You⁓ (to adoration)

Senryu (non-traditional) See comments in Author's Note.

Author's Note

"Senryu (non-traditional)" by virtue that this piece was composed according to the the rules of a contest a number of years back: "Write a Senryu or Haiku in full grammar, complete with rhymes, capitalization, and punctuation." BTW: It took 2nd Place.🎖

Photo: Courtesy of Wikimedia Commons

Please, feel free to offer honest, serious, and well-meant critique. : )

Reviews

[Marie]

A very appealing Senryu, though not composed as traditional Senryu, is equally charming. You have captured the warmth of someone so special superbly in just fourteen words, Richard. Am thrilled that this gem took 2nd Place, but it really should have been chosen in 1st Place, it is so beautiful and the words are complemented by a photo as stunning as the one you have so expertly painted. Thank you for sharing, Richard. So enjoyed reading your delightful poems today. Will be back again...

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Dear Lady Marie 🍷

By virtue of the sweet tastes of your caressing charms, graciously captivating interpretations, and warmly expressed appreciation, what a joyfully delightful thrill you turn sharing into.

It is my honor to write for You, Marie …
a most wonderful weekend to thee! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Marie]

Most welcome always and a very wonderful weekend to you also, dear poet...

[Einstein Noodle]

awwwwww .. you sweet rascal you! :) pleasant romantic senryu .. holding to the rules ... congrats on the 2nd prize award sir!
E.

[Richard🖌]

Howdy, Gene! 😃

Thanks for sharing your expressed enjoyment of this rather flamboyant example of a Senryu, and the always appreciated kudo on its 2nd place win.

Wishin' a sweet weekend for ya, M'Friend! ⁓ Rascal😉

[Red Brick Keshner]

Lovely and sweet. Although my Japanese master cautions us to try and not rhyme which is big in English poetry but not a big element in Japanese. As to the why, I have no clue. Perhaps the repetition aspect of it detracts from the punch of brevity, encapsulating vast ideas and though in as few words as possible or prescribed in Japanese literature's syllabication. Doesn't really bother me but I kinda get the point.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you again, Frederick ⛩

Of course, we know the details for Haiku and Senryu are quite specific; thus, the noted intro, "Senryu (non-traditional)" by virtue that this piece was composed according to the the rules of a contest a number of years ago: "Write a Senryu or Haiku in full grammar, complete with rhymes, capitalization, and punctuation." BTW: It took 2nd Place.🎖

Blessings, Frederick, all your days! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Red Brick Keshner]

oh, thanks, I skipped the intro and dived into the deep. My bad, hehe. A thousand pardons. Frederick

[Richard🖌]

With "her" lovely countenance, who wouldn't jump right on the poem? ; )

[Susan 🦋]

Really such a pretty little write...sparkles and all.

[Richard🖌]

She sorta reminds me of You* ; )

This was for a FanStory Romance Senryu contest, Susan … I don't think it fared so well.

Thanks for reading and the lovely compliment! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Susan 🦋]

aww :-) The Senryu is lovely. FS contest??...well, ya know how I feel about those. I like it and so do others here. It's a winner in my book. :-)

[Richard🖌]

And,
You're a winner in mine.🥇

[Susan 🦋]

What a nice thing to say to me!

[Richard🖌]

It's only what you deserve.

[mattavelli]

Hello. Richard! :)
This is a sweet one. There's a Haiku/Senryu contest going on here now, if you're interested.

[Richard🖌]

Hey, You! 😃

Thanks for the much appreciated accolade.
If the contest is still in swing, let me know (with the URL), and I'll join-in.

Pretty, ain't she? ⁓ Richard 🍃

[heavenscentgirl1]

A perfectly worded Romantic piece by the Master himself. Thanks for sharing your words Richard . Just be careful of the flowers that smell sweet but have hidden thorns. 🌹
Mj 😇

[Richard🖌]

Why,
Thank you, Mary Jo, for your always lovely comments and appreciation of my humble little efforts.

Yes, I've always thought the pure white blackberry blossom is beautiful … LOL! ⁓ Richard ; )

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh silly me I misread that first line as 'Soft as silky thights'!!!!
Changes things slightly. Love this and looking at the pictures I see, like myself, you appreciate woman in many forms lol! A nice rhyming senyru.

[Richard🖌]

LOL!
It's ironic, John, that my mind's-eye, also, first gravitated to "thighs" … go figure! ; )
True, My Friend … like beautiful flowers, my eye travels from one to another, and had I displayed the queue, this page would be filled by naught but lovely lady flowers.

Thank you, John, for reading, and for the "nice" compliment! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Robert Trakofler]

Ha ha! all lovely... a delicious confection wrapped in sparkling cellophane to unwrap

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh-so, My Wise Friend 🥂
Life with women in it is like a variety of the sweetest samples ⁓ for the tongue's palate to be blessed and spoiled by.

I very much enjoy and favor the way you put it best!
Thanks, pal! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Chris Shaw]

Beautiful senryu Richard. Soft as silky sighs, how lovely is that? Certainly full of love and adoration. All good wishes

Chris

[Richard🖌]

Hey, Chris! : )
Thank you ever-so gratefully for your always welcomed visit to my humble pages!

Smiles 'n hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[kitty]

A 'smile' can wipe away sadness and pain. (Dimples help but are not essential - but nice). Thank you for yet again another uplifting piece.

[Richard🖌]

Greeting, Dear Kitty 🌸
It's so nice to see you here today … you've enticed a grateful smile from an olde bard's lips.

Thank you for sharing your lovely voice … big hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[kitty]

You too have put a feeling of warmth to a fellow writer in a time of sorrow: at a time of loss. It goes an and is still raw. Thank you m'Lord, for being there!