DÉJÃ VÜ (loneliness)

Free Verse (raw and imperfect)

~ DÉJÃ VÜ ~

~ fate often returns us to loneliness ~

It seems as though

I've been here before

but

I know I haven't

It's just my mind that's old

and

I am here and now and alive

Waiting for someone new

who

can dust away the cobwebs of time

who

can light the cold silver lamp of infinity

to hot quick embraces

My soul is like ribbons in the wind

to catch an unknown eye

and

adorn someone's deserving desires

The corner where I stand

is dark and cold

but

the room is within my view

and

I can be passed by discreetly

No one knows my solitude

for

it is completely mine alone

but

I'm reminded constantly

of it's disadvantages

by

the world around me!

Tell it now

And tell it well,

Of the man who lives

In a constant hell

Where

there is no escape

to

anyone anywhere anytime

for

lack of heart

I hold no grudge now

for things that were then

I knew from the past

it was soon to end

I felt like I'd been there before

but

I'm still breathing

and

I have all my fingers and all my toes

My conscience is

a slight bit colder now than before

still

I believe in someone somewhere

with a new one in their hand

to

attach tightly to my being

Thanks for my corner

the world was mine

and

slid through me

I am no longer surrounded

by a rose shimmer

only merciless gray

with

no entertainment

of

LIFE

Sometimes it seems as though

happiness never came my way enough

Too busy with other people

... I guess ...

I know my thoughts are

as thin as the air

and

my life only

as shallow as my mind

but

I do feel this way

and

if only for the moment …

I now “know”

I've been here before!

Author's Note

Illustration from Pinterest.

Honest, constructive, and well-meant critique is always welcome! : )

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Hmmmm- returning to the turning of time entertained with the thoughts and truths transcending all levels to reach the here and now- what we feel when the space is wide and there’s nowhere to hide only in the shadows of your mind reminding you of your thoughts and choices - you alone have brought- words of wonder and great significance to life as it controls the many if the few-🌹

[Richard🖌]

Dear Lady-Poet,
How wonderfully I enjoy the deeply spiritual beauty or your reviews, from the very essences of your conscious mind, heart, and soul as they smoothly delve-in to touch my core.

Another brilliant interlude in meaning shared with you … thank you ever-so sincerely, Kelly ⁓ Richard

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

My pleasure always🌹

[Lisasview]

Good morning Richard,
Going through your list of Free Verse poetry... This one was so deep in its meaning that I read it several times.
Each time I came up with different thoughts...
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Greetings to thee, Lady Lisa 🙏

One must agree with you … there are many facets within the nuances of déjà vü to find oneself immersed in when considering various possibilities of having been there, done that, etc; or simply sensing the feeling that will often set them off thinking or imagining they have … many reasons to consider the mysteries of déjà vü.

Thank you for another interesting read and review! ⁓ Richard 🤔

[Lisasview]

I have experienced deja vu quite often in my years here... Love it..but it always makes me wonder.read moreI have experienced deja vu quite often in my years here... Love it..but it always makes me wonder.
L

[Unspoken poet]

Thanks for my corner
the world was mine
and
slid through me

Love this part, thanking the corner that life gave to you, The world lets you live here on borrowed time, and you have time you needed to let go of and it came through when you weren't ready. I see this as a struggle that we all face....

Awesome write...

[Richard🖌]

What a deeply meaningful review, Kay-T.
It's good to see you back.

Thank you for sharing your take on this poignant poem of ever-recurring loneliness! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Unspoken poet]

i was having server issuses, I am hoping it is fixed now

[Richard🖌]

I hope so, too, Kay-T : )

[Ally Ann]

I have been thinking about deja vu a lot recently, as it has increased its occurrence in my life. Your poem touches on the inability to understand the feeling and eventually coming to the conclusion that, yes, you have been here/felt this feeling before. I really liked the line "sometimes it seems as though/happiness never came my way enough/too busy with other people. I really related with that line, and I feel as if many other people would as well.
Additionally the line that says "it's just my mind that is old" reminds me of a conversation I often have with my friends about deja vu. We like to think that deja vu comes from remembering experiences in your past life, and those who have older souls tend to have it more often. Maybe you and I are old souls, just as many writers seem to be. Thank you for sharing this poem!

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Ally Ann,
I am so pleased you dropped by, and even more-so you were able to find something among my pieces to relate to in such an ironically coincidental way.
In my life, too, I share deja-vu with you in so many visions of reoccuring moments. I wonder if yours are vivid and impacting, too?
From what you've shared, Ally AnnI think you may be right, we are olde souls -- You and I.

Thank you so much for this beautiful review you've gifted a rather lonely Free Verse, Ally Ann … for some reason, it doesn't feel so lonely anymore! ⁓ Richard : )

[Onlyme]

The human condition we all share at some points in our own lives. That is ever present and can show up anytime. But also the inner compassion and love for oneself. To move beyond that dreaded moment in times. that pull you down and try to lock you up in chains again. From the inside. But determination, self-will and self-love win the day again.

[Richard🖌]

Quite insightful, Dee,
I always enjoy reviews where one takes time to actually say something meaningful and pertinent about the poem the've read, like you did here for me on this rather dark, poignant composition.

Your commentary has me in deep thought, and I enjoy that … a big thank you hug! ⁓ Richard : )

[¿]

Life's circle or boomerang always makes us end up in a deja vu...it's a feeling of lone time I feel....tasting the solitude and darkness...and gradually realising....this actually happened before...Am again happy to read yours...thanks for sharing....got late to visit here but still😊

[Richard🖌]

Ah, Sweet Tahsin,
I adore the mystery in your eyes.
Your keen mind, deep spirit, and open heart really do understand and feel my emotion, don't they?
How very wonderful you relate with me in the essence of this poignant poem of endearing, returning loss.
If we believe in love, we cannot give-up, but keep trying with new and brighter eyes each and every time, eh?

Bless you, Dear Poetess, your gentle kindness … hugs to you! ⁓ Richard : )

[¿]

All is my pleasure...this place has got something warming...everyday I need to have a stroll here...right here @writerscafe!! And to read the wonderful poems of hundred genres from great poets like you...And they're always heartedly welcome... ((smile))

[¿]

And, that's on my mind from now!😊

[Richard🖌]

On mine, too, Tahsin. ; )

[¿]

((Smile))...:)

[kitty]

Life has a way of repeating itself, even when faced with new and different experiences. We see 'life' through different lenses each time: how we manage these experiences is up to us. We can learn from them in the progression of lifes cycle or we can continue making the same mistakes oblivious to the effect they have on people. Many of us can so relate to this profound piece!

[Richard🖌]

Aw, it's a sad one alright, M'Dear.
True, though, the more we go through the newer eyes we grow and the further and deeper we can see and perceive into and of life, love, emotion, and most all aspects humanly possible for living and feeling to expose and teach.
You're so right, too, about how we either learn to keep from repeating our mistakes or become their daunted victims.

A deeply, most appreciated, and understood review, Dear Kitty.
Thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully … hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

[kitty]

May your path through life be a clear, bright and happy one m'lord! You have taught us much by your words of wisdom and love. Thank you.

[barleygirl]

I might do better to review only your less-structured poems, like this one. It seems to me that your message is more distinct & original & expressive when you aren't focused on crafting some exacting poetic style. I know form is what you're famous for here, but maybe a teensy bit of ego gets in your way as you show off your many claims to "form fame" . . . with that said, of course I love this poem. I love the way you describe the title word as you start your poem & then loop back around to this concept. I love the way you pour out tones of loneliness, but not in a "poor me" way, rather with a reluctant acceptance. I have often felt these very things about my own lousy chances in the arena of love. You convey the way it feels so well (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Margie! : )
I hope you know i am equally grateful and appreciative for your comments on any of my efforts you deem worthy of reviewing, as I know of no one who gives them better.
I written in every genre of poetry for so long they all are equally natural to me. My thought is that for every thought, emotion, feeling, etc; there is the perfect form to express it, much in the way a musician selects the notes, rhythm, beat, sounds, and tones, the instrument(s) in arranging a song to deliver it's intended meaning(s).
In my defense: While composing a piece, I become so involved in it the thought of ego is not a conscious feeling; though, I admit that once it is done I do take a certain pride in admiring my earnest labors. Also, because it is for my readers' satisfaction and enjoyment I write and present my work to the best of my ability, and that it appeals to and inspires others to try forms, too.
I hope the view that I'm "showing-off" does not keep you (or anyone) from reading and enjoying all of my poetry, Dear Margie, or any forms I compose in. Many do not know that proper Free Verse is as much a poetic form as any other, with its own set of rules.
I do know that I favor some forms over others, but I give all of them my best effort.
Thank you, Dear Margie, for your deep insights shared, for your praise, appreciation, and expressed enjoyment of this rather poignant piece.
I've respect your views, reviews and candor … thank you most gratefully for reading and commenting on this work for me … hugs to You, too! ⁓ Richard : )

[Leo]

Brilliant introspective poem..saw myself in your words..especially:
"No one knows my solitude
for
it is completely mine alone
but
I'm reminded constantly
of it's disadvantages
by
the world around me!"..indeed
That was fantastic!

Check out unchained u might like it

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Poet,
Your words in praise and relatability more than amply gratify my earnest efforts to write and please my creative peers! ⁓ Richard

[Leo]

my pleasure

[Chris Shaw]

This poem is filled with sadness. The reality is that life isn't a bunch of roses, that it can be lonely and unhappy for many people. How do you find happiness? By keeping life simple and looking for pleasure in the little things in life. Happiness is elusive. If you chase it, like a butterfly it will fly away. I enjoy the composition, the accompanying image is superb and the way you expressed your feelings.

Thank you for the read.

[Richard🖌]

H, Lady Christine!
How wonderful to receive such deeply introspective thoughts of depth and understanding from a poetess so aware and alive in her caress of spiritually compassionate mind, heart, and emotion, and to realize you've found that inspiration on one of my humble pieces is gratification I could only have earnestly hoped for.
Your analogy of Happiness and butterfly I shall keep and recall.
I was once asked how important I think it is to be happy, and after a moment of consideration answered this way: "It is not nearly as important to me that I am happy, as it is that I am not unhappy." ; )

Bless you, Dear Lady-Poet, for sharing You with Me! ⁓ Richard : )

[Richard🖌]

"Hi" … LOL!

[Chris Shaw]

Hi Richard, you are very welcome.