetgurl]

I understand more than what people give me credit for, I may not have a degree, but I've been out there in the world living it. That qualifies knowledge of a sort. Especially in today's world.

[Richard🖌]

Well,
To me, you've certainly shone quite a sense for deeper understanding and the ability to express than most I've listened to, and I'm definitely listening to You. : )

[poetgurl]

well thank you kindly, it's nice to talk to someone educated, in which i am not all that highly in

[Richard🖌]

Beautifully spoken, Dear Kimmie,
Thank you sincerely … you're so very welcome.
There's a huge difference between educated and smart … to me, you seem quite well versed on both levels.

[poetgurl]

ah well thank you! You're kind

[Richard🖌]

More honest than kind. : )

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I have always been in awe of your technical genius but to marry that with such ability to captivate through description and scene setting and emotion is truly a gift. This is such a romantic and classic poem Richard.

[Richard🖌]

Bless you, John 🍺

For your always inspiringly expressed, appreciative praise, and for your effulgent sincerity in how you highlight those aspects of a fellow-poet's earnest efforts to write for and please his readers' quests for and with enjoyably worthwhile, well-struck poetry.

Thank you, My Friend John, for finding favor in this humble little piece, and in brightening an otherwise overcast day! ⁓ Richard🍃

[Susan 🦋]

Richard, what an honor for me that you wrote this amazingly beautiful poem in my very own form! I am completely thrilled!! You have taken SYNERGY and composed such a lovely piece full of imagery and feelings and thoughts that simply flow from word to word. A master poet golden in my eyes! A teacher that as opened my heart to this wonderful world of poetry. You never gave up on me. For this, and so much more I am forever grateful! I am so taken aback...reading this again,...my little form and you perfected it. Thank you Richard seems hardly enough...

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so deeply and sincerely, Susan 🌟

Every great once in awhile a special kind of person comes along in one's life to bless them with their physical and inner beauty, intelligence, amazing potential, the dedication, determination, desire, and willingness to accept and take it on with the passion necessary to make it happen … You are one rare individual, and just look at all you've accomplished in the last four years, from novice to Master.
It has been more than a mere pleasure to teach you poetry, Susan Dear … it has been sheer bliss for an olde bard, and how proud I am to pass along our amazing craft. I know the future of the true art of poetry is in good hands.

Thank you for allowing me to compose in your new original form, for all you've expressed in your gratifyingly lovely review, and mostly, simply for being YOU! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Susan 🦋]

Sigh, every time I read this.. it just gets to me. Every time :)

[Richard🖌]

Me, too. 🥂

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Beautiful and free ..meant to be ....wonderful and full of delight🌹🌹

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Kelly Sweet 🦋

You're such a lovely treat,
I can feel your heartbeat
keeping rhythm with my rhyme;
let's You 'n I do it one more time. 😏

Big, warm hugs for the lovely praise, M'Lady! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[barleygirl]

Whatever the form might be, where this poem pops for me is in the alliteration. You've pushed that aspect to the limit, I would say, & well-done. Each line feels as smoothly flowing as the sentiments you express herein. Nice job of highlighting romance while celebrating a fellow writer's form (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Richard🖌]

Thank you so very much, Margie 🌷
From one of our premiere poetesses, your kind and thoughtful words are truly appreciated.

Susan, being somewhat a romantic, herself, I thought to compose this in that vein to honor her style.
I know your favorable comments will gratify and inspire her to continue with her poetic efforts. I am proud of Susan, too: It's not every day one's student creates a new form for others to enjoy and try … I know I have, and it would be wonderful if you might consider one of your own in the Synergy form. : )
For me, the form, itself, lent a natural flow for alliteration and sibilance … I am so grateful you caught and enjoyed it.

Thank you again, Lovely Lady-Poet, with my happiest, most grateful hug! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[kitty]

Nice to be reading you again. You the writer be, is 'Gifted' to bringing life words that captures idylic moments in time ...revived! "...as nature wakens lover's dreams..." Proving too that ..."without U love would have no flame...." True in many cases!

[Richard🖌]

Ah, Dear Lady Kitty 🎶

There's no softer, sweeter voice upon the page than that from thy tender lips beneath one of my humble poetic pieces, and no one's is more romantically pure and sweet.

Thank you ever-so warmly for setting the air abloom with your womanly poetic bouquet … hugs to Thee! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[kitty]

My pleasure, always

[kitty]

Hope you are keeping well and safe. Remembering all the beautiful poetic times. They sta within the heart, mind and soul!

[Richard🖌]

Truly-truly they do, Dear Kitty 🌈💛