When Venus Gives Her Sign (light romance)

When Venus Gives Her Sign (light romance)

A Poem by Richard🖌
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Ballad (in 8/6/8/6 syllable-count, iambic meter, and an abab, cdcd, etc; rhyme-scheme)

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When Venus Gives Her Sign


Last eve within the still of night,

of You I dreamt a dream …

we strolled together, hands held tight,

beside a silver stream.


There, on the mossy bank we laid

neath summer’s sil’very moon,

as all around us, fireflies played

to nightingale’s low croon.


A’blush above the stratosphere,

wink knowing stars so wise,

that every lover who’s lain here …

danced starlight in their eyes.


An olde familiar song composed

by Nature long ago,

began to harmonize, transposed

our moonlit scene below.


So changed their ambience that then,

a charm on us was cast;

such was its spell so deep within,

electric charges passed.


Magnetic as the universe,

too strongly to resist …

such deeply-primal, sweet coerce,

made certain that we kissed.


So dearly ’twas when touched our lips

we flowed from two to one;

our universe into line slips …

a miracle’s begun.


As auras blended, breaths did, too;

warm blood began to flow

into all places  … sparks then flew,

and, now, I think we know;


when deep at night warm dreams ensue

and planets all align,

there’s no resisting what’s come true ~

when Venus gives her sign.



Richard W. Jenkins

© 23 Sep 2018

© 2018 Richard🖌


Author's Note

Richard🖌
Painting, oil on canvas: Cupid Undoing Venus' Belt, by Sir Joshua Reynolds, 1788

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What surprises me about this poem, as many other poems from You, how You even speak "sciencely" of/about love, hinting with hidden thoughts here and there, all uttered with Your ever gentle loving dreamy and fine poetic voice. Your poems have this profound touch of primal prim love and even life, where nothing was there but earth and sky, they waft with the ever first breath...

it makes me happy to read something happy from You :) (: .

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Hi, Lovely Light! : )
I cannot thank you enough for blessing me so sweetly with the touches o.. read more



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This needs setting to music. Something gentle and ethereal. Simply lovely x

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

5 Years Ago

Aw,
Thank you so warmly, Sarah Dear.
Your beautiful words of of sheer enjoyment and pr.. read more
I love poems written in a form. In a way, it sets the poet free. The richest kind of imagery.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Dear Lady-Poet, most gratefully and warmly, for reading this little caress of romance.read more
Some things cannot be stopped hat must come to pass shall surely be- a love as deep as thee- will find a place to be free- truth to self will lead us where we are meant to be - beautiful like always🌹

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Dear Kelly,
Most humbly and gratefully yours, I bow in gracious thanks.

Warmes.. read more
Really, really very well done. Great imagery.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Hey, Kevin,
Thanks for the read and pats on the head review.

May you day be fi.. read more
This is lilting and a lesson of sorts for me in terms of the iambic meter. Your words and phrases are pleasing to this reader's mind and I absolutely love your title and last stanza! Lovely piece, Richard. I enjoyed reading :D

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Hi-ya, Dear Doc!
Thank you ever-so warmly for such sweetly inspiring words of praise, recogni.. read more
i think this is marvelous Richard .. simply so very romantic .. i was swooned into the spell .. the story line is delightful ..so easy to place myself as the guy ..and with definite young ladies as youth was our standard and Venus' call heard in an instant ... this line read a little rough for me "the universe into line slips" maybe something like "the universe sublimely slips" .. too many mood emotive lines and words and scenes to mention ..another all around fine poem of wonderful wonderful romance ..may it never be another silly love song ;)))))))))))
E.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

"Syncopated" … hm?
Well, "our universe "into line" slips …" is iambically correct:
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Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

i just knew i used that word wrong ;} love ya bro!
Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

B I G S M I L E !
I had to come back to read this one again & to get my Richard fix! 😍, Mary Jo

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Again, Mary Jo,
I am most appreciative for your continued enjoyment and support.

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Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Thank you warmly and sincerely! ⁓ Richard : )
Passion needs a heaven-sent opportunity to bloom...This poem is a breathtaking tribute to love and to the Goddess herself. Softly sensuous is the imagery and the passion builds up ever so gently under the serene, silvery moon and at its crescendo, makes the verses blush ever so subtly and hearts go faint with anticipation. The concluding line reinforces the theme beautifully, dear Richard. I could read the poem any number of times and still be enthralled, each time!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Sighhh!
Oh, Divya Dear,
I so miss You … no one writes poetry or poetic reviews the b.. read more
Still trying to catch my breath! Love it - mary Jo 💖

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Mary Jo,
Your passion and exuberance for this piece is warmly gratifying, and to h.. read more
How about, 'so changed their wondrous ambience,' same syllable count, and with just slight emphasis on 'changed,' the same effect is achieved, especially when read aloud; And wondrous seems to go rather nicely with the delightfully traditional language employed.

Beccy.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

That would be wonderful, Beccy, except for the rhyme scheme, and don't forget to read the instructio.. read more
Beccy

6 Years Ago

I think that is perfect.
Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Big S M I L E !

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