Broken Stars⁓* (wish anew)

English [Shakespearean] Sonnet

Broken Stars~*

Last night, 'cross ebon skies stars softly rained;
'pon morning-tide, swept in their shattered shards.
O’er all the land dead stardust darkly stained …
strewn everywhere, like castaway discards.

’Twas only yester night, sweet, love-kissed eyes
reflected every bright glint each star shined …
tonight, the moon looks lonely in its skies,
old universe turns on … it’s paid no mind.

Wait! Are those tiny glimmers ~ far away?
Up there! You surely see they are alive …
few minute sparks that missed the falling fray,
from whence new lovers’ wishes will derive.

O’ broken stars, we thank you from each heart,
for all our gifts … before your sad depart.


Richard W. Jenkins
©2017

Author's Note

Electronic Illustration: Courtesy Google Images

Well meant comments and critique are always welcome. : )

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Good morning Richard,
I loved every word ~ every line of your beautiful Sonnet. "sweet, love-kissed eyes" Oh my goodness.
You pulled me into your thoughts once again ...
Just went back to read it once again and again I was immediately pulled in.
Flowed so well ... as all your poems/sonnets do.
I do so love LOVE Sonnets...with a hint of longing/sadness.
This could have been written in Shakespeares time... really a timeless piece.
Loved it,
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Good morning, Lisa ✨

I am thrilled you found such favorable allurement in the verses of this unusual-themed Sonnet.
Sprinkle-in a pinch of romance, and voila! Ya got cherself a happy heartbeat.

Happy Autumn! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
Finally finding a few moments of quite to respond...
and, you are most welcome.
Lisa

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Nicely written lines. thanks for sharing your talent.

[Richard🖌]

Why, sure thing, Lady-Poet.

I thank you most warmly and gratefully for reading me, and for the nice compliment! ⁓ Richard : )

[Chris]

It liked the tonal qualities of each line and the interweaving rhythm...

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Chris … it is my pleasure to share with you! ⁓ Richard : )

[Chris]

Glad I paused...good "seeing" you

[Richard🖌]

Likewise, my friend! : )

[Tazeen Ahmed]

The style and structure quite resembles that of Shakespeare.The picture is mesmeric and the poem is of course elegant and spellbinding! I love the rhyming here.

"few minute sparks that missed the falling fray,
from whence new lovers’ wishes will derive."

It has a tinge of past and a classic structure that really makes it a tempting read.
-Impassioned
-beautiful
-prolific

[Richard🖌]

Ohhh, goodness-ME!
Tazeen you have truly blessed me with a big broad smile from all your delightful attention … I feel so very special today! : )
I very much enjoy your deep and meaningful understandings and feelings, expressed so eloquently, in a way I see and feel what you do, too.
That you "love" anything about my humble efforts is gratification beyond any I could have expected, but I keeping them close-by, in my shirt pocket.
It is amazing … you've chosen the exact lines that are my favorites; it is nice to see eye-to-eye with someone who really gets it.
I love the maturity in your voice … it is softly beguiling.

The tree words you chose to elucidate this verse, I would use to define you … thank you ever-so warmly, Little Lady-Poet ✨ hugs to you! ⁓ Richard : )

[Tazeen Ahmed]

You too made me feel special! I appreciate your effort in expressing gratitude...
(hugs)

[Richard🖌]

You make it my pleasure, Tazeen : )

[Relic]

A great poem with striking images Richard. I miss looking up to see stars swept up in the sky. Now I only see black skies. Shame.

Wonderful work.

[Richard🖌]

Relic,
Thank you ever-so gratefully for sharing your take on appreciation of, and praise for this unusual little Sonnet.

Bless your days with warmest kindness! ⁓ Richard : )

[George Coombs]

Beautifully written Richard, you have grasped the shakespearean sonnet well and indeed I had a sense of Shakespear as I read, as though this might be being spoken by one of his characters,a well chosen image which complimented the writing to perfection, excellent work

[Richard🖌]

Oh, it's such a wonderfully positive review you've gifted this unique little Sonnet, George … I thank you exuberantly!
Your words in comment, praise, and relatability are a poem in themselves, and I, too, thought the image befitting the poem's ambience.

Thanks again, My Friend … you've made my day brighter! ⁓ Richard : )

[George Coombs]

Your welcome richard

[Coyote Poetry]

Gentle, beautiful and strong words my friend.
"O’ broken stars, we thank you from each heart,
for all our gifts … before your sad depart."
I enjoyed the complete poem. The above lines stood out to me. Thank you Richard for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Richard🖌]

Thank you profusely, John.
When one of the best Free Verse and Prose Poetry writers onsite reads and praises one of my English Sonnets, I know I've, indeed, done something right.

With most sincere blessings and thanks! ⁓ Richard : )

[Coyote Poetry]

You did well and you are welcome my friend.

[Maria]

Beautiful, and well written. Truly am thankful you took the time to read my story. Your poems are full of much emotion and thrill. Excellent expressions and very easy to visualize as well. Great job and it be great for you to get these in print some day too.

[Richard🖌]

Maria,
Isn't imagination a most wondrous miracle?
We can have literally anything the way we want it to be, and even share it with others, if our imaginations can perceive it and our skills are such they'll convey vividly enough to be felt, seen, and bought to life.
How amazing writing would be if we all possessed that power, eh?
See? You've inspired me! : )
I was honored and compelled to read your story, Maria … I could not stop!
A book of my compositions has been in the works for the past 12-months … some day soon!

Thank you warmly and gratefully, Dear Authoress … hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Maria]

Wow, really, that is great to hear! and yes, you have a point. And it saddens me how, these days, it seems, that many fail to see the beauty in writing and even reading. I was a book worm from the age of 3, and in the end, my passion and love for reading, became something, that my parents, took for morbid, and twisted, and got to the point, that they would hide my books and not let me get more than one book from the public library.
Yet, in the end, I have always had a heart for the Arts in itself, and reading led to writing.
I do hope your work compilation can be completed and sponsored as well.
Good day to you, Richard.
humbly,
Maria

[Richard🖌]

You turn sharing into joy-filled eloquence.
A good day to thee, as-well, Maria ✨

[pia]

Im not the best at poetry
But your stuff !! Is just amazing
Im a new writer so i guess reading your work will also help me a lot
Thank you so much !!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Pia, ever-so warmly and gratefully! : )
You are so very correct … as a new writer, reading my work, and that of many other fine artists on here, will definitely help you a lot by offering examples of a wide variety of forms, styles, and a virtually endless array of creative ideas.
With your already fine composing potential and creative imagination, your poetry (and story writing) will develop as your career grows bigger wings and takes to flight, and if you'd ever wish it, I will be thrilled to assist you in any way you might like.
Your exuberantly effulgent praise gifts this humble bard a sighing swoon I shall feel for a long time to come … thank you so warmly, Lovely Authoress! ⁓ Richard ; )

[andrew mitchell]

Broken stars, just comets in passing to make a wish for better tomorrows came to mind. A lovely write Richard and as always disciplined in the art of poetry writing.

[Richard🖌]

Dear Andrew,
Your expressed enjoyment and appreciation of this little astral homage to stars and romance, in the Sonnet form, has gifted a broad smile to this olde bard's mug! : )

Thank you sincerely and gratefully, My Fine Friend … bless you your kind and giving heart! ⁓ Richard