life thirst (love's need)

Japanese Sedoka … for Jasmine

Author's Note

Japanese Sedoka
Syllables 5/7/7-5/7/7, etc; no limits to number of verses,
no capitalization, punctuation, or rhyme; about any topic,
an easy and enjoyable form to compose.

Painting by: Suzanne Mitus-Uribe, oil on canvas.

Well meant, constructive critique and comments are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

ah! wow. Love's due seems quite forthcoming.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Frederick,

For another read and comment! ⁓ Richard🖌

[lightsong]

As Earth needs both rain and Sun, as life needs its breath, its rain to quench, its Sun to warm, Love, beautifully with glowing hope You've said it.

[Richard🖌]

I thank you, GH, warmly and sincerely for the sweet, endearing words of understanding and praise you've so appreciatively blessed this humble little verse.

Happy hugs to You* ⁓ Richard : )

[Chris]

An interesting form to think through...

Using it DOES lead to serious consideration of the power of various languages and how they in turn interact within the limits of their country's poetic forms.

[Richard🖌]

Yes, it's true, Chris,
I, too, find the Japanese forms interesting to contemplate how the sounds and meanings would fit in its native language, as the rules are in a Western mode of writing, rather than the tonal sounds of this form in Japanese, and I often wonder how my unrefined smatterings might sound to them.

Thank you again, my friend! ⁓ Richard : )

[Susan 🦋]

This is very pretty Richard. I did a little review of a Japanese Sedoka... very nice imagery. My favorite line..would be the last one. Rounds this little poem up quite well!

[Richard🖌]

Susan Dear,
I like that line, too. : )
Whatever line suits your fancy, I am just jumping with joyful glee that you selected this little number to read and review.

Thank you, Susan*
I feel bless with beams of sunshine … smiles 'n hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Tazeen Ahmed]

I see how simple things could be intensely portrayed, giving a perfect image and feel of it.
"bestowed loves warm need its due."
-divine
-flawless
-creative

[Richard🖌]

Ohhh, another gracious Tazeen review!
How wonderful of you, M'Lady Faire.
Gosh, your interpretation gifts such a deep and meaningful touch to this simple piece, and the line you've highlighted tells me you feel the true essence its tender moment.

Your three-word praise fills me to the brim … thank you so very sincerely, Dear Poetess 🌻 ⁓ Richard : )

[Maria]

That was so heavenly and full of much peace. Loved it!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you so thankfully, Maria! : )
How happy and warm it makes me feel to know you selected this lovely little piece to read and review for me, and I cannot begin to tell you how much it rewards me to know you love anything of mine.

Warmest hugs, Maria ⁓ Richard : )

[Maria]

You're welcome Richard. Always a pleasure to read your writing.

[Richard🖌]

And, it's always a pleasure to receive your visits, Maria ✨

[Maria]

I am most humbled by your words, Richard, but thank you kindly.

[Richard🖌]

My words to you are sincere, Maria.
You both warm and humble me, as-well, and you are welcome a hundred times over! : )

[Maria]

Haha you are so sweet. Well hope you have a great evening over there in Texas

[Richard🖌]

And, You in beautiful Virginia, Maria … kiss the hilly, forest moon for me tonite.

[Maria]

Haha..if I find one I will do my best

[Richard🖌]

I know you will, Maria.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Oh Richard, the gift is appreciated...
Especially wonderful.....

Jazzy..♥

[Richard🖌]

I am so very happy, Jasmine,
to have pleased you … I had so hoped it would.

Thank you for liking it … hugs 'n smiles! ⁓ Richard : )

[J. J. Nightingale]

Hugs and Smile back to you...