The Best Of Dreams (astral spice)

Quatrains (in iambic pentameter, w/an abab, cdcd, etc; rhyme-scheme).

"The Best Of Dreams"

The best of dreams are those I dream of You,
revealed within our aching lust's desire.
Oh, cherished one, I love the things you do,
you raise me up and set my soul a’fire.

Your hungry mouth, it wakes my sleeping eyes;
then, travels to a place we know as bliss.
I feel your warm, wet lips there on my thighs,
as stars explode throughout each wondrous kiss.

Inside our veins there flows a molten stream;
upon love's wind, ride like the steed of night,
release all inhibitions from our dream,
as though they’ve risen-up and took to flight.

Our fiery breath leaves trails across the sky, 
those silver spangled bedsheets twirl and crease.
In rhythmic flow pearl rivers never dry,
like lovers soaked in passion’s full release.

Two naked flames light up the skies above;
our glow’s a beacon to the world below.
The best of dreams are those with You, my love …
and ours, the dreams I'm never letting go.

 

Richard W.Jenkins

©2009

Reviews

[lightsong]

I remember this from Writers' Network, it strikes me now! wow! how many years have passed, I was poetically naive lol. sensual, yet written with sincere emotions. the whole poem is about the union of two souls, travel the universe and be one with it, still the last two verses are the crest. it is where Love flows to the higher meanings and bloom beauty to the world.

[Richard🖌]

Oh, yes, Dear Ghounwah💫

The great circle of life returns us time and again to those moments most treasured that became such a wondrously permanent part of our minds, hearts, souls, and memories … so many years elapsed, but this piece even predates our WN days.
Isn't it amazing how even passing years do not deplete a meaningfully lovely poem's vibrant spirit?
The final two verses speak to me, too … isn't it remarkable how we always seem to harmonize?

Hm? Must have something to do with wavelengths crossing paths.
Thank you dearly, M'Charming Lady-Poet
⁓ Richard🖌

[lightsong]

My a-b-s-t-r-a-c-t m i n d, says to Y O U R S, let u s keep a-b-s-t-r-a-c-t-l-y harmonize~~~😆😆😆

[Hayley]

I've never seen The Maltese Falcon, but I still feel the need to comment something that's along the lines of love being "the stuff that dreams are made of." This is very descriptive & sensory. It's not normally the type of thing I would read, but this is nicely organized and flows well.

[Richard🖌]

G'day, Dear Lady Hayley : )
It is so vey nice to find you here, reading and commenting this rather spicy little piece.
I am truly grateful for your expressed appreciation and shared sentiments, despite making such a generous exception from your normal preference … I suppose, as a man of varying passions, my pen is prone to expressing such beauteously warming wonders of human affection, from time to time.

Thank you sincerely for your lovely words and praise … warmest blessings! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Susan 🦋]

That first line says it all :-) What a lovely dream. Such is the ways when lovers collide. Heart-melting imagery, wording, flow...everything in perfect arrangement. Love it!

[Richard🖌]

Good morning, Lady Susan 🌼
How wonderful it is to be appreciated and so full grasped from the first line of my humble little poem; it's a rare occasion, indeed, that a reader is so insightful … I'm warmly and happily stunned!

Your praise and expressed enjoyment make my every earnest effort feel so deeply gratifying.
Thank you Dear Poetess … big hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you keep to the iambic pentameter perfectly...the second line didn't seem to need "there"
but taking it out would break the meter so it must stay."Two naked flames" simple image in a way...but wow, it works so well.
this has a lofty, floating kind of feel to it...love that is an outer body experience as well as in body.
nicely done, Richard.
j.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Jacob, for selecting this rather fiery little number to read and comment on.
From the perception in your words I know you've connected with my intent, and your constructive critique has helped improve my work. I hope now it reads a little better.
Thank you so very much for your encouraging praise and for lending a keen eye.

I always enjoy and appreciate your reviews, My Friend … brightest blessings to ya! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

glad i could be a bit of help...usually my comments are just reactions to content...

[Richard🖌]

It's not what you say, but in how. : )

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A lilting romantic piece bordering on erotica with perfect form as always Richard. Stanza four is my favourite but each is a lesson in putting words in the right order!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you Dear John,
For such expressions of enjoyment and praise of this warmly sensual verse in homage to the realm of romantically passionate dreams.
I agree with your choice of verse, too … I think it is the core essence of this lovely piece.

Thank you so much, My Friend, for your always appreciated eloquence in review! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[kitty]

Your readers will go into the fantasy of this piece with the sole intent of creativeness. 'In dreams I see your face ~ in reality I feel your taste'. Sensually inviting in every way to that realistic world of make believe. loved the setting, love the feel of well chosen words! Skillful composition.

[Richard🖌]

Aw, Lovely Kitty!
Your reviews are always so beautifully constructed and filled with understanding, praise, and expressed appreciation … poems in themselves, and this one especially touches.

Thank you ever-so sincerely and gratefully … warmest hugs to your sweet heart! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[kitty]

Motivated by sincere feelings that come from the heart. Thank you for always sharing your talent and imagination that oft takes readers to that higher plain. Your comments humble me. Thank you Sire!

[Richard🖌]

I equally share sentiments, Kitty. : )