In Eternity ⁓ (heart-whispers)

Unmetered Quatrains in abcb, defe, etc; rhyme scheme.

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In Eternity ~

When above tall stately pecans,
yon pale moon rises in ebon skies,
cattails dance soft to gentle breezes,
as rushes wave their last goodbyes …

there comes a yearning in my heart
that nothing can quite quell …
I wish you’d changed your mind,
beside me, stayed a longer spell.

The whippoorwill, she beckons,
a song forlornly blue …
from every naked branch, your voice
whispers to me, it’s true.

Swooned turnings of my heart,
each beat a lonely tune.
I know I’ll never smile again;
for, you left me too soon.

With lowered head I wander
down paths we strolled before …
with every stone your feet upturned,
remembering all the more.

'Midst fragrant rows of evergreen
we swore our lovers’ vows,
carved our names into the bark
… made love beneath their boughs.

I hope you’re happier than me,
that your new love treats you sweet;
and, every chance he has he takes
to make your dreams complete.

’Pon Autumn leaves I see your smile,
golden waves of grain your hair …
in each sunlit cloud on high,
your image lingers there.

In lovely faces on every street,
I look to see if it is You.
With each new breath that I take in,
you’re in it breathing, too.

No doubting now, nor can there be;
for, nevermore I’ll be alone.
All through my veins your essence flows,
deep in my core, through every bone.

Each gifted kiss, in wondrous bliss,
was Paradise in harmony …
love’s embers ignite our soaring flames,
to forever burn ~ in eternity.

Richard W. Jenkins
©2017

Author's Note

Something from last Autumn the impending Winter chill must have inspired … it may be a bit too long for some.

Helpful, well-intended critique and comments are always welcome …
thank you most warmly and sincerely, for sharing your time with me! : )

Reviews

[Surya]

"there’s an aching in my heart
that nothing can quite quell …
I wish you’d changed your mind
and stayed a longer spell"...glimps of hope...
And your poem was quite impressive with your words and a good feel to your loved one...:)

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Surya,
It is an honor to receive your choice of verse and meaningful comments!
read moreThank you, Surya,
It is an honor to receive your choice of verse and meaningful comments!
I like that tongue … LOL!

Blessing to you! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

Blessings to you! ⁓ Richard

[Surya]

It's my reading and am blessed to have such words...

[Helen Crutchett]

I have absolutely no desire to give any 'critique' on this Richard! How can one do that when everything about this is awesomely gorgeous with poignant feelings and longing. Bravo!

Helena

[Richard🖌]

My warmest, most grateful thanks, Helena! : )

Your words leave an inspiring glow! ⁓ Richard

[writ rajat]

i learned so maNY new words in this poem thanks for using them will try in my new poem

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Writ,
It is always rewarding and inspiring to know one of my efforts has offered a reader something of value.

May you days be filled with sunshine! ⁓ Richard

[Einstein Noodle]

its just not OK to be "OK" with such a deep lasting love that is lost to another ..i'm sorry sir ..its just not natural ;)
gently rolled with the first half or so speaking of nature .. i took it to be of the fading fall and coming winter and ones feelings on that alone ..so your turn struck home ..and i says to meself ...oh noo he has lost his love! :((((( and so it is ..then your closing heeps another surprise on me as the guy is all ok with the whole deal ..he's a saint says i! a saint! so well done! fine non-trite rhyming and tho you say its unmetered the flow is very well done ..it has a definite sense of rhythm .. i was taken on a bit of a roller coaster in the reading ..nice one sir!
E.

[Richard🖌]

Gene,
Your a wonderfully insightful, and caring reviewer, and I am so fortunate you read my poetry and share your feeling about them.

Thank you ever-so gratefully, Dear Friend! ⁓ Richard : )

[Einstein Noodle]

fortunate for all that you are here at the cafe as well sir .. love your stuff! :)

[Great Aunt Astri]

Well done Noodle ... you keep him in check!

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha! ...Auntie! we do need each other don't we? :))

[Great Aunt Astri]

Us old 'uns must stick together!

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .............

[Susan 🦋]

Heart tugging piece...I "see" it all with your exceptional ability to write a story within a poem..I want to walk that path and tell that heart broken soul..everything will be all right. oh this one brings up memories for me....sigh,,essence flowing?..yes, at times it truly seems as it does. lovely poem Richard,but ohhh the feelings oozing from this. i have to sit back and remember,,it's a poem.

[Richard🖌]

Beautiful review, Susan,
There is no higher reward for a poet than knowing his readers can relate to there work and actually feel with their emotions that which it expresses.

Bless you with a thousand hugs of thanks, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard : )

[Michael G. Smith]

Ah, the ghosts of love always haunt the heart and soul. You've captured the yearning for the past in every verse and stanza.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Michael! : )
What joy you make writing and sharing my humble efforts.
Many blessings, My Fine Friend! ⁓ Richard

[Michael G. Smith]

And the same back to you Richard.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"In Autumn’s leaves I’ll see your eyes,
golden waves of grain your hair,
in each and every cloud on high …
images of your shape appear."

I loved the metaphors used in this one, Richard! Quite a vivid imagination it casts in my mind. Your words really bring a sigh. And the ending is beautiful.
A lovely write 😊😊

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Yumna! : )
Such words of praise, knowing, and appreciation of my humble efforts from a poetess of your caliber is truly gratifying beyond my meager words.
I love the verse you've selected, because it assures me we're on the same wavelength, and what more could a hopeful olde bard wish for that that?
Happy smiles 'n hugs! ⁓ Richard 🤗

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad of us being on the same wavelength 😊
You're most welcome, Richard! It's always a pleasure delving in your works 😊😊

[Paul]

Such a beautifully written poem. What a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Paul,
For selecting one of my pieces to read and praise, and for your gracious thanks.
It is always my greatest joy to wrote for and share with my fellow-poets … many blessings, My New Friend! ⁓ Richard : )

[Isabella Ivy]

*sighing. O, how lovely! This rhythm feels like dancing. Nothing forced or complicated, just two lovers waltzing through the trees as easily as the breeze itself. What a sweet place to visit, this good poem. It felt too endearing for relating to the sorrow he was feeling (sorry). The taste of sweet love overshadowed it. Thank you for the pleasure of reading your words! Isabella :)

[Richard🖌]

Oh, Isabella!
You so warmly spoil me, M'Lady … but I'm keeping everything you said! ; )
read moreOh, Isabella!
You so warmly spoil me, M'Lady … but I'm keeping everything you said! ; )
Thank you, as-well, dear lady-poet, for brushing my heart so softly 'gainst your own … hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[Richard🖌]

(the rest you can't read)
Thank you, as-well, dear lady-poet, for brushing my heart so softly 'gainst your own … hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[Isabella Ivy]

The pleasure was mine!

[Richard🖌]

Not all of it … wink*