Life's Bright Memories ⁓ (dreamers)

Kyrielle Form … a cowrite by Great Aunt Astri and Richard

Life’s Bright Memories

Some things were once hard to accept,

those words that hurt were so austere.

With heads ablaze, we deeply wept …

life’s memories lie gently here.

I sit and think of all the things

we mused about, not always clear;

our thoughts so vast, we dreamed like kings.

Life’s memories lie gently here.

That which we did, dare we believed;

were they the echoes our minds fear?

Time heals dire deeds when hearts deceived …

life’s memories lie gently here.

Defending folks' and friends' true rights,

we've tried to build a world with care,

and often worked through long, dark nights;

life’s memories lie gently here.

Then, as the sun begins to set,

I look around with love to share;

acceptance takes away regret,

life’s memories lie gently here.

A better world we strove to  build …

in ways we did that hold us dear;

one with all love and laughter filled.

Life’s memories lie gently here.

When all around we look and see

an atmosphere of brighter cheer;

was what has caused it, "You and me"?

Life’s memories lie gently here.

Cowritten by Great Aunt Astri & Richard

©2017

Author's Note

"Be sure to visit Great Aunt Astri's pages and read her excellent original poetry!"
http://www.writerscafe.org/greatauntastri

Image courtesy of Pinterest
Constructive critique and well-meant comments are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[MsJewel]

Form poetry can be difficult as the structure can take away from the creativity and emotion. However, you two nailed this one and made a difficult form actually look easy. I am blown away. You stuck to the form while writing a delightful creative piece. An awesome collab! Julie

[Richard🖌]

Oh, Dear Julie,
Thank you ever-so warmly and fulsomely for your lovely words of praise and expressed enjoyment of this, my first, cowrite on here; and, what an amazing poetess it is with.
I'm thinking there are but a few on this site whom I could have successfully composed with in this rather challenging form … You, most definitely, included. : )

Brightest blessings, Lovely Poetess✨ ⁓ Richard

[lightsong]

anything that includes "You" should turn into perfection, each verse here spoke a thought, a memory that came or yet to come, the treasures of our life, if people, things or feelings, the "dare" to keep dreaming is the highlight of this poem, (oh just noticed the title "dreamers"! :) yes perfect title).

Lovely collaboration, the photo speaks a lot, it feels like the ancient past, yet, that big yellow flower glows like the Sun, that bird, never stop looking and flying into that glorious Sun, he should be an example for us, and of course the last verse can't be more gratifying to me :)

Thank You both, I will be sure to leave her a review on her page, You can read if You wish to :)

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, GH!
What a beautifully written review you've gifted this rather fantasy-like gem inspired by our fine lady-poet Astri.
I think you're right, too … what would we have left to look forward to if we quit dreaming.
I like the photo, too (I picked it), and the "perfect" title was Astri's choice.
This was my first cowrite on this site, but I could not refuse this fine lady. : )

I am sure Astri will love your review on her page, as I do on mine … hugs and warmest thanks to Thee🍂 ⁓ Richard

[pragya gaur]

Great work Richard Ji...I need to learn a lot from you and Great Aunt Astri Ji ... Perfect one....

[Richard🖌]

Thank a bunch, pragya,
Your praise is warmly appreciated, as is your expressed need to learn from out example.

Brightest wishes! ⁓ Richard : )

[pragya gaur]

Thanku so much Richard Ji

[Maria]

Beautiful, just beautiful.

[Richard🖌]

Than you, Maria, just thank you! ⁓ Richard ; )

[George Coombs]

Clear and well crafted writing; a lovely image, excellent work

[Richard🖌]

Thank you sincerely, George!
Your praise and expressed enjoyment of Astri's and my combined efforts are truly gratifying … blessings! ⁓ Richard : )

[George Coombs]

Your welcome Richard,

[Great Aunt Astri]

At last, here I am with my review. The poem is very pleasing, Richard. The last verse, the resolution, is, as we agreed, all yours.
I am so glad you gave the poem a happy ending. and it was "You and me" who wrote the poem. Dare I say it, I feel quite proud, and very honoured that you gave me the opportunity to co-write with you. Many thanks.

[Richard🖌]

What a lovely joy you truly are, Astri,
How sincerely blessed I am to have had the opportunity arise to cowrite with you on this amazingly beautiful Kyrielle … you're a true pleasure to share with, and I dearly loved it.

Many hugs 'n smiles to you, Lovely Lady-Poet, and I thank you from my heart! ⁓ Richard 💛

[SSKaitlyn]

This was just, amazing. I wish I could rate it over 100. Everything from the style, to the words and subtle but graceful rhyming, it flowed incredibly well. I'd read that over again, and definitely share it. Honestly a little jealous of the skill and beauty. And I have no critics to offer, I'm sorry.

[Richard🖌]

I thank you immensely, Dear Poet, for both, Aunt Astri and Myself, for your truly gracious and encouraging review in praise and expressed enjoyment of our lovely cowrite.

That you have nothing no critical advice to offer is even more inspiring; it's the kind of response every poet shares their efforts for, in hopes of receiving … thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard : )

[SSKaitlyn]

No worries good sir, happy to give the feedback the poem deserves, and it sure deserves a standing ovation. And so do you and Aunt Astri.

[Richard🖌]

You're a sweetheart … thanks! BLUSH*

[SSKaitlyn]

Haha thank you! Now you have my cheeks flushed.

[Richard🖌]

Ummm! ; )

[Hyacinth]

Okay. wow. I was not prepared for that, though I should be.

You guys, this took my breath away. The description and the detail and just the way it flows, this piece is beautiful.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you Lovely Poetess!
Your lovely words of praise, enjoyment, and appreciation are all we hoped for when coming together for this cowritten Kyrielle.

You're more than simply sweet … big hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

[Susan 🦋]

Another splendidly beautiful poem that seems to dance upon the page, fills the heart memories and longings, and even a lesson! "acceptance takes away regret" ahhhhhhhh this is so perfectly flowing!!!.. poetry that comes alive, hits my soul and has me pondering the words...soaking them in and just smiling!. Thank you!!!!

[Richard🖌]

Dear Susan,
Each word from your lovely voice leads to a poem within itself … one that swathes the heart and soul with deep and abiding appreciation, praise, and the fullest sensation of sheer enjoyment.

Whom could wish for more from their reader?
Aunt Astri and I both love it so … warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard ; )

[Susan 🦋]

Love it.🌸🌹💐

[Ardra]

Then, as the sun begins to set,
I look around with love to share;
acceptance takes away regret,
life’s memories lie gently here.

A better world we strove to build …
in ways we did that hold us dear;
one with all love and laughter filled.
Life’s memories lie gently here.

Beautifully done both of you.... :)
Enjoyed reading it...

[Richard🖌]

Awww, Ria!
Thank you ever-so gratefully and warmly for the wonderful words of praise … how happy it makes me feel to know you enjoyed this dreamy little effort.

Hugs 'n happy smiles to You! ⁓ Richard : )