In Eternity ⁓ (heart-whispers)

Unmetered Quatrains in abcb, defe, etc; rhyme scheme.

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In Eternity ~

When above tall stately pecans,
yon pale moon rises in ebon skies,
cattails dance soft to gentle breezes,
as rushes wave their last goodbyes …

there comes a yearning in my heart
that nothing can quite quell …
I wish you’d changed your mind,
beside me, stayed a longer spell.

The whippoorwill, she beckons,
a song forlornly blue …
from every naked branch, your voice
whispers to me, it’s true.

Swooned turnings of my heart,
each beat a lonely tune.
I know I’ll never smile again;
for, you left me too soon.

With lowered head I wander
down paths we strolled before …
with every stone your feet upturned,
remembering all the more.

'Midst fragrant rows of evergreen
we swore our lovers’ vows,
carved our names into the bark
… made love beneath their boughs.

I hope you’re happier than me,
that your new love treats you sweet;
and, every chance he has he takes
to make your dreams complete.

’Pon Autumn leaves I see your smile,
golden waves of grain your hair …
in each sunlit cloud on high,
your image lingers there.

In lovely faces on every street,
I look to see if it is You.
With each new breath that I take in,
you’re in it breathing, too.

No doubting now, nor can there be;
for, nevermore I’ll be alone.
All through my veins your essence flows,
deep in my core, through every bone.

Each gifted kiss, in wondrous bliss,
was Paradise in harmony …
love’s embers ignite our soaring flames,
to forever burn ~ in eternity.

Richard W. Jenkins
©2017

Author's Note

Something from last Autumn the impending Winter chill must have inspired … it may be a bit too long for some.

Helpful, well-intended critique and comments are always welcome …
thank you most warmly and sincerely, for sharing your time with me! : )

Reviews

[Kerra]

Pon Autumn leaves I see your smile,
golden waves of grain your hair,
in each sunlit cloud on high,
your image lingers there.

Love this verse so much, love the imagery of the sunlit cloud on high.
Awesome wording....

[Richard🖌]

Awe, Dear Kerra🌟

You spoil me, but I love it! : )
How charming of you to select my favorite verse to highlight … great hearts dance to the same tune.

Thank you ever-so warmly for your beautiful review … hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Caroline B A Maguire]

Amongst the rows of evergreen
we swore our lovers’ vows,
and carved our names into the bark
… made love beneath their boughs.

Perfect.. a beautiful love poem.

[Richard🖌]

Ah, Lady Caroline 🌾

Coincidence that you've embraced my favorite verse as your own(?) … I wish not. ; )
"Perfect is a mighty big word, ya know. But, from You, I'm keeping it, along with your "beautiful".

Beauty is as beauty says … thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Caroline B A Maguire]

No such thing as coincidence I always say...please do keep the words I have used as I meant them most sincerely..even your reply is poetry..sweet and lovely and too kind sir..

[Richard🖌]

My kind words are inspired by the sweet delight of your own.

[Avelina Devi]

That was quite the inspiration. The flow was consistent until the last word. I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Nyx 🥀

Ever-so warmly and gratefully for selecting this rather extensive homage to a lover's eternal remembrance.
That you were inspired by and enjoyed my humble effort is gratification to an olde bard's most earnest hopes, indeed.

You are as beautiful as your beautiful compliment.
Happy hugs to You! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[heavenscentgirl1]

This is such a heartfelt piece that touched me deep into my core. It speaks of lost love and a broken heart that will never mend. Thank You for sharing your heart with us Richard.
MJ 😇

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Mary Jo 🥀

One never knows when they'll come across something written in such a way it seems to speak of their depths in such ways it's as though the words were stolen from their own thoughts, feelings, emotions, their very memory and life.

It has been a pleasure to share my heart with you! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Enchanted-Raven]

Such a beautiful touching read...really enjoyed :) x

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Lady-Poet! : )

It is my pleasure to serve you for your enjoyment! ⁓ Richard

[J. J. Nightingale]

I thought this was about the seasons.. but then it was about a love lost.... then Eternity, seems like the person is in heaven ..? Which ever, it is beautiful, and touches this heart...

Jazzy

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Jasmine!
Yes, I guess it can be a bit confusing how I title my pieces … I never was much good at it, but I try. : )
Somehow, I always know you're going to look for the good parts, though … beyond the tiles, of course.

Your words touch my heart, too … hugs! ⁓ Richard

[J. J. Nightingale]

Sorry... . it was a wonderful piece..!.... HUGS

[Cryingkate]

It must be lonely where you are. Hardly anyone can dig into your writes and help you improve. Sitting on that mountain of Symbol, Rhyme and Meter must ache Poor Richards Bones. But then again he just sits and negates a poem to take home.

100 %

UPDATE TRY TO FIX>>>>>> Richard, OH MY, , I can't even erase that above, It's just so badly spoken I had to leave it for an example of how far off one can think and write the opposite.
As I was saying below. I NEVER meant what I said. What I meant was your out of our league when it comes to Poetry. You know I have nothing but respect for you and your poetry. You sit on top of the mountain and possess it. You just simply own it all. There is never anything to critique. How do you critique perfection? That is what I meant.. I have been very busy going in many directions but am trying to connect with Writers cafe friends again. I miss you all and have been gone so long. Perhaps My mind is tired? I don't know but, I'm shocked myself at how badly I expressed my thought there. ((((( Hugs)))) to you Always.

[Cryingkate]

Oh Dear, Just re reading that and it sounded terrible.... I didn't mean to at all. I did not express my full thoughts at all. What I was thinking was Richard is such a Great Poet that he really can't be reviewed very well. I like others I see just can't find the words for every poem he writes he sits on top of the mountain of perfection. Thank You so much for the sigh. I'll try to fix that

[J. J. Nightingale]

:).....................................

[Richard🖌]

Aw, M'Dear Kate 🍂

i wonder what might have happened to my response to your most enthrallingly personal and deeply touching review?
I can distinctly recall relating how your words moved me with their blessings and caresses of praise of my poetic prowess … how you reached deep within to touch my every sensitive place of gratitude and thanks ever-so sweetly and gently … I never took anything you said in any way but beautifully open, honest, and generous to the 'nth degree.

From our years past, when first we met, I've always thought of you with only the deepest, most sincere admiration, and joy.

My warmest, most thankful hug to you, M'Lovely-Hearted Kate, for thinking as highly of me as i do of You! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Great Aunt Astri]

Hey! I wrote a poem like this!!!!! But yours is much better ... real poetry, full of feeling. you are a real master of words. Wonderful!

[Richard🖌]

I appreciate you so very much, M'Lady! : )
There is nothing more inspiring and encouraging a bard than having his poetry so warmly received and praised.
What is the title of your poem like this one(?) … I would love to review it for you.
Many grateful blessings and a warm hug of thanks to thee! ⁓ Richard

[Great Aunt Astri]

Well, I have not posted my poem ... it is still a bit tender. When the winter chill has worn off a bit I may well post it .... and I'll let you know!

[Richard🖌]

Please, do.