Chaiku … a Chinese influenced Japanese form (see tutorial in Author's Note).
Inspired by Cherrie Palmer's poem "Chilled Wine Warm Kiss" http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Cherrie_Palmer/399760/
"CHAIKU"
A Chaiku is Chinese rhythm in Japanese reserve.
Rhyming is permitted, but is not required.
A verse is 4 lines of 4-syllables each,
no limit to the number of verses.
Topic matter about anything.
Photography: Copyright credits to Ron Dudley.
Well-intended critique and helpful comments are always welcomed. : )
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The last stanza:
Rejoice sweet bird
in endless song,
thrilling one’s soul
the whole day long. Sounds so enchanting. Bird tweets are the most peaceful sounds of nature, hearing them in the morning when I just wake up makes me feel good, its a sign of spring and summer because in fall and winter we don't hear them.
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
So beautifully spoken, Aura Dear,
Your poetic voice sings ever-so brightly unto my he.. read moreSo beautifully spoken, Aura Dear,
Your poetic voice sings ever-so brightly unto my heart's grateful ears.
Bless you and hug you with warmest thanks galore! ⁓ Richard🖌
'Mockingbird'
Richard,
Within the lovely simple framework of four meter and four stanzas this Chaiku style ( I really appreciated your author's note by the way) is something that would be fun to do. I loved this ode to the wonderful Mockingbird and this poem has brought him to life and given him personality. so very fun to read.
'You mimic pure
voices of all...
birds, insects~~each
wilderness call.'
Thank you for writing things like this for I love God's creation so.
Blessings, to you dear writer friend.
Kathy
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
Hi, Dear Lady Kathy 🤗
How wonderful the sensation of being loved, enjoyed, appreci.. read moreHi, Dear Lady Kathy 🤗
How wonderful the sensation of being loved, enjoyed, appreciated, and praised … as only You know how.
I, too, agree that the Mockingbird and Chaiku fit harmoniously together like song and soul.
The lines you've highlighted are my favorite, as-well; great minds and hearts think and feel so much alike.
With warmest hugs 'n happiest thanks! ⁓ Richard🖌
2 Years Ago
Hey there Mr. Richard you are just so welcome. Hope your doing good and have some good plans for yo.. read moreHey there Mr. Richard you are just so welcome. Hope your doing good and have some good plans for your life and summer.
Kathy
Such a lovely poem celebrating the mockingbird. I love the rhyme and the flow of it. I bought your book, Richard and, am enjoying it immensely. I hope to learn more about poetry from it. Thank you for being here! Temp
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
Ahhh, Temperance Dear🥀
You speak to my heart-of-hearts when praising the incompara.. read moreAhhh, Temperance Dear🥀
You speak to my heart-of-hearts when praising the incomparably skilled Mockingbird, and the love of my most earnestly spieled poetry.
Oh, my gracious lady, how wonderfully blessed I am to know you've held the warm, soft feel my of humble book in your hands. No doubt your aim to learn from this comfy book will prove fruitful for you … there is much for a passionate poetess to gain and enjoy within its pages.
Thank you for buying my book and for your wonderful review … big hug! ⁓ Richard🖌
What a lovely poem; the Mocking bird is so talented; not only does he have his own unique song but can mimic the songs of all birds...he is brave. strong and watches all from his perch atop a tree; indeed a graceful bird with power and "Joie de Vivre"
Well done Richard
Best, B
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
Hi, Lady Betty ♫
OOooo, I love it when a lovely poetess speaks French to me … joy.. read moreHi, Lady Betty ♫
OOooo, I love it when a lovely poetess speaks French to me … joy of life, indeed!
Such wondrously gracious things you say about the Mockingbird, too … it's as though he sings in your heart.
With hugs 'n blessings of warmest thanks! ⁓ Richard🖌
2 Years Ago
I'm blushing! You're very welcome Richard!!!
Best, B
The last stanza:
Rejoice sweet bird
in endless song,
thrilling one’s soul
the whole day long. Sounds so enchanting. Bird tweets are the most peaceful sounds of nature, hearing them in the morning when I just wake up makes me feel good, its a sign of spring and summer because in fall and winter we don't hear them.
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
So beautifully spoken, Aura Dear,
Your poetic voice sings ever-so brightly unto my he.. read moreSo beautifully spoken, Aura Dear,
Your poetic voice sings ever-so brightly unto my heart's grateful ears.
Bless you and hug you with warmest thanks galore! ⁓ Richard🖌
You should post in on your site, if you've not .. read moreA, somewhat, entertaining poem, Bill,
You should post in on your site, if you've not yet done so.
2 Years Ago
'Somewhat' would be the operative word there. If I posted every little poem I write as a review I wo.. read more'Somewhat' would be the operative word there. If I posted every little poem I write as a review I would have as many pages as Jacob. It's fun to find understanding in other's poetry by responding to it with a poem. Once in a while I post a collection of them and I'll throw this into one of those for a laugh.
dearest Richard... you play a Poem like an Old Violin
with it tucked under your Chin.
The harmony of your voice and the Mockingbird's song
blends like Red Berries and Sunflower seeds on a
Summer's Eve. Be strong and fly with the Wind. gently, Pat
Posted 2 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
2 Years Ago
Why thank you, Pat 🌸
For reading this humble Oriental piece, and for the gifted se.. read moreWhy thank you, Pat 🌸
For reading this humble Oriental piece, and for the gifted sentiments in the form of your own lovely poem.
(Rejoice sweet bird in endless song, thrilling one’s soul the whole day long.) Beautiful...as is the entire post! When I lived in Florida these beautiful birds entertained me many an hour. Thanks for an introduction to the Chaiku. I must try to write one soon. ~Sharon
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
G'day, Miss Sharon 🌸
Ohhh-YES! There's nothing quit as entertaining as a mockingbi.. read moreG'day, Miss Sharon 🌸
Ohhh-YES! There's nothing quit as entertaining as a mockingbird's seemingly endless array of songs. One day, I sat for over an hour with eyes closed in my easy chair and window open listening to a mockingbird sing the most amazing sounds, without a single repeat … sighhh*
I truly hope you'll give the Chaiku a chance … it's so lovely and easy a form to compose in.
This is such an endearing tribute to the Mockingbird. All in perfect meter and rhyme! A very interesting new form, I learnt today. Would love to try it some day. I am not an expert enough to critique this poem, only appreciate. A simple format such as this always interests me. Thanks for sharing, dear Richard 😊
It is so nice to see you this fine day, to receive such enjoyably grat.. read moreHi, Divya 🍂
It is so nice to see you this fine day, to receive such enjoyably gratifying sentiments of my mockingbird poem, and to be left feeling warmed and appreciated by one of the site's premiere poetesses.
What a joy it would be to have the privilege of reading a Chaiku rendered by your eloquent pen. Please, let me know if/when you compose in this easy as a sunny morning form.
You are ever-so welcome, Divya … thank you for this gem of a review.
With happiest hugs to thee! ⁓ Richard 🍃
2 Years Ago
You're welcome, dear Richard. This is a delightful poem to read. Yes, I'd love to try out a Chaiku.... read moreYou're welcome, dear Richard. This is a delightful poem to read. Yes, I'd love to try out a Chaiku....Hopefully, very soon. It would be a pleasure and a privilege to have your guidance. 🙋♀️ Thanks again.
2 Years Ago
A delight it will be, Divya, and you're sincerely welcome. 🙏🏼