A Billion Stars⁓* (dreamily sensual)

Rhyming Quatrains in 10-count.

Beyond yon heavens, mountains, seas, far land,
in deep, yearning dreams, warm touch of her hand.
A wind, softly as silk, whispers my name;
light as a feather … moist lips light a flame!

Most often it’s sad, the nightingale’s song …
this night it sings all I’ve dreamt of so long.
Sensations abound behind yearning eyes,
passion’s searing breaths, graze quivering thighs.

Adrift in the night, flowed deep through my core,
her dark, sparkling eyes that promise far more.
Caressed senses, gyrations of fervor …
her carnal tastes, I cannot  help savor.

Across my chest slides hair, dark as the night,
upon me she lays, proportioned just right …
o’ life divine, how my heart soars to flight,
as she takes me within … warm, wet, so tight.

The night sky awakens, planets surround,
in all our places, sensations abound …
soaring ethers of lovemaking’s high crest,
midst a billion stars … two dreamers so blessed*


Richard W. Jenkins
©2017

Author's Note

Picture: courtesy Google Images

Helpful, well-intended critique is always welcome! : )

Reviews

[Susan 🦋]

2nd attempt to review this poem, hopefully I won't delete it too. Richard, please PLEASE teach me to write like this!!! I love how your words just flow so effortlessly. But, more importantly...how you get such emotions across. Honestly, I read each line and the anticipation builds!...starts way down deep...just can't be contained..Your poetry is so vibrant, so emotional, so heart tugging...I feel every delicious word and thought expressed. It's like when you have finished reading an awesome book....and ya just sit back and savor all the good parts...wishing you could read more. That's what you do...that feeling of "give me more" :-) Oh I love your poetry. Thank YOU..

[Richard🖌]

2nd or 22nd, this is an amazing review, Susan!

Susan,
You already write equal to this, some of your pieces better, and if you were reading them as anyone other than yourself, you realize what I'm saying!
Still, I'm not letting go such inspiring praise and appreciation, and, "Oh, I love your delicious review!" ; )

Thank you, Dear Poetess … with warmest, most grateful hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Susan 🦋]

You are so sweet! :-) ( don't get the happy tears flowing!) Thank you and you are very welcome. :-)

[tracey]

it makes me want to write a good poem

[SJ Mullins]

Where have you been, darlin'? It is like you dropped off the face of the earth. I found this piece to be very erotically sensual, but not in a crude way like I usually write it. I wish I could write so eloquently. I agree with Susan Capozzi about how your words flow so effortlessly. I find it to be a very poignant write. Makes me wish I was that special lady. ;) Loved it. More please! :D

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Susan, I'm here, M'Dear! : )
You've such a delightful knack of warming and rewarding a bard for his hope-filled efforts.
Also, it thrills me to the bone knowing you and susancapozzi see eye-to-eye, when it comes to how you feel about my poetry … what more could I want than two gorgeous poetesses enjoying me in such an enthralling way, eh? ; )
Do deserve such a poem as this, M'Lovely Lady … warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

"You do deserve such a poem as this" … sheesh, you got my fingers all tongue-tied! LOLOL!

[SJ Mullins]

Lol, glad to know you are still alive and kicking.

[Einstein Noodle]

you say "dreamily sensual" and i think it is all that .. maybe even a click or two toward the erotic ..but all in good taste says i ..it get so personal i blushed just a bit ...;)
romantic ... so romantic ..and reminds me of the longings of youth before one has met "the one" ..and has shared the experience you speak of ..sighhhhh! your poem sets me heart to dreamin' ... :)
E.
ps. the pic is incredible ...i can't help but stare at it ..enjoying the vastness of the stars and the enigma of the tangled bodies ;)

[Richard🖌]

Yee doggies, Gene!
This is humdinger of a review, My Friend, filled to the brim with everything an aspiring bard wants to hear.
I agree, it is a wee bit sizzling, but on the tender and sweet side of romantic softness, eh?
Knowing my efforts have actually touched and pleased a peer deeply, is gratification beyond expectation, but it certainly is these which I always most hope for when sharing.

Thank you, My Fine Friend … sunshine for your day! ⁓ Richard : )

[Einstein Noodle]

absolutely sir ... and back at ya!

[Angelheart1]

There are no words that I can share to explain how this piece makes me feel, all the way into my core! The "special lady" who inspired this piece should definitely be breathless and very appreciative after reading your words. Sir, you do have a knack for writing exactly what women want to hear. Angelheart🌹

[Richard🖌]

Well, bless you your lovely heart, Dear Angel! : )
I think your words spoke with wondrous expression, reaching-in to touch an appreciative bard's grateful heart.
I'm thinking you may be right, that "she" did appreciate my words, too.
Your own voice to men speaks rather satisfyingly, as-well … big, warm, hug of thanks! ⁓ Richard ; )

[Angelheart1]

You are very welcome and its been my pleasure to read your words Sir. 😊

[Zenovia]

If you ask me to choose which is my favourite lines among these I will be still confused...

All of it is just as wonderful as you Richard ;)

The lady seem to be a lucky one to have had the honour to be bestowed with such pure ecstasy from your side.

But I liked these lines somehow it sums it's up all in a short sweet manner.

Most often it’s sad, the nightingale’s song …
this night it sings all I’ve dreamt of so long.

The flow of the poem is like the velvet flowing of the skin.
The wording are just like the sweet chocolates that melts in mouth
The taste of love still lingers in the mouth after reading your breath taking beautiful creation...
Very glad to read it again to find a new star every time I read it.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Zenovia,
Your "wonderful" compliment, alone, makes composing and sharing this warming piece feel truly worthwhile and deeply rewarding.

Pleasurably, the lines you've highlighted were among my favorite to compose … it's nice to be in harmony, eh?

Your closing metaphors express such beauty and appreciation; thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully, Dear Poetess … hugs to you!! ⁓ Richard : )

[Richard🖌]

It is a pleasure sharing with you! ; )

[Zenovia]

Are you just making it up the harmony part :P

yes its good to be in harmony... in words and thoughts .. makes a lot of difference in life

warm hugs to you too riche rich :P (new nick name for u - one of my fav cartoon haha now dont go digging after it)

Zenovia
xo

[Dave]

What indeed a "special lady" she must be! John you leave nothing to the imagination since the picture you paint with your words is so complete. If she is the object and you of her affection I envy you highly.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dave, for such a delightful review.
She is a special lady, indeed, but I'm not the object of her affection … LOL!
And, don't call me "John" … ha-hahhh!

Bless you, My Friend! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dave]

I don't know where I got John from! Sorry. I'm getting frightened though, it seems I've been doing that a lot lately.
Take care - Dave

[Richard🖌]

Not to worry, Dave … it's just your passion revitalizing … LOL!

[Dave]

OOOOH!! Okay> I guess it's alright then. LOL

[Richard🖌]

....👌 ....

[Great Aunt Astri]

When I read your comments on Einstein's poem (helped by Richard) I was going to read one of your poems and give you a bollicking! But when I read this poem I thought it was rather nice. Rhyming Quatrains! Original and unstilted rhymes, and a soft gentle rhythm. Lovely. Iw ill read more of yours!

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Lady-Poet!
Thank you for selecting this warm little piece to read and comment on, for your encouraging praise and enjoyment, and for sparing me the "bollicking" (not sure what it is, but it sounds like something I'd rather not receive) … LOL!
Did wonder why, though, you'd want to give me one for helping our friend, Einstein?

In any event, I'd be proud if you read more of mine … bless your day! ⁓ Richard : )

[Great Aunt Astri]

I've just looked up the word you would rather not receive, in my Collins English dictionary. It does have several meanings. I quote;-
BOLLOCKS or BALLOCKS, taboo slang . pl n 1 the testicles .>n 2 nonsence; rubbish >interj 3 an exclamation of annoyance, disbelief, etc (Old English, beaullucas )
I did not know you knew Einstein . Is he alright?

[Richard🖌]

: )
Well,
Whatever it means in the dictionary, I know you meant something when you said it, and that's the meaning I do not understand … I just don't know if it was meant in a caressing or a paddling way, and if it is the latter, why?
Gene and I have been friends ever since I come on here a few years ago, reviewing and enjoying each poetry,,and I've taught him a few forms every now and again he wanted to learn, and helped him with a number of questions he had about this and that in poetry.
As far as I know, he's doing quite well these days, but we don't really get into that very often, anymore.
He is a great guy, and we seem to like and enjoy one another … that's about it. : )

[Great Aunt Astri]

take no notice of what I say! I have got to the age when I can rattle my umbrella down the rails, and wear purple! And what I say, isn't always what I mean. But I read your poem again and got quite transported. Couldn't quite emake out the image though .... my eye sight is not too good.

[Mr.Writer]

This is amazing! It's beautifully written! My favorite lines were...
"Adrift in the night, flowed deep through my core,
her dark, sparkling eyes that promise far more.
Caressed senses, gyrations of fervor …
her carnal tastes, I cannot help savor."
Those words made me shudder, filling in emotion to my heart and soul. This was a touching poem, and has what a reader would desire :)

[Richard🖌]

Thank you very much, Dear Poet, for your excellent review and encouraging praise.
I like that verse, too! : )

I'm so proud you enjoyed this piece … blessings! ⁓ Richard

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)